Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical errors, repetition and some awkward phrasing. To improve: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence. 2) Use correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement (e.g., “ads” or “advertisements”). 3) Avoid redundancy by combining ideas with linking words (e.g., “and”, “also”, “for example”). 4) Provide one or two specific examples with brief details. Aim for 2–4 concise sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on my phone and computer. For example, I often get ads for clothing that show different colours and sizes, and for mobile games that highlight gameplay or characters. These ads help me decide what to look at further.

Sugerencia: The answer shows enthusiasm but is unclear and has many grammar and word-choice errors (e.g., “bride” likely means “bread” or “cake” and phrases like “it looks delicious”). To improve: 1) Clarify what the ad was for. 2) Use correct nouns and pronouns. 3) Explain briefly why it impressed you with concrete details (visuals, music, characters). 4) Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes. I remember a food advertisement for a white sponge cake that impressed me as a child. The cake looked unusually fluffy and pure white, and the ad used gentle music and close-up shots that made it look irresistible.

Sugerencia: Your answer attempts to describe locations of ads but contains confusing vocabulary (“trees” likely meant “walls” or “doors”) and unclear references like “hospital 1”. To improve: 1) Use correct location words for transport (e.g., ‘on the back of the seat’, ‘on the carriage walls’, ‘on screens’). 2) Give specific examples of the types of ads and why they appear there. 3) Use linking words to organize points (e.g., “for example”, “also”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see many ads on public transport. For example, hospitals advertise on the back of seats, and schools or training centres appear on carriage walls or digital screens. These ads target commuters who may need local services.

Sugerencia: You express a balanced opinion, which is good, but clarity and grammar need work. To improve: 1) Use clearer phrases (e.g., “I’m on the fence” is fine but follow with precise reasons). 2) Correct word choices (“comments” should be “products” or “items”). 3) Give one clear positive and one clear negative with linking words (e.g., “However”). 4) Avoid filler words like “uh”.

Ejemplo: I’m mixed about advertisements. On the positive side, ads help me compare products when I plan to buy something. However, I dislike intrusive or irrelevant ads that pop up while I’m watching videos.

Sugerencia: The answer is confusing and contradicts itself. Improve by: 1) Stating clearly what type of ads you prefer (visual, informative, short, etc.). 2) Avoid contradictions and ensure grammar is correct (e.g., ‘I like closing all video game advertisements’ is unclear). 3) Give a brief reason and an example. 4) Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer short, informative ads, especially for clothing and video games. For instance, I like ads that show how clothes look on real people or short game trailers that highlight gameplay, because they help me decide quickly.

Sugerencia: This answer is relevant and gives a recent example but has grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. To improve: 1) Use past tense consistently and correct article usage (e.g., “the chips looked spicy”). 2) Add one detail about why the ad persuaded you (packaging, review, discount). 3) Use linking words to make it coherent.

Ejemplo: Yes. Two weeks ago I bought a packet of potato chips after seeing an online ad. The ad showed spicy seasoning and attractive packaging, which convinced me to try them, so I purchased through the link in the ad.

× I always see clothing or games, advertisement to be specific.

✓ I always see clothing or game advertisements, to be specific.

The noun 'advertisement' should be plural to match 'clothing or games' and 'clothing or game advertisements' uses correct noun forms and parallel structure. Use plural 'advertisements' when referring to multiple instances. Suggestion: Use parallel nouns and pluralize when referring to multiple items (e.g., 'clothing or game advertisements').

× I always see which clothes is more suitable for me, like colours or size.

✓ I always see which clothes are more suitable for me, such as color or size.

Subject 'clothes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also 'such as' is more natural than 'like' when giving examples and 'colour' vs 'color' can follow either British or American spelling consistently. Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with plural subject and use 'such as' for examples.

× And to the video games I often see which one is going to be attractive.

✓ For video games, I often see which ones will be attractive.

The original sentence has awkward preposition use and number mismatch. 'Which one' should be 'which ones' to match plural 'video games', and 'is going to be attractive' is wordy; 'will be attractive' is clearer. Suggestion: Use 'for' for topic, pluralize 'ones', and simplify tense to 'will' for prediction.

× I remember I saw a bride advertisement that really attracted me.

✓ I remember I saw a bridal advertisement that really attracted me.

The phrase 'bride advertisement' is unnatural; 'bridal advertisement' or 'an advertisement for a bride' is appropriate. 'Bridal' is the correct adjective form relating to brides. Suggestion: Use adjectival form 'bridal' for things related to brides.

× That bride is totally different from the one that I saw before.

✓ That bride is totally different from the ones I had seen before.

