Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答は直接的で分かりやすいですが、文法（冠詞・単数・動詞形）の誤り、語彙の繰り返し、冗長さが見られます。より自然に聞こえる一文目を作り、次に具体例（どのようなアプリやサイトで見るか）を短く付け加えると良いです。接続詞で文をつなげ、一文は最大5文に収めてください。

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone because I watch a lot of short videos on apps like YouTube and TikTok, so ads appear frequently between clips.

Sugerencia: 意味は伝わりますが、時制と受動態の誤用、語順や語形の間違いが目立ちます。まずトピック文で「はい、あります」と明確にし、続けて具体的にどの広告（どの玩具やCMの特徴）が印象的だったかを一つ挙げて理由を述べてください。接続語で流れを良くしましょう。

Ejemplo: Yes, one commercial impressed me when I was a child: a colourful toy ad that showed children playing together, which made me want the toy because it looked fun and friendly.

Sugerencia: 内容は分かりますが、語順・冠詞と複数形の誤りがあり、「waste time」の使い方も不自然です。まず明確なトピック文で「はい、よく見かける」と述べ、次に理由を一つに絞って具体的に説明してください（どんな広告が多いか、車内のポスターやスクリーンなど）。

Ejemplo: Yes, I often notice ads on trains, especially posters and digital screens, because I don't use a smartphone during the commute, so I end up reading the advertisements on the walls.

Sugerencia: 率直に意見を述べていますが、論理の繋げ方と時制が混在しています。まず短い主張（I don't like advertisements.）を述べ、次に具体的な理由を1つ挙げて過去の例を補足すると自然です。接続詞（because, for example）を用いて整理してください。

Ejemplo: I don't like advertisements because they can be overhyped; for example, when I was in junior high I bought something based on an ad that turned out to be different from what was promised.

Sugerencia: 答えが断片的な短文でまとまりに欠けます。まずは結論（I don't really like ads）を一文で述べ、次に例外として好きな広告の種類（映画予告編）を挙げ、その理由（映像や音楽が魅力的だから）を一文で補足してください。文は連続した流れで。

Ejemplo: I don't really like most advertisements, but if I had to choose I prefer movie trailers because their music and visuals are exciting and make me curious about the story.

Sugerencia: 文法（受動態の誤用、過去形や表現の選択）の問題があります。まず簡潔な肯定・否定を述べ、続けて具体的な例（何を買ったか、どんな広告で、どのように感じたか）を一つのまとまった文で説明してください。自然な感情表現を使いましょう。

Ejemplo: Yes, I bought many toys because of advertisements around my birthday; the colourful toy ads persuaded me, and I felt very happy when I received them.

× Yes, I often see advertisement when I use my phone.

✓ Yes, I often see advertisements when I use my phone.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because the student is referring to multiple instances seen regularly; use plural for countable nouns when referring to more than one. Suggestion: Use 'advertisements' when talking about seeing ads frequently or in general.

× I often watch videos by using it.

✓ I often watch videos on it.

Using 'by using it' is awkward; use the preposition 'on' with devices (watch videos on my phone). Suggestion: Say 'watch videos on my phone' for natural English.

× So there are a lot of opportunities to see the advertisement.

✓ So there are a lot of opportunities to see advertisements.

Again 'advertisement' should be plural because 'a lot of opportunities' implies multiple advertisements. Use plural form for countable nouns in general statements.

× Yes, I have impressed by advertisement when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I was impressed by an advertisement when I was a child.

The student used the present perfect passive 'have impressed' incorrectly and omitted the article. The correct passive past is 'was impressed by' and 'an advertisement' is needed for a single ad. Suggestion: Use 'I was impressed by an advertisement' for past passive.

× At that time, I like toys.

✓ At that time, I liked toys.

Tense mismatch: 'At that time' refers to the past, so use past tense 'liked' not present 'like'. Suggestion: Keep verb tense consistent with time expressions.

× And then I was curious about toys advertisement.

✓ And then I was curious about toy advertisements.

Use plural 'advertisements' and 'toy' as a noun modifier should be singular ('toy advertisements'). Also 'And then' is often unnecessary; keep 'I was curious about toy advertisements.' Suggestion: Use 'toy advertisements' for natural modifier + noun order.

× Yes, I usually see advertisement when I go to school with train.

✓ Yes, I usually see advertisements when I go to school by train.

Use plural 'advertisements' and the correct preposition 'by train' when referring to transport. Suggestion: Say 'see advertisements when I go to school by train.'

× I don't have a smartphone so I have nothing to do on the trains.

✓ I don't have a smartphone, so I have nothing to do on the train.

If talking about the journey in general use singular 'train' or 'trains' consistently; 'on the train' is more natural when referring to the typical commute. Also add a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: Use 'on the train' for habitual travel.

× Therefore I often see it to waste time.

✓ Therefore I often look at advertisements to pass the time.

Original structure 'see it to waste time' is unnatural and 'it' is vague. Use 'look at advertisements' and idiom 'pass the time'. Suggestion: Replace with 'look at advertisements to pass the time.'

× I don't like advertisement so they sometimes are hype and I was deceived by the false information when I was a junior high school student.

✓ I don't like advertisements because they are sometimes hyped, and I was deceived by false information when I was a junior high school student.

Use plural 'advertisements'. 'Are hype' is incorrect; use 'are hyped' or 'are sometimes exaggerated'. Also combine clauses with 'because' and add comma. Suggestion: Use 'advertisements are sometimes hyped' and 'deceived by false information.'

× I don't like any kind of advertising, but. If I had to choose. I like movie advertising.

✓ I don't like any kind of advertising, but if I had to choose, I would say I like movie advertisements.

Fragments 'but.' and 'If I had to choose.' must be combined into one sentence. Use conditional 'would say' for hypothetical and plural 'advertisements'. Suggestion: Combine into a single conditional sentence.

× I have been bought a lot of toys because of advertisement in my birthday.

✓ I have bought a lot of toys because of advertisements on my birthday.

'Have been bought' is passive and incorrect here; the student is the buyer so use active 'I have bought'. Use plural 'advertisements' and preposition 'on my birthday'. Suggestion: Use 'I bought' or 'I have bought' depending on context, and 'because of advertisements on my birthday.'

× I was pleasured at that time.

✓ I was pleased at that time.

'Pleasured' is rarely used; the correct adjective for feeling happy is 'pleased'. Suggestion: Use 'pleased' to express satisfaction or happiness.