Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更简洁有条理，保证句子语法正确并减少重复填充词（如 uh, um）。开头直接陈述身份，然后用一两句具体且相关的细节支持（例如学习内容、兴趣原因）。注意时态和搭配（e.g. "I have always been fascinated"）。

例: I am a student at the University of New South Wales, majoring in Biology and Biodiversity. I chose this major because I have always been fascinated by nature and wildlife. The course involves many lectures, laboratory sessions and research projects, which I find challenging but rewarding.

提案: 回答应直接回应“在哪里工作”，并把未来偏好分两部分说清楚。避免语法错误（如 "If I got" -> "If I had" 或 "If I get"），用连词连接观点并提供具体理由和例子。减少不必要重复。

例: I don't have a job at the moment; I study either at home or attend classes on campus. If I could choose a job, I would prefer freelance work because it would give me flexibility to learn a new language and pursue hobbies like painting and photography.

提案: 回答要更有逻辑：先给总体评价（好/不好），然后用具体原因支持。注意词汇和发音写作（"respect" 的名词形式是 "respect"，但语境可说 "out of respect for the teacher"）。避免重复和犹豫词，使用连接词（because, therefore）。

例: I don't think studying at home is ideal for students. When I attend in-person classes, I'm more disciplined because out of respect for the teacher and the structured environment I focus on lectures and lab work instead of browsing funny clips online.

提案: 回答要明确立场并解释原因，避免自相矛盾（先说喜欢再说不高效）。用两到三句表达利弊并得出结论。修正语法（"I get more time for myself", "it doesn't make me more productive"）。

例: I enjoy studying at home because I have more time for myself and can choose when to attend online classes. However, it doesn't always make me more productive compared with attending in-person classes, where I'm more focused. Overall, I prefer a mix of both.

提案: 回答应更有条理：首先给出总体计划，再列出具体偏好并说明原因。避免语法错误（"I haven't seen", "I am open to"），用连接词整理选项并给出优先顺序或举例。这样更自然且信息丰富。

例: I haven't decided on a specific career yet, but I'm open to various opportunities. I want to gain diverse experiences, so I would consider international positions, professional roles in research, or freelance work depending on what opportunities arise.

× I choose this field because I have always be fascinated by the nature and the creatures uh.

✓ I chose this field because I have always been fascinated by nature and its creatures.

句中时态混用：主句“I chose”应使用过去式表明选择的动作在过去，完成时“I have always been fascinated”应使用现在完成时的被动完成式“have been fascinated”。另外“by the nature”中的定冠词多余，改为“nature”；“the creatures”改为“its creatures”更自然。建议：在描述过去决定时用过去式；描述从过去持续到现在的状态用现在完成时。

× In the major I am study, there are a lot of lectures, lab work and the research projects.

✓ In the major I am studying, there are a lot of lectures, lab work and research projects.

动词形式错误：应使用现在进行时“am studying”表示正在学习该专业；名词短语中“the research projects”前的定冠词不必要，应保持并列名词形式一致。建议：使用正确的现在进行时动词形式，并保持并列项的形式一致。

× I found that it could be a little challenging for the international student.

✓ I found that it could be a little challenging for international students.

单复数错误：泛指一类人时应使用复数“international students”，而不是单数“the international student”。建议：表达对一类人普遍情况时用复数。

× Well, I don't have the work yet.

✓ Well, I don't have a job yet.

用词与时态问题：这里想表达“我还没有工作/职位”，应使用名词“job”并用现在时“don't have”表示现在的状态；原句“the work”不自然。建议：用常见搭配“have a job”。

× I still have the school courses at home or sometimes in person.

✓ I still have my school courses at home or sometimes in person.

代词与时态：缺少所有格“my”来修饰“school courses”。时态本身用现在时表状态正确。建议：注意名词前的所有格。

× If I got the chance to choose a job, I would prefer the freelance work.

✓ If I got the chance to choose a job, I would prefer freelance work.

冠词问题与虚拟语气：在虚拟条件句中“If I got”用过去式可以，但“the freelance work”冠词多余，应为泛指“freelance work”。建议：条件句中注意名词的冠词使用。

× In this case, I could have more time to develop myself, such as study another language.

✓ In this case, I could have more time to develop myself, such as studying another language.

动词后接动名词：短语“such as”后应接动名词“studying”，不是动词原形。建议：学习常见搭配，如“such as + -ing”。

× As I like uh, on the other hand, I could also to learn more hobbies such as the painting, taking pictures.

