Work— Part 1 採点レポート

模試Part12025-09-13 19:45:57

会話

Part 1

試験官

Do you work or are you a student?

受験者

I'm still a student, I just finished my internship for my degree UH recently. I need to prepare for my IELTS exam to apply my master for this year.

試験官

Where do you work?>

受験者

During my internship I uh, went to a TV station to work for half a year. My job is usually editing some videos, double check the subtitles, something like that.

試験官

Is it a good place to work?

受験者

Yeah, during my internship, the working atmosphere is so good. Uh, the people all are friendly and they, they love to help me, so I also learned a lot from them.

試験官

Would you like the place where you work?

受験者

No actually, although the office atmosphere is good but the place is super far from my home. I need to spend 2 hours to take metro to go to office. I think it's kind of wasting time.

試験官

What are your future work plans?

受験者

I plan to finish my master's degree first, then I will decide go to PhD or not. I'm still thinking, haven't make any decision.

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総合

総合: 6.0流暢さと一貫性: 6.0発音: 6.0文法: 5.5語彙: 6.0

Part 1

Do you work or are you a student?

スコア: 75.0

提案: 回答时应更自然流畅,避免口头语“UH”,并且句子结构可以更清晰。可以直接回答是学生,然后简要说明实习经历和未来计划,避免信息堆砌。

例: I'm currently a student. I recently completed an internship related to my degree, and now I'm preparing for the IELTS exam to apply for a master's program this year.

Where do you work?

スコア: 70.0

提案: 回答中应避免口头语“uh”,并且句子应更连贯。可以用连接词使描述更流畅,同时具体说明工作内容。

例: During my six-month internship, I worked at a TV station where I mainly edited videos and checked subtitles to ensure accuracy.

Is it a good place to work?

スコア: 75.0

提案: 回答应避免重复和口头语,使用更丰富的词汇描述工作氛围和同事关系,句子结构更完整。

例: Yes, the working atmosphere was very positive. The colleagues were friendly and always willing to help, which allowed me to learn a lot during my internship.

Would you like the place where you work?

スコア: 80.0

提案: 回答较好,但可以用更自然的表达方式连接句子,避免简单句堆砌,提升连贯性。

例: Actually, I wouldn't prefer to work there because, although the office atmosphere is good, it's very far from my home. I have to spend two hours commuting by metro, which I find quite time-consuming.

What are your future work plans?

スコア: 70.0

提案: 回答中语法错误较多,应注意时态和句子结构,表达更准确自然。可以用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I plan to complete my master's degree first. After that, I will decide whether to pursue a PhD, as I am still considering my options.

文法

Past tense issue

× I'm still a student, I just finished my internship for my degree UH recently.

✓ I'm still a student, I have just finished my internship for my degree at UH recently.

这里使用现在完成时(have finished)更合适,因为动作刚刚完成,且与现在有联系。原句使用一般过去时(finished)不够准确。

Incorrect use of prepositions

× I need to prepare for my IELTS exam to apply my master for this year.

✓ I need to prepare for my IELTS exam to apply for my master's degree this year.

apply后面需要加介词for,表示申请某物;master应改为master's degree,表示硕士学位。

Past tense issue

× During my internship I uh, went to a TV station to work for half a year.

✓ During my internship, I went to a TV station to work for half a year.

句子中无明显时态错误,但加逗号使句子更通顺。

Present tense issue

× My job is usually editing some videos, double check the subtitles, something like that.

✓ My job usually involves editing some videos, double-checking the subtitles, something like that.

job后面应使用动名词形式表示工作内容,double check应改为double-checking,保持形式一致。

Present tense issue

× Yeah, during my internship, the working atmosphere is so good.

✓ Yeah, during my internship, the working atmosphere was so good.

描述过去的实习经历,时态应为过去时。

Incorrect use of pronouns

× Uh, the people all are friendly and they, they love to help me, so I also learned a lot from them.

✓ Uh, all the people are friendly and they love to help me, so I also learned a lot from them.

people前应加all修饰,且调整语序使句子更自然。

Incorrect conjunction use

× No actually, although the office atmosphere is good but the place is super far from my home.

✓ No, actually, although the office atmosphere is good, the place is super far from my home.

although和but不能同时使用,应去掉but。

Incorrect use of prepositions

× I need to spend 2 hours to take metro to go to office.

✓ I need to spend 2 hours taking the metro to go to the office.

spend后应接动名词形式taking;take metro前应加the;go to office前应加the。

Past tense issue

× I'm still thinking, haven't make any decision.

✓ I'm still thinking, haven't made any decision.

have后应接过去分词made,原句make为原形,时态错误。

重要語彙

Double— Dual; Ambiguous; Deceitful; Twice (over); Stand-in
Friendly— Affable; Amicable; Favorable; Compatible
Good— Fine; Virtuous; Well-behaved; Right; Capable
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