Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

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Part 1

Examinador

Do you often see advertisements when you are on your phone or computer?

Candidato

Yeah, actually I always see the advertisement on my phone when I open the app or when I go into computer and score some pages.

Examinador

Is there an advertisement that made an impression on you when you were a child?

Candidato

I think I've ever liked the Dior advertisement. For example, a beauty with a fascinating dress and dancing with in the hall acting is very beautiful is make me love.

Examinador

Do you see a lot of advertising on trains or other transport?

Candidato

I always use transport is underground. I always seen some collar or some juice advertisement in the underground. I think it's colorful and is, uh, interesting. I always look them and give me.

Examinador

Do you like advertisements?

Candidato

Yeah, actually my childhood dream is become a advertisement designer. It makes me because I love the colorful advertisement and this eye-catching advertisement is very interesting.

Examinador

What kind of advertising do you like?

Candidato

Actually I like the soft juice or some soft drink advertisement because the advertisement always catch the drink or some water sprinkle to somewhere and I think their idea is fascinating.

Examinador

Have you ever bought something because of an advertisement?

Candidato

I often be attracted by Apples advertisement. I think it is simple and the idea is less is more. It's very fascinated and I like Apple's product very much.

Evaluación

Total

Total: 5.5Fluidez y coherencia: 5.5Pronunciación: 5.5Gramática: 5.0Recurso léxico: 5.5

Part 1

Do you often see advertisements when you are on your phone or computer?

Puntuación: 58.0

Sugerencia: 回答基本直接,但存在冠词、介词和动词搭配错误,例如“the advertisement”应改为“advertisements”,“go into computer and score some pages”表达不自然。可以使用“browse websites”来表达浏览网页,并补充广告出现的具体位置或影响。注意避免重复使用“always”。

Ejemplo: Yes, I see advertisements quite often, especially when I use my phone. They usually appear when I open social media apps or browse websites. Most of them are related to products I have searched for recently.

Is there an advertisement that made an impression on you when you were a child?

Puntuación: 42.0

Sugerencia: 内容意图不够清楚,句子结构和动词形式错误较多。“I’ve ever liked”应改为“I remember liking”或“One advertisement that impressed me was…”。应明确描述广告内容、为什么印象深刻,以及它对你的影响;避免将多个想法堆在一个长句中。

Ejemplo: Yes. I remember being impressed by a Dior advertisement when I was a child. It showed a woman in a beautiful dress dancing in an elegant hall. The music and glamorous atmosphere made the advertisement unforgettable.

Do you see a lot of advertising on trains or other transport?

Puntuación: 45.0

Sugerencia: 回答有相关内容,但“use transport is underground”“always seen”“look them”均不符合语法,最后一句也没有完整表达意思。可以先直接回答“Yes, I see quite a lot…”,再具体说明广告类型、颜色和观看感受。使用“on the underground”或“in subway stations”以及“look at them”。

Ejemplo: Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on the underground. They are often for drinks, cosmetics, or films, and many of them use bright colours to attract passengers’ attention. I sometimes look at them while I am waiting for my train.

Do you like advertisements?

Puntuación: 60.0

Sugerencia: 回答有明确观点,也提供了个人经历,但语法需要修正:“my childhood dream was to become an advertising designer”,“a advertisement”应为“an advertisement”。“It makes me”表达不完整,应改为“this is why I like them”。可以进一步说明你喜欢广告的视觉设计,而不仅仅是重复“colorful”和“interesting”。

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. In fact, I once dreamed of becoming an advertising designer because I enjoy creating eye-catching visuals. I especially like advertisements with creative colours, attractive images, and memorable slogans.

What kind of advertising do you like?

Puntuación: 55.0

Sugerencia: 回答了广告类型和原因,但“soft juice”不自然,应使用“soft-drink advertisements”,“catch the drink”应改为“show the drink”。建议具体描述广告中的动作或视觉效果,例如气泡、冰块和水花,并使用“because”连接理由,使答案更清晰。

Ejemplo: I like advertisements for soft drinks, especially those that show ice, bubbles, and splashing water. They make the drink look refreshing and delicious. I find this kind of visual effect very creative and appealing.

Have you ever bought something because of an advertisement?

Puntuación: 62.0

Sugerencia: 回答没有明确使用“Yes, I have”直接回应问题,而且“Apples advertisement”应为“Apple’s advertisements”,“I often be attracted”应为“I am often attracted”,“fascinated”应改为“fascinating”。可以举出一个具体产品,并说明广告如何影响你的购买决定。

Ejemplo: Yes, I have. I once bought an Apple product after seeing one of its advertisements. I was attracted by the simple design and the idea that less is more, although I also chose it because I already trusted the brand.

Gramática

1:Singular and plural issue(单复数问题)

× Yeah, actually I always see the advertisement on my phone when I open the app or when I go into computer and score some pages.

✓ Yeah, actually, I always see advertisements on my phone when I open an app or use my computer and scroll through some pages.

