Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the reply direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence stating your job, then add one brief specific detail. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use correct articles and word order (e.g., "I work in medical billing as a senior analyst").

例: I work in medical billing as a senior analyst. I handle patient invoicing and reconciliation for hospital accounts, so I spend most of my day reviewing claims and resolving billing queries.

提案: Begin with a concise topic sentence naming the company and its location, then give one or two specific facts. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'It's' instead of 'it is a not') and avoid redundancy about size. Use linking words for flow.

例: I work for A N Global, located in Sector 85, Mohali. It's a small company that handles medical billing processes for several clinics, so I work closely with a compact team.

提案: Answer directly and avoid filler words ('uh'). Give two clear reasons with brief supporting details and link them logically. Use natural phrasing (e.g., 'close to my home', 'friendly atmosphere', 'good salary').

例: Yes, it's a good place to work. Firstly, it's close to my home which saves me commuting time, and secondly the atmosphere is friendly and low-stress, plus the pay is competitive.

提案: Respond clearly with one topic sentence saying you like it, then give two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like 'different kind of benefit'—specify what benefits. Correct grammar and sentence structure (e.g., 'I receive an annual bonus').

例: Yes, I like working there because my boss is supportive and the team is cooperative. Also, the company offers benefits such as health insurance and an annual performance bonus.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence about your career goal, then give a specific timeline and steps. Remove fillers and correct phrasing ('whenever I get an opportunity' → 'if I have the opportunity'). Mention concrete actions you will take to reach the goal.

例: I plan to advance in medical billing and move into management. Within five years I aim to become a senior manager by taking on more leadership responsibilities, completing a management course, and improving team performance metrics.

× Yes, I'm working medical billing as a senior analyst and working on patient billing.

✓ Yes, I work in medical billing as a senior analyst and handle patient billing.

The original sentence has incorrect verb patterns and missing preposition. Use 'work in' for industry and parallel verbs: 'work' and 'handle' rather than repeating 'working'. This fixes sentence structure and improves clarity. Suggestion: maintain parallel verb forms and include necessary prepositions.

× I am working in A N global.

✓ I work at A N Global.

Use simple present 'work' for habitual employment rather than 'am working'. Use preposition 'at' for company location and capitalize proper noun. Suggestion: use 'work at' + company name for current employment.

× It is located in Mohali sector 85 and it is a not large company.

✓ It is located in Mohali, Sector 85, and it is not a large company.

Word order and article placement were incorrect: 'a not large company' is unnatural. Use 'not a large company'. Also add comma and capitalize 'Sector'. Suggestion: place 'not' before the article phrase 'a large company'.

× It is a small company which is handling the process about billing.

✓ It is a small company that handles the billing process.

Use 'that handles' rather than 'which is handling the process about billing'. 'Handles the billing process' is concise and correct. Suggestion: use active simple present for habitual company activities.

× it is near to my home.

✓ It is near my home.

Use 'near' without 'to' when referring to proximity to a place. Suggestion: use 'near' + noun.

× it is a good place and their environment is nice, uh, friendly environment.

✓ It is a good place and its environment is nice and friendly.

Use 'its' to refer to the company (singular), not 'their'. Also avoid repetition 'environment ... environment'. Suggestion: use singular possessive pronoun for singular nouns and combine adjectives properly.

× So without stress, I'm working there and getting handsome salary.

✓ So I work there without stress and receive a good salary.

Use simple present 'work' and 'receive' for habitual facts. 'Getting handsome salary' is informal; use 'receive a good salary' or 'earn a good salary'. Suggestion: use standard vocabulary and simple present for routines.

× Yes, I like the place where I am working because of the good nature of my boss and the environment of the place where I am working.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because of my boss's good nature and the workplace environment.

Use simple present 'work' for regular employment. Avoid repeating 'the place where I am working'. Use possessive 'boss's'. Suggestion: simplify and use possessive form and concise phrases.

× Also, it's a, uh, place where I'm getting a different kind of benefit.

✓ Also, it's a place where I receive various benefits.

Use 'receive' for habitual benefits and 'various benefits' instead of 'a different kind of benefit'. Remove filler words. Suggestion: use plural 'benefits' and concise wording.

× So, uh, after completing my shifting hours, getting bonus in yearly.

✓ So, after completing my shift hours, I receive a yearly bonus.

Original lacks subject and verb. Use 'I receive' and correct noun phrases: 'shift hours' and 'yearly bonus'. Suggestion: include subject and verb and use natural word order.

× My future work plans as, uh, I want to grow in the same field, uh, and get a, whenever I get a opportunity for a manager, I will grab that opportunity And within five years, I see myself as a senior manager because right now I'm working as a, uh, team leader.

✓ My future work plan is to grow in the same field and become a manager whenever I get the opportunity; within five years, I see myself as a senior manager because right now I am a team leader.

The original is fragmented and contains filler words and tense/ article errors. Use 'plan is to' and 'become a manager' and 'the opportunity' (not 'a opportunity'). Combine into clear sentences and maintain consistent tense. Suggestion: remove fillers, correct articles, and structure sentences with clear subjects and verbs.