Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak more clearly and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “I am a student.”), give one or two concise supporting details (where you study and what you study), and avoid fillers and repetition. Use correct verb forms (“I am a student” / “I study at a school” / “I am 14 years old” / “I am learning English”).

例: I am a student. I study at a local secondary school and I am 14 years old. I am also learning English because I want to study abroad in the future.

提案: Answer directly and use correct future tense. Begin with a clear topic sentence (“I don't work at the moment.”), then state your future plan with a correct job title and a brief reason. Use ‘I will be an economist’ or ‘I want to work as an economist.’

例: I don't work at the moment because I am still a student. In the future I want to work as an economist because I enjoy studying finance and analysing data.

提案: Be specific about what you mean by ‘place’ and give reasons. Use correct articles and prepositions (say “in Italy” and “a good place to work”). Provide one or two clear reasons to support your opinion using linking words like ‘because’ or ‘because of’.

例: Yes, I think Italy would be a good place to work because it has a strong economy in some industries and a high quality of life. Also, the culture and lifestyle are appealing to me.

提案: Make your answer concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear response (e.g. “Yes, I would like to work there.”), then give two specific reasons using linking words (‘because’, ‘also’). Avoid hesitations and repeat words. Use correct subject-verb agreement (“it has many opportunities”).

例: Yes, I would like to work in Italy because it is a beautiful country and offers many career opportunities in my field. Also, working there would allow me to improve my language skills and experience a different culture.

提案: Use correct sentence structure and be specific about your plans. Start with a clear topic sentence (“I plan to become an economist.”), then explain reasons with factual or personal motivations. Avoid vague claims about money; instead mention career interests, skills you want to develop, or where you want to work. Use correct grammar (e.g. “It is suitable for me” / “It has many opportunities”).

例: I plan to become an economist because I enjoy analysing economic trends and solving financial problems. I hope to work for a research institute or a financial company where I can develop my analytical skills and contribute to economic policy.

× I am a currently student and I am I am studying at school a number of 14. MMM I learning. In addition I learning English.

✓ I am currently a student and I am studying at school. I am 14 years old. I am learning English.

Errors: incorrect article placement ('a currently student' should be 'currently a student'), repetition 'I am I am', incorrect phrase 'a number of 14' (use '14 years old'), missing auxiliary 'am' before -ing verbs ('I learning' -> 'I am learning'), and run-on/missing punctuation. Suggestion: place the indefinite article before the noun ('a student'), use 'currently' before the article or after 'am', use 'years old' for age, and use the correct present continuous form 'I am learning'. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Now I'm, I don't work, I'm at school.

✓ Right now I don't work; I am a student at school.

Errors: disfluent punctuation and confusing structure. 'Now I'm, I don't work' is awkward. Suggestion: use 'Right now' or 'Currently', state 'I don't work' and clarify 'I am a student at school' for clarity and correct verb forms. Grammar problem type ID:26

× In the future I work in, I will work in a economist.

✓ In the future I will work as an economist.

Errors: incorrect verb tense/word order and wrong article before 'economist'. Use 'work as an economist' not 'work in a economist', and use 'an' before a vowel sound. Also use future 'will work' correctly. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I think it's a good place to work in a Italy.

✓ I think it's a good place to work in Italy.

Errors: incorrect article 'a' before country name and extra preposition placement. Countries do not take 'a' (unless the official name requires an article). Remove 'a'. Place 'in Italy' after 'work' is correct. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I would, I think I would like a program in Italy because it's a wonderful place and it's convenient for me. Uh, and uh, many, it have many opportunities.

✓ I think I would like a program in Italy because it's a wonderful place and it's convenient for me. Also, it has many opportunities.

Errors: unnecessary repetition, incorrect subject-verb agreement 'it have' should be 'it has', and informal fillers. Suggestion: remove filler words, use 'has' for singular subject 'it', and keep sentence concise. Grammar problem type ID:22

× My future work plans is economist because it's a beautiful and convenient for me and it have a Italian many it have a lot of money.

✓ My future career plan is to be an economist because it's suitable and convenient for me, and Italy has many opportunities and a high standard of living.

Errors: 'plans is' — subject-verb agreement (should be 'plans are' or singular 'plan is'); incorrect noun phrase 'is economist' needs 'to be an economist'; 'a Italian' wrong article before vowel sound (use 'an Italian' or better 'in Italy'); 'it have' incorrect verb form, should be 'it has' or 'Italy has'; unclear phrase 'it have a lot of money' — better to say 'has many opportunities' or 'a high standard of living'. Suggestion: choose correct subject-verb agreement, use infinitive 'to be', correct article 'an' or rephrase to 'in Italy', and use 'has' for third-person singular. Grammar problem type ID:27