这里通常不是只看到一则广告,而是泛指广告,所以 advertisement 应使用复数 advertisements。泛指可数名词时,通常要用复数形式。

11:Incorrect use of prepositions(介词使用错误)

× Yeah, actually I always see the advertisement on my phone when I open the app or when I go into computer and score some pages.

✓ Yeah, actually, I always see advertisements on my phone when I open an app or use my computer and scroll through some pages.

英语中通常说 use my computer 或 go on my computer,而不说 go into computer。表示在电脑上浏览网页时,可以说 scroll through some pages。

22:Article errors(冠词错误)

× Yeah, actually I always see the advertisement on my phone when I open the app or when I go into computer and score some pages.

✓ Yeah, actually, I always see advertisements on my phone when I open an app or use my computer and scroll through some pages.

app 是单数可数名词,第一次提到时应使用不定冠词 an。computer 前需要限定词,例如 my computer。

5:Past tense issue(过去时错误)

× I think I've ever liked the Dior advertisement.

✓ I think I liked a Dior advertisement when I was a child.

句子谈论童年时的经历,应使用一般过去时 liked,而不是现在完成时 I've liked。明确说过去某个阶段时,通常使用一般过去时。

13:Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs(形容词或副词使用错误)

× I think I've ever liked the Dior advertisement.

✓ I think I liked a Dior advertisement when I was a child.

ever 通常用于疑问句、否定句或最高级结构中,在这个肯定句中使用不自然。这里直接使用 liked 更合适。

22:Article errors(冠词错误)

× I think I've ever liked the Dior advertisement.

✓ I think I liked a Dior advertisement when I was a child.

这里是第一次提到某一则 Dior 广告,因此应使用不定冠词 a,而不是 the。

26:Sentence structure errors(句子结构错误)

× For example, a beauty with a fascinating dress and dancing with in the hall acting is very beautiful is make me love.

✓ For example, it showed a beautiful woman in a fascinating dress dancing in a hall, and it made me love the advertisement.

原句中有多个成分堆叠,缺少清晰的主句结构。可以使用 it showed... and it made... 来分别表达广告内容和广告产生的影响。

11:Incorrect use of prepositions(介词使用错误)

× For example, a beauty with a fascinating dress and dancing with in the hall acting is very beautiful is make me love.

✓ For example, it showed a beautiful woman in a fascinating dress dancing in a hall, and it made me love the advertisement.

表示“在大厅里跳舞”应使用 dancing in a hall,而不是 dancing with in the hall。地点前通常使用介词 in。

5:Past tense issue(过去时错误)

× For example, a beauty with a fascinating dress and dancing with in the hall acting is very beautiful is make me love.

✓ For example, it showed a beautiful woman in a fascinating dress dancing in a hall, and it made me love the advertisement.

问题描述的是童年时看到广告后的感受,因此 show 和 make 都应使用过去式 showed 和 made。

26:Sentence structure errors(句子结构错误)

× I always use transport is underground.

✓ I usually use the underground as my main means of transport.

原句把 use transport 和 is underground 两个结构错误地连接在一起。可以使用“use the underground as my main means of transport”这一完整结构。

22:Article errors(冠词错误)

× I always use transport is underground.

✓ I usually use the underground as my main means of transport.

underground 在这里指具体的地铁系统,前面通常要加定冠词 the。

6:Present tense issue(现在时错误)

× I always seen some collar or some juice advertisement in the underground.

✓ I always see some colorful advertisements for juice on the underground.

always 表示经常发生的习惯,应使用一般现在时 see。seen 是过去分词,不能单独作为一般现在时的谓语。

9:Verb in the past participle form(过去分词形式错误)

× I always seen some collar or some juice advertisement in the underground.

✓ I always see some colorful advertisements for juice on the underground.

seen 是 see 的过去分词,通常需要和 have 或 be 等助动词搭配。这里表达日常习惯,应使用动词原形 see。

1:Singular and plural issue(单复数问题)

× I always seen some collar or some juice advertisement in the underground.

✓ I always see some colorful advertisements for juice on the underground.

some 后面可以接复数可数名词,因此 advertisement 应改为 advertisements。

12:Incorrect use of pronouns(代词使用错误)

× I think it's colorful and is, uh, interesting. I always look them and give me.

✓ I think they are colorful and interesting. I always look at them, and they give me ideas.

them 指代复数的 advertisements,因此前面的代词和 be 动词应使用复数形式 they are,而不是 it is。

11:Incorrect use of prepositions(介词使用错误)

× I think it's colorful and is, uh, interesting. I always look them and give me.

✓ I think they are colorful and interesting. I always look at them, and they give me ideas.

look 后面表示“看某物”时需要使用 look at,不能直接说 look them。

26:Sentence structure errors(句子结构错误)

× I think it's colorful and is, uh, interesting. I always look them and give me.

✓ I think they are colorful and interesting. I always look at them, and they give me ideas.

give me 是不完整结构,因为 give 需要说明“什么东西给我”。补充 ideas 后,句子结构完整,意思也更清楚。

5:Past tense issue(过去时错误)

× Yeah, actually my childhood dream is become a advertisement designer.

