Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 全体的に答えは明確で自然ですが、より流暢さと語彙の多様さを出すために、文のつながりを改善し、細部で具体例（どんな支援をしているか）を一つ加えてください。また“Regional Repatriation Bureau”のような専門用語は簡潔に説明すると理解されやすくなります。語彙では動詞や形容詞を増やし、冗長な表現を避けましょう。

例: I work for the Regional Repatriation Bureau, which handles support for returning residents. I manage subsidy applications for municipalities, focusing on housing and integration grants, and I enjoy this work because it directly helps local communities become more stable.

提案: 答えは簡潔ですが、“however”以降の提案は少し急に出てくるため、理由を一つ加え、接続詞でつなげてください。具体的な例（どの機能を移すのか）を示すと説得力が増します。文は2〜3文に抑え、自然な流れにしましょう。

例: I work in the central Tokyo office, but I believe decentralizing some services would be beneficial. For example, relocating customer-facing teams to regional offices would improve access for rural residents and speed up subsidy processing.

提案: 肯定は適切ですが、“blundering”は文脈に合わない語選びで不自然です（意味も合わない）。“relaxed”や“friendly”など正しい形容詞を使い、理由を2つに絞って具体的に述べてください。語彙の誤用を避け、簡潔にまとめましょう。

例: Yes, it's a good place to work. The commute is convenient, and the office atmosphere is relaxed and friendly, which helps me unwind after a busy day.

提案: 冒頭の“You work?”は発話ミスのように聞こえます。質問に直接答えた後で、景色の具体的効果（どのようにリラックスできるか）を短く説明してください。文を2〜3文に収め、不要な言い回しを避けましょう。

例: Yes, I like my workplace. Being on the top floor gives me views of the city skyline and nearby parks, and looking at them during breaks helps me feel refreshed and less stressed.

提案: 意図は明確で良いですが、“tax and nonpartisan policy”の表現は少し曖昧です。具体的にどの分野の税制や政策を扱いたいか、またどんな影響を期待するかを示すと説得力が増します。接続詞を使って目的と方法を繋げると自然です。

例: In the future I want to specialise in tax policy and impartial public policy design. My goal is to create fair tax measures that fund better local services, for example by streamlining grant distribution to improve community healthcare and education.

× I work for Regional Repatriation Bureau in the government.

✓ I work for the Regional Repatriation Bureau in the government.

The name of an organization that includes a common noun (Bureau) typically needs the definite article 'the' before it. Add 'the' to specify the particular bureau. Suggestion: Use 'the' with specific public organizations (the ministry, the bureau).

× I distribute subsidies to municipalities and I enjoy this job because it allows me to support local communities.

✓ I distribute subsidies to municipalities, and I enjoy this job because it allows me to support local communities.

Comma added for clarity between independent clauses. No major singular/plural error; included because sentence structure needed clearer punctuation. Suggestion: Use a comma before 'and' when joining two independent clauses.

× I work in the central Tokyo office.

✓ I work in the central Tokyo office.

Sentence is correct. Present simple is appropriate for habitual action. No change needed.

× However, I think moving some functions to rural areas would help us better support local communities.

✓ However, I think that moving some functions to rural areas would help us better support local communities.

Inserting 'that' clarifies the subordinate clause and improves formality. Suggestion: Include 'that' after verbs of thinking in formal speech to mark the content clause.

× It's very convenient for my commute and the office atmosphere is blundering so I can relax after work.

✓ It's very convenient for my commute, and the office atmosphere is relaxing, so I can unwind after work.

'Blundering' is incorrect: it means making mistakes and does not fit here. Use 'relaxing' (adjective) to describe atmosphere and 'unwind' as a natural verb for relaxing after work. Also added commas for clarity. Suggestion: Choose adjectives that match the intended meaning and collocations (relaxing atmosphere).

× You work? Yes, I like my workplace.

✓ Do you mean 'Do you work here?'? Yes, I like my workplace.

The original 'You work?' is ungrammatical in this context. A full question form 'Do you mean "Do you work here"?' clarifies the examiner's intended question. Suggestion: Use auxiliary 'do' for short present-simple questions: 'Do you work here?' or rephrase for clarity.

× From the top floor I can see the city skyline and some parks, which helps me relax when I feel tired.

✓ From the top floor I can see the city skyline and some parks, which help me relax when I feel tired.

Relative pronoun 'which' refers to 'the city skyline and some parks' (plural), so the verb should be plural 'help' not 'helps'. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement when the relative clause refers to a compound subject.

× In the future, I want to become a specialist in tax and nonpartisan policy.

✓ In the future, I want to become a specialist in tax and nonpartisan policy.

Sentence is correct; present tense 'want' expresses future intention appropriately. No change needed.

× I hope to design policies that help citizens and improve local services.

✓ I hope to design policies that help citizens and improve local services.

Sentence is correct and clear. No grammatical change needed.