Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện câu trả lời bằng cách trả lời trực tiếp, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và tránh lặp từ. Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I am a student...), sau đó bổ sung thông tin cụ thể (tên trường/loại trường, khoảng cách từ nhà, thời gian học) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc. Tránh lặp từ như “near that near my house” và chỉnh thì cho đúng (I have been studying there for four years).

例: I am a secondary school student. I attend Riverside Secondary, which is about a ten-minute walk from my house, and I have been studying there for four years.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và ngắn gọn rằng bạn không làm việc, sau đó cung cấp thông tin rõ ràng về việc học. Tránh nói lặp lại, sửa ngữ pháp (I am a student / I study at...), và dùng liên từ để nối các ý. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu ngắn gọn để tránh lộn xộn.

例: I don't work; I'm currently a secondary school student. I study at Greenfield Secondary, which is quite close to my home, so I usually walk there.

提案: Phải hiểu câu hỏi và trả lời phù hợp (nơi học hay làm việc). Tránh lặp và nói thiếu trật tự. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (Yes, it's a good place to study) rồi giải thích với lý do cụ thể. Sửa ngữ pháp: teachers teach their students carefully, I feel motivated and disciplined here.

例: Yes, it's a good place to study because the teachers are very attentive and explain lessons clearly, so I feel motivated and disciplined to work harder.

提案: Câu trả lời tương đối rõ ràng nhưng cần dùng thì và ngữ pháp chính xác (I don't, I don't like it). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể và ví dụ. Sửa các lỗi như 'they are often now meeting' → 'they often have meetings', 'make' → 'makes'.

例: No, I don't like it. The place is often noisy and crowded, so it's hard for me to concentrate; for example, people often have meetings next to my desk, which makes it difficult to finish detailed tasks.

提案: Ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng cần dùng cấu trúc chính xác và từ vựng cụ thể. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (After I finish...), nêu kế hoạch từng bước (high school → university → degree → career) và cung cấp chi tiết về ngành học hoặc nghề mơ ước để câu cụ thể hơn. Dùng thì tương lai chính xác (I plan to / I hope to).

例: After I finish secondary school, I plan to attend a reputable high school and then go on to university. I hope to earn a degree in computer science so that I can pursue a career as a software engineer.

× Examiner: Do you work or are you a student? Student: Yes, I am a student.

✓ Student: No correction needed.

No grammatical error in the student's reply. The pronoun use is correct. (No change required.)

× I study at secondary school near that near my house.

✓ I study at a secondary school near my house.

The original sentence has redundant words and missing article. Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'secondary school' and remove duplicate 'near that near'. Suggestion: 'I study at a secondary school near my house.'

× I have been studying there for four years.

✓ I have been studying there for four years.

This sentence is correct. Present perfect continuous is appropriate to express an action continuing up to now. (No change required.)

× Examiner: Where do you work?>

✓ Examiner: Where do you work?

Only punctuation error: remove the stray '>' character. The grammar is fine.

× Well, I don't work, but I would say that I'm I am study in a secondary school.

✓ Well, I don't work, but I would say that I'm a student at a secondary school.

Incorrect verb form and redundancy. 'I'm I am study' is ungrammatical. Use noun 'a student' or 'I study' with correct structure. Also add article 'a'. Suggestion: 'I'm a student at a secondary school.'

× Which way which world near my house.

✓ It is near my house.

The original fragment is unintelligible and lacks proper structure. Replace with a clear, simple clause indicating location: 'It is near my house.'

× Is it a good place to work?

✓ No correction needed.

Question is grammatically correct given examiner's possible context. (No change required.)

× Yes, is it, is it a good place to study?

✓ Yes, it is a good place to study.

The original repeats and misorders the clause. Use standard affirmative word order: subject + verb. Suggestion: 'Yes, it is a good place to study.'

× Because teacher there teach their student very carefully and I feel very a lot of motivation and discipline act here.

✓ Because the teachers there teach their students very carefully, and I feel a lot of motivation and discipline here.

Multiple issues: missing definite article 'the' before 'teachers', subject-verb agreement ('teachers teach'), plural 'students', misplaced 'a lot of' and wrong noun 'discipline act'. Use 'a lot of motivation' and place 'here' at end. Suggestion: 'Because the teachers there teach their students very carefully, and I feel a lot of motivation and discipline here.'

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ No correction needed.

Question is grammatically acceptable as a general polite question. (No change required.)

× No, I don't. I find the workplace quite noisy and crowded so it's hard for me to concentrate.

✓ No, I don't. I find the workplace quite noisy and crowded, so it's hard for me to concentrate.

Original is mostly correct; add a comma before 'so' to join clauses properly. Tenses are appropriate.

× For example, they are often now meeting next to my desk which make it difficult to finish detailed tasks.

✓ For example, they often meet next to my desk, which makes it difficult to finish detailed tasks.

Word order and tense are incorrect. Use simple present 'often meet' for habitual action. 'Which' clause needs singular verb agreement 'makes' referring to the situation. Add comma before 'which.'

× What are your future work plans?

✓ No correction needed.

Question is grammatical and fits context. (No change required.)

× When I finish secondary school, I've learned to attend a good high school and then continue my study at university.

✓ When I finish secondary school, I plan to attend a good high school and then continue my studies at university.

Original uses incorrect tense 'I've learned' and wrong verb choice. Use future-intention expression 'I plan to attend' or 'I will attend'. Also pluralize 'studies'. Suggestion: 'I plan to attend a good high school and then continue my studies at university.'

× I hope to pursue a degree in my favorite subject so that I can work in my dream career.

✓ I hope to pursue a degree in my favorite subject so that I can work in my dream career.

Sentence is grammatically correct and appropriate for expressing future intention. (No change required.)