Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，语法和表达有错误，且信息重复。建议简化句子结构，避免断句错误，并且更自然地表达职业和专业背景。

例: I am currently working as a car interior designer. I graduated from the China Academy of Art with a major in transportation design. My daily work mainly involves drawing sketches for car interiors.

提案: 回答中存在断句和拼写错误，表达不流畅。建议使用完整句子，避免断句，清晰表达工作环境和合作内容。

例: I work at a car design center in Shanghai. The environment is very friendly and creative. I enjoy collaborating with the UI/UX department because it allows me to combine my interests in technology and design.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但存在语法和断句问题。建议使用连贯句子，丰富细节，说明为什么设备和同事使工作环境良好。

例: Yes, it is a good place to work because it is well-equipped with facilities like a modeling department. Moreover, my colleagues are friendly and always willing to help me by providing the information I need.

提案: 表达不清晰，语法错误较多，逻辑不连贯。建议明确表达对工作的感受，原因及期望，使用完整句子。

例: Although my workplace has many good aspects, I don't like it very much because I feel that my abilities are not fully utilized. Therefore, I am looking for more learning opportunities.

提案: 回答含糊且语法错误严重，表达不连贯。建议清晰表达未来计划，使用正确的语法和词汇。

例: My future plan is to pursue a master's degree in transportation design. I want to deepen my knowledge and better understand the principles behind this field.

× I graduated as a China. Academy of of art transportation major.

✓ I graduated from China Academy of Art, majoring in transportation.

这里的错误是单复数和介词使用错误。'China Academy of Art' 是一个专有名词，前面不需要冠词，且应使用 'from' 表示毕业于某处。'major' 应该用动名词形式 'majoring' 来表示专业。

× When I graduated I. Find a job as a car interior designer.

✓ When I graduated, I found a job as a car interior designer.

这里动词时态错误，描述过去发生的动作应使用过去式 'found'，而不是现在时 'find'。

× Daily work is drawing sketches.

✓ My daily work is drawing sketches.

句子缺少主语，导致结构不完整。应加上主语 'My' 来完整表达句意。

× I work in a car design center in Shanghai.

✓ I work at a car design center in Shanghai.

'work at' 更常用于表示具体工作地点，'in' 虽然不完全错误，但 'at' 更合适。

× It's very friendly and accretive. Environment.

✓ It's a very friendly and creative environment.

'accretive' 是错误单词，正确应为 'creative'，且 'environment' 前应加冠词 'a'。

× When I collaborate with the UI UX department, I enjoy working there because I can. Combine my interests in technology. Anna Design.

✓ When I collaborate with the UI/UX department, I enjoy working there because I can combine my interests in technology and design.

句子断裂，缺少连贯性。'Anna Design' 应为 'and design'，且应合并为完整句子。

× It has enough equipment to communicate and finish our work, like modeling department, and the colleges are friendly.

✓ It has enough equipment to communicate and finish our work, like the modeling department, and the colleagues are friendly.

'colleges' 应为 'colleagues'（同事），且 'modeling department' 前应加定冠词 'the'。

× They help me and. Give me the information I need.

✓ They help me and give me the information I need.

句子断裂，'Give' 不应大写且应与前句连成一句。

× I don't like the place I work even though.

✓ I don't like the place I work, even though.

句子中 'even though' 前应加逗号，且句子不应断开。

× It has so many. Good parts but I still feel my ability.

✓ It has so many good parts, but I still feel my abilities

'ability' 应为复数 'abilities'，表示多方面的能力。

× Don't have enough place to use.

✓ don't have enough opportunities to use them.

'place' 用法不当，应使用 'opportunities' 表示机会，且补充宾语。

× So I find the learning opportunity.

✓ So I look for learning opportunities.

'find the learning opportunity' 结构不自然，改为 'look for learning opportunities' 更符合表达习惯。

× My future plan is. Finding a master degree university.

✓ My future plan is to find a master's degree university.

'Finding' 应改为不定式 'to find'，且 'master degree university' 应为 'university for a master's degree' 或 'to pursue a master's degree'。

× About transportation design, I still want to learning this measure.

✓ In transportation design, I still want to learn this subject.

'About' 用法不当，改为 'In' 更合适；'learning' 应为动词原形 'learn'；'measure' 用词错误，应为 'subject' 或 'field'。

× Well, I think I need a chance to figure out. With the original of this.

✓ Well, I think I need a chance to figure this out from the origin.

句子结构混乱，'figure out' 后应直接跟宾语，'with the original of this' 不通顺，改为 'from the origin' 更合适。