If referencing multiple previous ads, use plural 'ones' and past perfect 'had seen' can show prior experience; simple past 'saw' is acceptable, but 'ones I had seen before' clarifies sequence. Suggestion: Match singular/plural reference and use consistent tense to show sequence.

× They that one is totally white and it it looks like so delicious even I never ate it before.

✓ That one was completely white and looked so appealing, even though I had never eaten it before.

Original has extra 'they', repeated 'it', incorrect comparison 'looks like so delicious', and wrong tense sequence. Use 'was' and 'looked' for past description and 'even though I had never eaten it before' for past perfect to indicate prior lack of experience. Suggestion: Remove extra words, use correct past tense forms, and replace 'delicious' with 'appealing' for appearance.

× I often see the advertisements on the trees, mainly about schools or hospitals, and the hospital 1 is always on the back of the seat and school 1 is often on the top of the small screen on the train.

✓ I often see advertisements on the trains, mainly about schools or hospitals; hospital ads are usually on the back of the seat and school ads often appear at the top of the small screens on the train.

Original misused 'on the trees' instead of 'on the trains' (likely typo) and had awkward phrasing 'hospital 1' and 'school 1'. Prepositions and noun forms were incorrect. Use 'on the back of the seat' -> 'on the back of the seat' or 'on the back of seats' and 'at the top of the small screens'. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions for location ('on trains', 'on the back of the seat', 'at the top of the screen') and consistent plural/singular forms.

× Actually speaking, I'm on the fence about this question.

✓ Actually, I'm on the fence about this question.

'Actually speaking' is unnecessary and awkward; 'Actually' alone is natural in spoken English. Suggestion: Use concise introductory adverbs like 'Actually'.

× If I want to buy some comments, I will see the advertisement to choose which one is most suitable for me.

✓ If I want to buy something, I will look at the advertisement to choose which one is most suitable for me.

'Comments' is incorrect word choice; should be 'something' or a specific item. 'See the advertisement' is better expressed as 'look at the advertisement'. Suggestion: Use correct noun ('something' or specific item) and verb 'look at' for examining ads.

× But on the other hand, uh, sometimes there are going to be some unusual advertisement, especially you are focused on your phone for movies.

✓ But on the other hand, sometimes there are some unusual advertisements, especially when you are focused on your phone watching movies.

'There are going to be' is awkward for general statement; use 'there are'. 'Advertisement' should be plural. 'Especially you are focused on your phone for movies' needs 'when you are focused on your phone watching movies'. Suggestion: Use present simple for general truths, pluralize nouns, and use 'when' + verb-ing for simultaneous actions.

× As I mentioned, I like closing all video games advertisement because I hope my clothes looks like so different and so fashion and in my free time I really like video games, so I always to see some video games advertise.

✓ As I mentioned, I like closing all video game advertisements because I hope my clothes will look different and fashionable, and in my free time I really like video games, so I always watch some video game ads.

Multiple issues: 'closing' should be 'closing' is okay but 'closing all video game advertisements' or 'closing video game ads' is natural; 'video games advertisement' -> 'video game advertisements'; 'my clothes looks' should be 'my clothes will look' (plural subject + future prediction) and 'so fashion' -> 'fashionable'. 'I always to see' is ungrammatical; use 'I always watch' or 'I always see'. Suggestion: Use correct noun forms, subject-verb agreement, adjective 'fashionable', and proper verbs for viewing ('watch').

× Around 2 weeks ago I bought some potato chips on the advertisements.

✓ Around two weeks ago I bought some potato chips because of an advertisement.

'On the advertisements' is incorrect preposition for cause; use 'because of an advertisement' or 'after seeing an advertisement'. Also write numbers in words for formal speech optionally. Use singular 'an advertisement' if one ad prompted purchase. Suggestion: Use 'because of' or 'after seeing' to indicate reason and choose singular/plural appropriately.

× The chips it looks like spicy and so delicious and the appearance is so great.

✓ The chips looked spicy and very delicious, and their appearance was great.

Unnecessary pronoun 'it' and incorrect tense/person. Use past tense 'looked' because purchase occurred in past, and use plural pronoun 'their' to refer to 'chips'. Suggestion: Remove redundant pronouns, match tense, and use correct possessive pronoun for plural nouns.

× So I buy it through that advertisement.

✓ So I bought them through that advertisement.

Tense should be past 'bought' to match 'around two weeks ago'. 'It' is incorrect for 'chips' (plural), use 'them'. 'Through that advertisement' is acceptable but 'because of that advertisement' is more natural. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use correct pronoun number; use 'because of' for cause.