Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, ‘plenty of way advertising’은 문법적으로 부정확하므로 ‘There are many forms of advertising’처럼 표현하세요. ‘while I use’는 일반적인 습관을 말할 때 ‘when I use’ 또는 ‘while using’이 더 자연스럽습니다. 마지막 문장이 완성되지 않아 감점되었으므로, 광고가 나타나는 구체적인 위치나 종류를 한 가지 덧붙여 완전한 문장으로 마무리하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, definitely. I see a lot of advertisements whenever I use my phone or computer. They usually appear on social media, websites, and mobile apps. Most of them are for clothes, food, or electronic devices.

Sugerencia: ‘when I was in child’는 ‘when I was a child’로 수정해야 하며, 과거의 습관이므로 ‘I just went’ 또는 ‘I would go’를 사용하세요. ‘go went’와 문장 끝의 ‘or’처럼 자기 수정과 미완성 문장이 많아 의미 전달이 불안정합니다. 기억나는 광고가 없다는 답변 뒤에 어린 시절 광고를 잘 보지 않았던 이유를 완전한 문장으로 설명하세요.

Ejemplo: I can’t recall any particular advertisement from my childhood. Whenever a commercial came on TV, I would usually go to the bathroom or get something to eat. As a result, I didn’t pay much attention to advertisements back then.

Sugerencia: ‘advertisement’는 여기서 셀 수 있는 명사이므로 ‘advertisements’가 적절하고, ‘on train or buses’는 ‘on trains or buses’로 고치세요. ‘ranging from a poster to screen’은 ‘ranging from simple posters to digital screens’처럼 병렬 구조를 맞추면 자연스럽습니다. 마지막 부분이 끊겼으므로 광고의 종류나 승객에게 미치는 효과를 한 문장으로 완성하세요.

Ejemplo: Absolutely. I see plenty of advertisements on trains and buses. They range from simple posters to digital screens showing commercials. Most of them promote restaurants, mobile services, or local events.

Sugerencia: ‘No, definitely not’으로 의견을 명확히 제시했고, 이유와 상황도 포함했습니다. 다만 ‘watch Netflix’ 또는 ‘watch a show on Netflix’가 자연스럽고, ‘interrupt my attention’보다는 ‘interrupt my viewing’ 또는 ‘make it difficult for me to concentrate’가 적절합니다. ‘Too many advertisements’의 반복을 줄이고 ‘They’나 ‘These ads’로 연결하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

Ejemplo: No, definitely not. Too many advertisements distract me, especially when I’m watching my favorite shows on Netflix. They interrupt my viewing and make it difficult for me to concentrate. I also find frequent online ads quite annoying.

Sugerencia: ‘babies and animals appears’는 주어가 복수이므로 ‘babies and animals appearing’ 또는 ‘advertisements featuring babies and animals’로 수정하세요. ‘that I like it’은 불필요하므로 삭제하고, ‘it makes me unwind’는 ‘they help me relax’가 더 자연스럽습니다. 좋아하는 광고의 종류를 먼저 명확히 말한 뒤, 왜 좋아하는지 연결어를 사용해 설명하세요.

Ejemplo: I like advertisements that feature babies or animals. They usually make me smile and help me relax because they are cute and entertaining. In addition, these advertisements are often more memorable than serious or overly commercial ones.

Sugerencia: 경험을 묻는 질문이므로 ‘Probably I have bought’보다 ‘Yes, I have’로 자신 있게 시작하는 것이 좋습니다. ‘because of advertisement’는 ‘because of an advertisement’ 또는 ‘because of advertisements’로, ‘I didn’t needed’는 ‘I didn’t need it’으로 고치세요. 광고가 매력적이었던 구체적인 이유나 구매한 물건의 예를 하나 제시하면 내용과 어휘 점수가 향상됩니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have bought things because of advertisements. Once, I bought a skin-care product that I didn’t really need because its advertisement was very appealing. It showed impressive results and offered a special discount, so I decided to try it.

× There are plenty of way advertising on the app as well as social media.

✓ There are plenty of ways to advertise on apps as well as on social media.

The quantifier plenty of must be followed by a plural countable noun, so way must become ways. The phrase way advertising is also incorrect; use ways to advertise. Apps and social media are general plural or uncountable references, so the articles are unnecessary.

× So I always I can

✓ So I can always see them.

The adverb always is placed incorrectly between the subject and the modal verb. With a modal verb, the usual order is subject + modal verb + adverb + main verb: I can always see them.