✓ Yeah, actually, my childhood dream was to become an advertisement designer.

childhood 表示过去的童年时期,因此 be 动词应使用过去式 was,而不是现在式 is。

22:Article errors(冠词错误)

× Yeah, actually my childhood dream is become a advertisement designer.

✓ Yeah, actually, my childhood dream was to become an advertisement designer.

advertisement 以元音音素开头,前面应使用 an,而不是 a。

26:Sentence structure errors(句子结构错误)

× Yeah, actually my childhood dream is become a advertisement designer.

✓ Yeah, actually, my childhood dream was to become an advertisement designer.

dream was 后面表达目标时,应使用 to become,而不能直接使用 become。常见结构是 dream was to do something。

26:Sentence structure errors(句子结构错误)

× It makes me because I love the colorful advertisement and this eye-catching advertisement is very interesting.

✓ I like them because I love colorful, eye-catching advertisements.

It makes me 是不完整的表达,缺少 make 的补语。这里直接使用 I like them because... 可以清楚表达喜欢广告的原因。

1:Singular and plural issue(单复数问题)

× It makes me because I love the colorful advertisement and this eye-catching advertisement is very interesting.

✓ I like them because I love colorful, eye-catching advertisements.

这里是在泛指广告,应使用复数 advertisements,而不是单数 advertisement。

22:Article errors(冠词错误)

× It makes me because I love the colorful advertisement and this eye-catching advertisement is very interesting.

✓ I like them because I love colorful, eye-catching advertisements.

泛指广告时不需要使用 the。若使用单数,则应说 a colorful advertisement;这里使用复数 advertisements 更自然。

27:Subject-verb agreement errors(主谓一致错误)

× Actually I like the soft juice or some soft drink advertisement because the advertisement always catch the drink or some water sprinkle to somewhere and I think their idea is fascinating.

✓ Actually, I like soft-drink advertisements because they always show drinks or water being sprayed somewhere, and I think their ideas are fascinating.

主语 advertisements 或 they 是复数,所以谓语应使用 show,而不是第三人称单数形式 catches。修改后主语和谓语保持一致。

10:Verb in the present participle form(现在分词形式错误)

× Actually I like the soft juice or some soft drink advertisement because the advertisement always catch the drink or some water sprinkle to somewhere and I think their idea is fascinating.

✓ Actually, I like soft-drink advertisements because they always show drinks or water being sprayed somewhere, and I think their ideas are fascinating.

表达“水被喷洒”时,需要使用 being sprayed。being 是现在分词,和过去分词 sprayed 一起构成进行中的被动结构。

21:Incorrect passive voice(被动语态错误)

× Actually I like the soft juice or some soft drink advertisement because the advertisement always catch the drink or some water sprinkle to somewhere and I think their idea is fascinating.

✓ Actually, I like soft-drink advertisements because they always show drinks or water being sprayed somewhere, and I think their ideas are fascinating.

水是“被喷洒”的对象,因此应使用被动结构 water being sprayed,而不能使用主动形式 water sprinkle。

1:Singular and plural issue(单复数问题)

× Actually I like the soft juice or some soft drink advertisement because the advertisement always catch the drink or some water sprinkle to somewhere and I think their idea is fascinating.

✓ Actually, I like soft-drink advertisements because they always show drinks or water being sprayed somewhere, and I think their ideas are fascinating.

前面谈论的是多则广告,因此 advertisement 应改为 advertisements;相应地,单数 idea 也应改为复数 ideas。

21:Incorrect passive voice(被动语态错误)

× I often be attracted by Apples advertisement.

✓ I am often attracted by Apple advertisements.

be attracted 是被动结构,主语 I 需要搭配 am。一般现在时的被动语态结构是 am/is/are + 过去分词。

6:Present tense issue(现在时错误)

× I often be attracted by Apples advertisement.

✓ I am often attracted by Apple advertisements.

often 表示现在经常发生的情况,应使用一般现在时 am。不能直接使用 be 作为主句谓语。

22:Article errors(冠词错误)

× I often be attracted by Apples advertisement.

✓ I am often attracted by Apple advertisements.

这里泛指 Apple 的广告,使用复数 advertisements 时不需要冠词。若使用单数,应说 an Apple advertisement。

13:Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs(形容词或副词使用错误)

× I think it is simple and the idea is less is more. It's very fascinated and I like Apple's product very much.

✓ I think it is simple, and the idea is that less is more. It is very fascinating, and I like Apple's products very much.

fascinating 表示“令人着迷的”,用于描述广告;fascinated 表示“感到着迷的”,通常描述人的感受。广告本身应使用 fascinating。

Vocabulario

Beautiful— Attractive
Interesting— Absorbing
Simple— Straightforward; Clear; Plain; Candid
Soft— Mushy; Swampy; Squashy; Velvety; Gentle
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