Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорите более грамотно и естественно: используйте правильные времена и порядок слов. Дайте ясное вступление (topic sentence) и добавьте одно-два уточняющих предложения о текущем статусе (например, где учитесь и что изучаете). Избегайте слов-паразитов («honestly») в начале, если они не усиливают смысл.

例: I am a student. I recently graduated from School No. 17 and am currently preparing for university entrance exams. I am also studying English to improve my language skills.

提案: Отвечайте прямо и связно: используйте простые корректные фразы и соединяющие слова. Объясните причину кратко и конкретно, добавив детали о том, чему именно вы учитесь и почему это важно.

例: I don't work at the moment because I am focusing on my studies. Specifically, I am studying foreign languages like English and Spanish to increase my future job opportunities.

提案: Отвечайте прямо на вопрос и избегайте ненужных междометий. Дайте одну-две конкретные причины, используя связки (for example, because, such as). Старайтесь точнее подбирать слова (e.g., "attractive" вместо "attracted").

例: Yes, I think Bucharest is a good place to work because it has many attractive office areas and a pleasant city atmosphere. For example, there are modern business centers and good public transport links.

提案: Формулируйте ответ яснее: начинайте с прямого ответа и затем приведите одно конкретное обоснование. Используйте простую грамматику и корректные словосочетания (например, "good communication among colleagues"). Перестройте предложение, чтобы смысл был понятен.

例: Yes, I would. I like places where colleagues communicate well and job responsibilities are clearly explained. Good teamwork and clear instructions are very important to me.

提案: Сформулируйте планы последовательно и грамматически правильно: используйте будущее время и порядок действий (first, then, finally). Избегайте повторов и бессмысленных фраз. Укажите конкретные цели и причины, почему вы хотите это сделать.

例: First, I want to find a good job that matches my skills. Then I would like to travel around the world to learn about different cultures. Ultimately, I hope to move to the USA to study and work there.

× Honestly, I am student, I am study school #17 I am graduated this year.

✓ Honestly, I am a student. I study at School No. 17. I graduated this year.

Multiple issues: missing article before 'student' and wrong verb forms. Use 'a student' for singular countable noun; use simple present 'I study' for current activity; include preposition 'at' with school and use the simple past 'I graduated' for a completed action this year. Suggestions: add articles for singular nouns, use correct prepositions for institutions, and choose past tense for completed events.

× Honestly, all these moments I don't work because I am now. I am focusing on my study, I am learning foreign languages.

✓ At the moment I don't work because I am studying. I am focusing on my studies and learning foreign languages.

Awkward time expression and incorrect noun form: use 'At the moment' or 'right now' for current time; 'I am studying' is the correct continuous form; 'study' as a noun should be plural 'my studies' when referring to course of study. Suggestions: use natural time phrases and pair continuous forms with ongoing actions; use 'studies' for academic program.

× Uh, well, yes, Bucharest. Bucharest is very good place to work because they have attracted places, a beautiful atmosphere, offices and so on. You can work there.

✓ Yes, Bucharest is a very good place to work because it has attractive places, a beautiful atmosphere, offices, and so on. You can work there.

Errors: missing article before 'very good place'; wrong pronoun 'they' for the city and incorrect adjective 'attracted' instead of 'attractive'. Use 'it' for a city, 'a' before 'very good place', and 'attractive' to describe places. Suggestions: ensure correct articles before singular nouns and match pronouns to the noun antecedent; use correct adjective forms.

× Yes, I would because I would like because there is clear clean offers to my collective is communicated.

✓ Yes, I would, because I would like that. There are clear, fair offers and communication within my team.

The original is unclear and has pronoun and article errors: 'offers' is plural so use 'there are'; 'my collective' is unnatural—use 'my team'; 'is communicated' is passive and unclear. Also missing adjectives ordering and commas. Suggestions: rephrase for clarity, use 'there are' with plural nouns, and prefer active constructions for communication ('communication within my team').

× Honestly in the first I want to find 2 good job for me. After I want to travel around the world then I want to can I want went will gone the USA I wanna live there.

✓ Honestly, first I want to find two good jobs for myself. After that, I want to travel around the world. Then I would like to go to the USA and live there.

Multiple tense and form errors: use 'first' as adverb, 'two good jobs' plural, and reflexive 'for myself' or simply omit. Use future intention forms: 'I want to find', 'I want to travel', and 'I would like to go' or 'I want to go'. The phrase 'I want to can I want went will gone' is a jumble of modals and past forms—replace with 'I would like to go' or 'I want to go'. Suggestions: plan sentences sequentially, use correct plural/singular nouns, and choose appropriate future expressions ('will', 'want to', 'would like to').