Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details (job title, workplace, length of service). Reduce hesitations and correct minor grammar (e.g., 'I have been there for 11 years').

例: I am a nursing officer at PGIMER, Chandigarh, which is one of India’s most prestigious medical institutes. I have been working there for 11 years, mainly in the emergency department where I manage patient triage and basic care.

提案: Answer directly with accurate, concise information. Correct location errors and grammar: use 'I have been working there for 11 years.' If necessary, give one specific detail about the department or location, and avoid mixing city names.

例: I work as a nursing officer at PGIMER (Postgraduate Institute of Medical Education & Research) in Sector 12, Chandigarh. I have been based in the surgical ward there for 11 years.

提案: Give a clear opinion then support it with specific reasons or examples. Avoid vague or repetitive phrases like 'every organization is very good there.' Use linking words (because, for example) to structure the answer.

例: Yes, it is a very good place to work because the hospital maintains high professional standards and provides regular training for staff. For example, we have monthly workshops on patient safety which help improve our care.

提案: Start with a direct statement, then give two specific positive aspects. Avoid filler words and unnecessary repetition. Use cohesive devices like 'because' and give concrete examples of what you enjoy about the job.

例: Yes, I really like my workplace because it is well maintained and staff are supportive. Also, I find it rewarding to help patients recover — for instance, last month we discharged an elderly patient who had improved significantly after our care.

提案: State your plan clearly and give one or two specific reasons or steps. Use correct tense and reduce hesitations: 'I want to do a master's degree' and explain timeline or obstacles briefly. Use linking words like 'however' or 'therefore'.

例: I plan to pursue a master's degree in nursing in the next few years. However, because of my current job commitments I could not study locally, so I am preparing to apply for a program in Canada and will aim to enroll after I secure a study leave.

× I am working in as a nursing officer in PGI AME Chandigarh.

✓ I am working as a nursing officer at PGI AME Chandigarh.

Use of prepositions: 'working as' is correct for role; use 'at' for an institution or place. Remove the extra 'in'. Use 'at PGI AME Chandigarh' rather than 'in PGI AME Chandigarh'.

× That is uh, India's most, one of the India's one of the most prestigious institute and I am been there since 11 years.

✓ That is one of India's most prestigious institutes and I have been there for 11 years.

Article and noun number: 'one of India's most prestigious' requires plural 'institutes'. 'I am been' is incorrect; use present perfect 'I have been' for an action continuing to present. Use 'for 11 years' to indicate duration.

× I am working as a nursing officer there.

✓ I work as a nursing officer there.

Present tense: Both 'I am working' and 'I work' can be correct; however for a permanent job 'I work' or 'I have been working' is better. Keep consistent with present simple for routines or present perfect continuous for duration.

× I'm working as a nursing officer in India's most prestigious institute that is PJMA Chandigarh and I am working there since 11 years.

✓ I work as a nursing officer at India's most prestigious institute, PGI AME Chandigarh, and I have worked there for 11 years.

Possessive and article: Use 'at' for institution. 'that is PJMA Chandigarh' is better as apposition 'PGI AME Chandigarh'. Use present perfect 'have worked' with 'for 11 years' to show duration up to now.

× It is instituted in the Chandigarh Sector 11, Chennai.

✓ It is located in Sector 11, Chandigarh.

Preposition and place names: 'located in' is used for places. 'Chandigarh Sector 11, Chennai' mixes cities; Sector 11 is in Chandigarh, not Chennai. Use correct order: 'Sector 11, Chandigarh.'

× It's a very good place to work there and every organization is very good there and every employee work there as per rule and regulation.

✓ It's a very good place to work, and every department follows the rules and regulations; every employee works accordingly.

Pronouns and agreement: Remove redundant 'there'. 'Organization' likely meant 'department' or 'organization' but context fits 'department.' Subject-verb agreement: 'every employee works' (singular subject requires singular verb). Use plural 'rules and regulations.'

× They follow the rules and do their best.

✓ They follow the rules and do their best.

This sentence is correct; pronoun use is appropriate. No change needed.

× Yes, I like very much my working place because it is very neat and clean and we come, we go to the, we go there for, to serve the patients and help them to, uh, come out from their sorrows and illness.

✓ Yes, I like my workplace very much because it is very neat and clean, and we go there to serve patients and help them recover from their illnesses and sorrows.

Pronoun and word order: 'like my workplace very much' is correct word order. 'Workplace' is one word. Remove redundant fragments 'we come, we go to the, we go there for'. Use 'go there to serve patients'. Use 'help them recover from their illnesses' instead of 'come out from their sorrows and illness.' Use plural 'illnesses' for multiple patients.

× In future I want to go for masters.

✓ In the future I want to do a master's degree.

Future tense and article: Use 'in the future' and 'do a master's degree' or 'pursue a master's degree.' 'Go for masters' is nonstandard.

× Uh, firstly I tried in my local country but I uh, cannot go umm, take a mission in there because due to my job.

✓ First, I tried in my local country, but I could not go there because of my job.

Tense and modal verbs: Use past 'could not' to match 'I tried'. Remove 'take a mission in there' which is unclear; use 'go there'. Use 'because of my job' for cause. Avoid filler words.

× So I planned to study in Canada in my later years future years on.

✓ So I plan to study in Canada in my later years.

Future tense and redundancy: Use simple present 'I plan' or 'I am planning' for future intention. Remove redundant words 'later years future years on'. 'In my later years' is sufficient.