Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and grammatical: state a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers like "uh" and vague phrases like "one or thing". Correct verb choices (e.g., "watching podcasts") and word order ("based on recent research and my shopping habits").

Ejemplo: Yes. Ads often pop up on my phone or computer when I watch videos, listen to podcasts, or play games. For example, I sometimes see ads tailored to my recent searches and shopping history, which suggests they are targeted based on my online activity.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the ad and why it impressed you, then give one or two specific details. Use correct tense and vocabulary ("when I was a child", "gave me a warm feeling"). Explain what in the ad created the feeling (images, music, actors) and use linking words like "because" or "for example".

Ejemplo: When I was a child, an ad for Kapolei left a strong impression on me because it showed a warm family scene. For example, the commercial featured a family sitting together, sharing food and laughing, and the gentle music made the scene feel comforting and memorable.

Sugerencia: Provide a concise topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use correct nouns ("trains" not "10's"). Give specific examples and link ideas with words like "because", "for instance" or "such as". Watch for plural/singular agreement and remove duplicated words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I see many advertisements on trains and buses because they carry large numbers of commuters. For instance, you often find posters, digital screens, and video ads promoting apps, services, or local businesses in stations and on vehicles.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion with one or two well-explained reasons, avoiding fillers and grammatical errors. Use correct verb agreement ("they distract me"), and expand slightly with a linked example ("for example"). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: No, I don't like advertisements because they interrupt what I'm watching and reduce my concentration. For example, when an ad appears in the middle of a video I often turn my phone off or switch the app because it frustrates me.

Sugerencia: Answer the question directly—name a type you like or say you don't like any, then give concise reasons and one specific example. Maintain correct tense ("while I am watching") and avoid repeating the same point. If you dislike all ads, say so and briefly explain what kind you might tolerate (e.g., short, relevant ads).

Ejemplo: I generally don't like advertisements because they distract me and interrupt videos. However, if I had to choose a type I could tolerate, it would be short, relevant ads that match my interests, such as a ten-second ad for an app I actually want to try.

× advertisements usually pop up on my phone or computer whenever I am seeing some videos or watching some podcast or even playing some games.

✓ advertisements usually pop up on my phone or computer whenever I am watching videos, listening to podcasts, or playing games.

The progressive form 'am seeing' is not used with 'see videos'; 'watch' or 'listen' with -ing is correct. Also 'watching some podcast' should be 'listening to podcasts' or 'watching podcasts' and plural nouns are preferred for general statements. Use parallel structure for the list.

× Uh, moreover, I've seen one or thing also that recent research or my shopping habits are the base of these advertising.

✓ Uh, moreover, I've seen something that recent research or my shopping habits are the basis of these advertisements.

Use 'something' instead of 'one or thing'. 'Base' should be the noun 'basis'. 'Advertising' in this context is countable plural 'advertisements'. Also 'recent research or my shopping habits are the basis' is clearer.

× When I was child, I remember I watched a pad of Kapolei which gives me warm feeling.

✓ When I was a child, I remember watching a TV ad for Kapolei that gave me a warm feeling.

Missing article 'a' before 'child'. 'I remember I watched' is awkward; use 'I remember watching'. 'pad' likely meant 'ad'. Tense consistency: past simple 'gave' fits 'when I was a child'.

× Moreover, in this ad there is a family sitting which all of the members are sharing over each other.

✓ Moreover, in this ad there is a family sitting together; all the members are supporting each other.

Relative clause 'which' is incorrect for people; use a simpler structure. 'Sharing over each other' is ungrammatical; use 'together' or 'supporting each other' depending on intended meaning.

× Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on 10's and buses because these vehicles carry many commuters so advertisement can reach large number of people.

✓ Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on trains and buses because these vehicles carry many commuters, so advertisements can reach a large number of people.

'10's' appears to be a typo for 'trains'. Use plural 'advertisements' consistently. Add 'a' before 'large number'. Commas improve readability.

× So you find find you often find posters, digital screens and video are promoting apps or services.

✓ You often find posters, digital screens, and videos promoting apps or services.

Repeated 'find' is an error. Parallel structure: 'posters, digital screens, and videos promoting' is concise. 'Video' should be plural 'videos' here.

× Uh, well, I don't like them. Uh, it's awful to me.

✓ Uh, well, I don't like them. They are awful to me.

Use 'they' to refer back to plural 'ads' rather than 'it'. Subject-pronoun agreement is needed.

× It distracts me and even it's uh, lessen my concentration while watching videos.

✓ They distract me and even lessen my concentration while I'm watching videos.

'It distracts me' should agree with plural 'ads' -> 'They distract me'. 'it's lessen' is ungrammatical; use 'lessen' with proper subject. Also include 'I'm' for ongoing action.

× Whenever ad comes in between I just put my phone off in frustration.

✓ Whenever an ad comes in between, I just turn my phone off in frustration.

Missing article 'an' before 'ad'. 'Put my phone off' is nonstandard; use 'turn my phone off'. Add comma for clarity.

× No, I don't like the advertisement because they are distracting and often break my concentration while I was watching a video.

✓ No, I don't like advertisements because they are distracting and often break my concentration while I am watching a video.

Mismatch: singular 'the advertisement' with plural 'they'; use plural 'advertisements'. Tense: 'while I was watching' should be present progressive 'while I am watching' to match general habit.

× For example, if an ad appears in middle of the web, I either pause the video or switch off my phone because it annoys me a lot.

✓ For example, if an ad appears in the middle of the web page, I either pause the video or switch off my phone because it annoys me a lot.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'middle'. 'Web' alone is vague; 'web page' is clearer. Sentence otherwise grammatically correct.