Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor grammatical slips. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid filler words like 'well' and 'you know'. Use correct collocations ('master's student', 'have been studying').

例: I'm currently a master's student in geophysics. I've been studying geophysics for two years, focusing on seismology, and I expect to graduate next year.

提案: Correct vocabulary and grammar, remove hesitations, and give a clear, direct answer. Use a topic sentence and one or two specific details. Replace incorrect words ('monster' -> 'master's') and fix verb forms ('I still study' or 'I'm still studying').

例: I don't work at the moment; I'm studying at university. I'm a master's student specializing in seismology in the geophysics department.

提案: Give a balanced, fluent response without fillers. Use linking words to contrast positives and negatives (e.g., 'however'). Provide specific reasons and correct collocation ('the salary is not high').

例: Yes, it is a good place to work. The people are friendly and the workload is less administrative than in industry; however, the salary is not very high compared with private companies.

提案: Reduce repetition and hesitations. Use a clear topic sentence and two specific supporting details linked with 'first' and 'second' or 'also'. Avoid repeating phrases like 'I mean' and 'you know'.

例: Yes, I like it for several reasons. Firstly, the campus is clean and peaceful, which helps me concentrate, and secondly, it's well served by public transport, so commuting is easy.

提案: Be more decisive and structured. Start with a clear statement about uncertainty, then outline two specific options with brief reasons. Use correct grammar ('depends on what happens in the future') and avoid numeric '1' and repetition.

例: I haven't decided yet, but I have two possible paths. I might continue in earth sciences and pursue a PhD to specialize in seismology, or I could seek a role in a tech company where my analytical skills would be useful, depending on job opportunities after graduation.

× 'Well, I'm currently a master student in geophysics.'

✓ 'Well, I'm currently a master's student in geophysics.'

'master student' is incorrect singular form; the correct noun form is 'master's student' (possessive) to indicate a student of a master's program. Use the possessive form for degree names (e.g., 'master's degree'). Suggestion: say "a master's student".

× 'I have been studying this field for about two years and I should be graduating next year.'

✓ 'I have been studying this field for about two years and I am due to graduate next year.'

'should be graduating' suggests obligation or probability and is less natural for a planned graduation; since the student indicates a scheduled future event, use 'am due to graduate' or 'am graduating next year.' Also keep present perfect continuous 'have been studying' for duration.

× 'Well, as I talked before, I'm now a monster student, so I still studying in a university and my, you know, my study point is seismology.'

✓ 'Well, as I mentioned before, I'm now a master's student, so I am still studying at a university and my area of study is seismology.'

Multiple issues: 'monster student' is a mispronunciation; correct is 'master's student.' 'As I talked before' should be 'as I mentioned before.' 'I still studying' is missing the auxiliary verb 'am' (subject-verb agreement/verb form). 'in a university' is less natural than 'at a university.' 'my study point' is incorrect collocation; use 'my area of study' or 'my research focus.' These corrections address third-person/auxiliary and collocation errors.

× 'Is it a good place to work?'

✓ 'Is it a good place to study?'

Context: student is at a university studying, not working. The verb 'work' is inconsistent with the situation; use 'study' to match the present ongoing activity. This is a tense/contextual correction to fit meaning.

× 'I mean, but uh, you know, the salary is uh, not well.'

✓ 'I mean, but, you know, the salary is not good.'

'not well' is incorrect when describing a noun (salary). Use the adjective 'good' to modify 'salary.' 'Well' is an adverb, so it does not correctly modify the noun.

× 'I mean, there are a couple of reasons.'

✓ 'I mean, there are a couple of reasons.'

'there are a couple of reasons' is grammatically correct for plural 'reasons.' No change needed; included for completeness.

× 'it's very convenient for the public transportation.'

✓ 'it's very convenient for public transportation' ,

'the public transportation' is unidiomatic; remove the definite article 'the' before an uncountable/general noun phrase 'public transportation.' Also 'for' is acceptable, but 'for public transportation' is more natural.

× 'To be honest, I haven't thought about it before.'

✓ 'To be honest, I haven't thought about it until now' or 'I haven't thought about it before now.'

'haven't thought about it before' is understandable but 'before' with present perfect can be clearer as 'before now' or 'until now.' Suggest using 'until now' to indicate up to the present.

× 'You know, 1 crucial one possible one potential choice is to continue my current study in earth science.'

✓ 'You know, one crucial possible choice is to continue my current studies in earth science.'

Redundant words ('1', 'one', 'one') and count/form errors: 'study' should be plural 'studies' when referring to continuing academic study in general. Use a single determiner 'one' and remove duplicates; order adjectives as 'crucial possible' or better 'one crucial possible choice.'

× 'Or maybe I could find a job in a tech company.'

✓ 'Or maybe I could find a job at a tech company' ,

'in a tech company' is not wrong, but 'at a tech company' is more idiomatic when referring to employment location. Quantifier/category nuance: use 'at' for workplace.

× 'I'm not sure. I think it's depends on what happens on the future.'

✓ 'I'm not sure. I think it depends on what happens in the future.'

Remove the extra auxiliary 'it's' before 'depends.' 'depends' should directly follow 'I think.' Also preposition 'on the future' is incorrect; use 'in the future.' This fixes subject-verb structure and preposition use.