× No I couldn't recall any advertisement until when I was in child.

✓ No, I couldn't recall any advertisements from when I was a child.

The expression in child is incorrect. Use the preposition phrase when I was a child. The preposition from is appropriate when referring to memories from a period of time.

× No I couldn't recall any advertisement until when I was in child.

✓ No, I couldn't recall any advertisements from when I was a child.

Advertisement is a countable noun, so it should be plural when referring to advertisements in general. Also, child is a singular countable noun and requires the article a: a child.

× Normally when commercial advertisement appeared on TV, I just go went somewhere like a washroom or

✓ Normally, when a commercial advertisement appeared on TV, I would go somewhere like the washroom.

A singular countable noun such as commercial advertisement needs an article. Use a commercial advertisement when introducing it for the first time. The phrase the washroom is natural when referring to a specific room in a familiar place.

× Normally when commercial advertisement appeared on TV, I just go went somewhere like a washroom or

✓ Normally, when a commercial advertisement appeared on TV, I would go somewhere like the washroom.

The question refers to a childhood habit in the past. Therefore, go must be changed to the past-related form would go. The original combination go went is an incorrect self-correction.

× Absolutely, I see plenty of advertisement on train or buses ranging from just a poster to screen

✓ Absolutely, I see plenty of advertisements on trains or buses, ranging from just a poster to screens.

Plenty of must be followed by the plural countable noun advertisements. Trains and buses should also be plural because the answer refers to transport in general. Screen should be plural to match posters in the range from...to... structure.

× Absolutely, I see plenty of advertisement on train or buses ranging from just a poster to screen

✓ Absolutely, I see plenty of advertisements on trains or buses, ranging from just a poster to screens.

The countable noun advertisement needs a plural form after plenty of. Screen is also a countable noun; using screens makes the general meaning and the parallel structure clearer.

× Absolutely, I see plenty of advertisement on train or buses ranging from just a poster to screen there are a lot of commercial advertisement for

✓ Absolutely, I see plenty of advertisements on trains or buses, ranging from posters to screens. There are also a lot of commercial advertisements.

The original answer joins several complete ideas without appropriate punctuation or a conjunction. Separating the ideas into two sentences makes the structure grammatical and easier to understand. The final phrase for is incomplete and has been removed.

× There are a lot of commercial advertisement for

✓ There are a lot of commercial advertisements.

The phrase a lot of requires a plural countable noun in this context, so advertisement must become advertisements. The original sentence also ends with the incomplete preposition for, which is unnecessary here.

× If I had to choose, I would like to say babies and animals appears on advertisement that I like it because when I look at babies or animals it makes me unwind so I like commercial

✓ If I had to choose, I would say that I like advertisements featuring babies and animals because looking at them helps me unwind.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined without a clear grammatical structure. The revised version uses that to introduce the idea and because to give the reason. It also avoids the unnecessary relative pronoun it and removes the incomplete ending.

× Babies and animals appears on advertisement that I like it

✓ I like advertisements featuring babies and animals.

The subject babies and animals is plural, so the verb should be appear, not appears. However, the sentence is more natural when rewritten as I like advertisements featuring babies and animals, because the original word order is unclear.

× Babies and animals appears on advertisement that I like it

✓ I like advertisements featuring babies and animals.

Advertisement should be plural because the answer refers to advertisements in general. The plural nouns babies and animals are correct in the revised sentence.

× Babies and animals appears on advertisement that I like it because when I look at babies or animals it makes me unwind

✓ I like advertisements featuring babies and animals because looking at them helps me unwind.

The pronoun it does not have a clear grammatical antecedent. Use them to refer to the plural nouns babies and animals. The revised structure also avoids the unclear phrase advertisement that I like it.

× I have bought something because of advertisement

✓ I have bought something because of an advertisement.

Advertisement is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use an because advertisement begins with a vowel sound.

× Probably I have bought something because of advertisement even I didn't needed because the advertisement was very appealing to me.

✓ I have probably bought something because of an advertisement, even though I didn't need it, because the advertisement was very appealing to me.

Even cannot introduce this contrast by itself. Use even though to mean despite the fact that. The pronoun it refers back to something, and the two because clauses are separated with commas to make the relationships clearer.

× I didn't needed something because the advertisement was very appealing to me.

✓ I didn't need something because the advertisement was very appealing to me.

After the auxiliary did or didn't, use the base form of the verb. Therefore, needed must become need: didn't need.