✓ As I like arts, on the other hand, I could also learn more hobbies such as painting and taking pictures.

代词与不定式错误：原句“could also to learn”不正确，情态动词后不加“to”；“the painting”不需要定冠词且应改为不可数或动名词“painting”；“I like uh”不完整，补为“I like arts”。建议：情态动词后直接接动词原形，使用搭配自然的名词或动名词形式。

× Well, for the home study, I don't think it is very good for the student.

✓ Well, for studying at home, I don't think it is very good for students.

冠词与表达方式：短语“for the home study”不自然，改为“for studying at home”；“the student”应改为复数“students”来泛指。建议：使用自然表达“studying at home”并用复数泛指人群。

× 'cause if I go to the in person class, I could do better in self-control.

✓ 'Cause if I go to in-person classes, I can have better self-control.

副词与名词位置：应使用复数“classes”更自然；“in person”作为形容词应连字符“in-person”；情态动词时态调整为“can”表示一般情况会更合适。建议：注意形容词短语形式与时态选择。

× Actually, uh, I would remind myself that there's a teacher I have to show some respections.

✓ Actually, I would remind myself that there's a teacher I have to show some respect to.

代词与不可数名词：英文中“respect”通常不可数且用法为“show respect to someone”；“respections”拼写与用法错误。建议：用固定搭配“show respect to”。

× So I could focus more on the lecture or the lab work rather than just, uh, search.

✓ So I could focus more on the lecture or the lab work rather than just searching.

比较结构中动词形式：在“rather than”后接动名词“searching”或动词原形取决于前文结构，但此处与“focus”连用更自然用动名词。建议：在“rather than”后用与前文一致的形式，这里用动名词。

× Search other things online or see the funny clips.

✓ searching for other things online or watching funny clips.

句子片段结构不完整：原为片段，应改为与前句连贯的动名词短语“searching for... or watching...”。建议：保持并列短语的一致形式并补全介词。

× Uh, kind of yes, I do enjoy studying at home. I in this case, I got more myself time.

✓ Kind of yes, I do enjoy studying at home. In this case, I get more time for myself.

句子结构与词序：原句“I in this case, I got more myself time”词序混乱并使用了过去式“got”；应改成现在时“get”并用“for myself”表示“为自己”。建议：理清主语与时间状语位置，使用正确时态和固定搭配。

× I can choose when I have the my class classes or however, umm, that's really not make me more productive.

✓ I can choose when I have my classes; however, that doesn't really make me more productive.

冠词与词序：重复的“the my”错误，应为“my classes”；“that's really not make me”时态与结构错误，正确为“that doesn't really make me”。建议：注意所有格与助动词的正确形式。

× Study at home. So I kind of like study at home rather than the, uh, in person classes.

✓ I prefer studying at home, so I kind of like studying at home rather than in-person classes.

动词形式与重复：句子断裂，应合并并使用动名词“studying”；去掉多余定冠词并用连字符“in-person”。建议：使用完整句并保持并列项形式一致。

× I haven't saw that question before.

✓ I haven't seen that question before.

现在完成时错误：现在完成时应使用过去分词“seen”，不是过去式“saw”。建议：学习现在完成时的结构“have + past participle”。

× Uh, if I have to choose or work, I prefer, uh, well, I actually open to all kinds of the work.

✓ If I have to choose a job, I prefer, well, I'm actually open to all kinds of work.

代词与冠词问题：原句“choose or work”词错，改为“choose a job”；“I actually open”缺少系动词“am”；“all kinds of the work”中定冠词多余且语序错误，改为“all kinds of work”。建议：确保句子有完整的主系表结构并正确使用冠词。

× Umm, I would like to gain the diverse experiences.

✓ Umm, I would like to gain diverse experiences.

限定词和冠词：在此处“diverse experiences”为泛指，不需要定冠词“the”。建议：泛指复数名词前通常不加“the”。

× Uh, I can accept the. Inter international work, professional work, or even the freelance work, it's OK.

✓ I can accept international work, professional work, or even freelance work; it's OK.

代词与标点：句中多余的“the.”和重复“Inter”错误，去掉不必要的定冠词并修正标点。建议：列举并列项时去掉不必要的冠词，注意拼写与断句。

× All OK to me.

✓ It's all OK with me.

句子不完整：须使用完整结构“It is all OK with me.”当前省略主语和系动词不正式且不符合书面语。建议：使用完整句子表达同意或接受。