Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be slightly more natural and precise. Start with a short clear topic sentence, correct the field name to 'materials science engineering', and optionally add one short supporting detail (e.g., year of study or where you study) using a linking word. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I am a student studying materials science engineering. Currently I am in my third year at university, where I focus on biomaterials and nanomaterials.

提案: Avoid hesitations and give a full, natural answer. Use a clear topic sentence and add one specific detail (e.g., company type or what you do there) with a linking word to make the answer coherent.

例: I work in Dongguan, Guangdong province. I am employed at an electronics manufacturing company where I help with materials testing and quality control.

提案: Reduce repetition and organize ideas with linking words. Start with a direct opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'and'. Avoid fragmented phrases like 'Cheaper.'

例: Yes, it is a good place to work because there are many job opportunities and salaries are relatively high. In addition, living costs such as accommodation are lower compared with nearby cities, so I can save more money.

提案: Clarify mistakes (e.g., 'police' seems incorrect) and remove hesitations. State your opinion clearly, explain why with two specific supporting details, and use linking words like 'also' or 'because'. Correct vocabulary: probably 'policies', 'precautions', or 'facilities'.

例: Yes, I like my workplace because the company has good safety policies and a pleasant working environment. Also, my colleagues are friendly and supportive, which makes daily work more enjoyable.

提案: Be concise and structured: start with a clear statement of your plan, then add one or two specific steps or reasons using linking words like 'so' or 'by'. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and correct phrasing ('a higher-paying job').

例: My future plan is to find a higher-paying job so I can improve my living standard. To achieve that, I plan to gain more experience in materials testing and take a short course in failure analysis to strengthen my CV.

× I am a student in material science engineering.

✓ I am a student in materials science engineering.

The adjective 'material' should be pluralized to 'materials' because the field is commonly called 'materials science'. Use the established compound noun 'materials science engineering' or better 'materials engineering' for correctness. Suggestion: say 'I am a student in materials engineering.'

× I I work in Guangdong province, Dongguan city.

✓ I work in Dongguan City, Guangdong Province.

The duplicated 'I' is a repetition error; reordering the place name to 'City, Province' is the standard English format and capitalize proper nouns. Remove extra words. Suggestion: say 'I work in Dongguan City, Guangdong Province.'

× Of course there are there are many opportunities to work and the salary is very high and the accommodation fee is so low. Cheaper.

✓ Of course, there are many job opportunities, the salaries are high, and accommodation costs are low.

The sentence repeats 'there are' and uses fragmented sentence 'Cheaper.' Also 'salary' should be plural 'salaries' when speaking generally, and 'accommodation fee' is better as 'accommodation costs'. Combine clauses with commas and conjunctions for fluency. Suggestion: use a single coherent sentence and correct pluralization.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The examiner's question in the transcript used 'Would you like...' but the student should answer with 'Do you like...' The student's response later must match tense; however, here the sentence is fine as a question form. No grammar change needed for the question; if correcting the student's reply context, use 'Do you like the place where you work?' as standard present-tense question. Suggestion: use 'Do you like...' for current preference.

× Of course the police are ver The police have a good cover, a good environment. The my my workmates are so kind with me.

✓ Of course. The policy is very good; the workplace has a good environment. My workmates are very kind to me.

This segment has multiple issues: 'police' appears but likely intended 'policy' or 'place'; unclear word 'ver' is a typo for 'very'; 'The my my' is duplicated and incorrectly uses 'the' before 'my'. Also 'kind with me' is incorrect preposition; use 'kind to me'. Suggestion: clarify intended noun (policy/place) and remove duplicates and incorrect articles, and use 'kind to me.'

× My future work plans are L looking for a more salary job and uh earn more money.

✓ My future plan is to look for a higher-paying job and earn more money.

The sentence mixes forms and contains typos: 'L' should be 'I' or part of 'looking'; use infinitive 'to look' after 'plan is'. Use 'higher-paying' rather than 'more salary job', and keep parallel structure: 'to look ... and to earn' or 'to look ... and earn'. Suggestion: 'My future plan is to look for a higher-paying job and earn more money.'