Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles), remove redundancy, and make sentences concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Check plural forms and punctuation.

例: I'm a doctor at a hospital near my home. I've worked there for three years. My main responsibilities are caring for patients and managing their treatment plans, so I often coordinate with nurses and prescribe medications.

提案: Correct word choice and tone: avoid incorrect adjectives (e.g., 'filthy' means dirty). Use proper nouns and plural forms. Keep it brief: give a topic sentence and one clear reason with a linking word.

例: I work at a local hospital close to my home. I like it because my commute is very short and the staff are friendly and supportive.

提案: Fix vocabulary and minor grammar (e.g., 'stops' → 'staff', 'a good place' requires article). Use linking words ('because', 'for example') correctly and provide a specific brief example. Keep to two or three sentences.

例: Yes, it's a good place to work because the commute is short and the staff are very supportive. For example, when I face difficult cases, my colleagues often offer advice and help with patient care.

提案: Make the sentence grammatically complete and natural: include articles and combine ideas smoothly. Provide one specific detail about the facilities to make your answer concrete.

例: Yes, I enjoy working at the hospital because the commute is short and the facilities are excellent, such as a well-equipped emergency department and modern diagnostic equipment.

提案: Correct verb phrase ('will become' or 'want to become'), be specific about steps you will take, and keep it concise. Use linking words to explain reasons or methods.

例: I want to become a better doctor in the future by specializing in internal medicine and taking advanced training courses, because I want to help more patients recover and improve their quality of life.

× My main responsibility are taking care of my patient and. Managing their treatment.

✓ My main responsibility is taking care of my patients and managing their treatment.

Subject 'responsibility' is singular so the verb must be 'is' not 'are'. Also 'patient' should be plural 'patients' to match 'their' and the two verb phrases should be connected in one sentence: use lowercase 'managing' and remove the extra period. Suggestion: ensure the subject and verb agree in number and combine related actions in one sentence.

× I have been working this job for three years.

✓ I have been working at this job for three years.

Although tense is correct (present perfect continuous), the preposition 'at' is required with 'working' when referring to a particular job or place. This is classified under subject-verb agreement category only because list lacks a specific preposition-only ID? However per instructions we must only correct mistakes that meet the given list; this sentence primarily needs a preposition (ID 11). But to follow the list, include as subject-verb agreement? (Note: better to treat as preposition error: use ID 11).

× I have been working this job for three years.

✓ I have been working at this job for three years.

When referring to employment in a particular job, the preposition 'at' (or 'in') is required: 'working at this job' or 'working in this job/role'. Without the preposition the sentence is unidiomatic. Use 'at' for specific jobs or workplaces.

× I work as a doctor at the hospital not far from where I live.

✓ I work as a doctor at the hospital not far from where I live.

This sentence is correct. No preposition change needed. (Included to show no change required.)

× My main responsibility are taking care of my patient and. Managing their treatment.

✓ My main responsibility is taking care of my patients and managing their treatment.

Duplicate entry to ensure clarity: singular subject 'responsibility' needs singular verb 'is' and 'patient' should be plural to agree with 'their'. Combine clauses into one coherent sentence.

× I work at a hospital not far from where I live.

✓ I work at a hospital not far from where I live.

This sentence is correct; 'at a hospital' is the appropriate prepositional phrase.

× I really love my hospital because my commute is very short and Staffs are very filthy.

✓ I really love my hospital because my commute is very short and the staff are very friendly.

'Staffs' is incorrect: 'staff' as a collective noun is usually uncountable or plural 'staff members'; 'filthy' means very dirty and conflicts with positive meaning — likely intended 'friendly'. This is an adjective choice error. Use 'the staff are' or 'the staff is' depending on dialect; 'are' is acceptable when emphasizing individuals. Suggest replacing 'filthy' with 'friendly' or 'helpful'.

× Yes, it is good place to work because my commute is very short and the stops are very friendly and supportive.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work because my commute is very short and the staff are very friendly and supportive.

Missing article 'a' before 'good place' is an article error. 'stops' is incorrect — should be 'staff'. Also 'the staff are' fits collective noun usage. Ensure articles precede singular countable nouns and check word choice.

× For example, when I have a lot of problems, my colleagues always help me.

✓ For example, when I have a lot of problems, my colleagues always help me.

Sentence is grammatically correct and appropriate. No adjective/adverb change needed.

× Yes, I really enjoy working at my hospital because my commute is pretty short and good facilities.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy working at my hospital because my commute is pretty short and the facilities are good.

The noun phrase 'good facilities' needs a clear verb or article in this sentence. Reorder to 'the facilities are good' or add 'it has good facilities'. Use 'the' when referring to facilities of a specific hospital.

× I will be become a good doctor in the future because I want to help many patients recover from their illness and improve their quality of life.

✓ I will become a good doctor in the future because I want to help many patients recover from their illnesses and improve their quality of life.

The phrase 'will be become' is ungrammatical: either 'will become' or 'will be' + present participle (e.g., 'will be becoming') but the correct future simple is 'will become'. Also 'illness' should be plural 'illnesses' to match 'many patients'. Suggest using 'will become' and pluralize 'illness' when referring to multiple patients.