Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence naming the ad, then give two specific supporting details (celebrity endorsement and your mother buying the product). Reduce hesitations and fix grammar (tense, articles, word order). Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to show cause and effect.

Ejemplo: When I was a child, a cosmetics commercial impressed me because it featured my favorite TV celebrity. Because she used the product and looked attractive, I asked my mother to buy it, and she often did. As a result, I associated that brand with quality and felt happy using it.

Sugerencia: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example and explain its effect. Avoid trailing off; finish your thoughts. Use linking words such as 'for example' and 'as a result'. Correct grammar (singular/plural, verb forms) and reduce filler words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see advertising on trains and other transport. For example, when I took a train to Guangzhou, small screens played trailers for Cantonese films. Because these videos are shown repeatedly on board, they make me more aware of local movies and sometimes encourage me to watch them.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear direct answer (Yes/No and reason). Give two specific reasons with examples and use linking words like 'because' and 'however'. Correct grammar (plural forms, collocations like 'spoil the cityscape', 'misleading' or 'false claims'). Avoid repetition of the same complaint.

Ejemplo: No, I don't like advertisements because many billboards spoil the cityscape and make places feel cluttered. Also, some ads make exaggerated or false claims, so I find them untrustworthy and annoying.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with a topic sentence (I prefer ...), then give two clear reasons and an example. Use linking words ('because', 'for example', 'so') and correct phrasing ('video ads', 'relax', 'make an impression'). Keep to 2–4 sentences and avoid vague phrases.

Ejemplo: I prefer video advertisements because they are short and entertaining, so they don't waste much time. For example, a short humorous ad can make me smile and help me relax after a long day.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence (Yes/No plus context). Be specific about where you see ads (school computers, websites) and give one or two consequences (hard to close, annoying). Fix grammar and odd phrases ('pop-ups', 'hard to close', 'appear on the screen'). Avoid repetition and filler.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see advertisements when I use computers at school. For instance, many websites display pop-up ads that are hard to close, which interrupts my work and is quite annoying.

× Definitely that was an advertisement about the cosmetics and they, they hire the celebrity would who is my favorite type on the TV so I can enjoy the advertisement via umm, buying the product.

✓ Definitely it was an advertisement for cosmetics and they hired a celebrity who is my favorite on TV, so I enjoyed the advertisement and bought the product.

The original sentence misused pronouns and relative clauses ('they, they hire the celebrity would who is my favorite type') and mixed tenses. Use 'it' to refer to 'an advertisement', use 'for cosmetics' (preposition), use past tense 'hired' to match 'was', and a correct relative clause 'who is my favorite on TV'. Also split into clearer clauses: 'so I enjoyed... and bought...'. Suggestion: Simplify clauses, keep consistent past tense, and use correct relative pronoun 'who'.

× And my mom always, uh, bought some of the cosmetics.

✓ And my mom always bought some cosmetics.

Use 'bought some cosmetics' (no article 'the' or 'of' needed). 'Some of the cosmetics' would imply a specific set previously mentioned. Suggestion: Omit unnecessary prepositions/articles for general statements.

× So I would recommend this to her and she will buy some.

✓ So I would recommend it to her and she would buy some.

Mixing conditional/modal forms: 'would recommend' pairs with 'would buy' for hypothetical or habitual past contexts. Using 'will' creates a tense mismatch. Suggestion: Keep modal consistency (would... would) or use present simple 'I recommend... and she buys' for habitual facts.

× I'm really happy for now.

✓ I'm really happy now.

The phrase 'for now' is redundant with 'now'. 'Happy for now' is acceptable but less natural; 'I'm really happy now' is clearer. Suggestion: Use 'now' for current state.

× Yeah, of course there are some advertisement about the movie because the authority want to promote the movie not produced in their province.

✓ Yeah, of course there are some advertisements about the movie because the authorities want to promote movies not produced in their province.

Use plural 'advertisements' with 'some'. 'Authority' as a singular is awkward; use 'authorities' or 'the authorities'. Also pluralize 'movie' to 'movies' for general statement and use present tense 'want' -> 'want' matches 'authorities'. Suggestion: Match singular/plural and use appropriate quantifiers.

× When I umm took the train to Guangzhou just like Canton and they always uh, playing some video about the Cantonese and Canton film in the TV mini TV on the channel, which made me really.

✓ When I took the train to Guangzhou (Canton), they were always playing videos about Cantonese films on the small TV screen, which impressed me a lot.

Use past progressive 'were playing' for ongoing past action. 'Mini TV on the channel' is unclear; 'small TV screen' is natural. 'Made me really' is incomplete; 'impressed me a lot' completes the idea. Suggestion: Use past progressive for ongoing events and complete the result clause.

× Not pretty much, because I think advertisement are kind of ugly and it just spoil you the cityscape.

✓ Not really, because I think advertisements are kind of ugly and they spoil the cityscape.

'Not pretty much' should be 'Not really'. Use plural 'advertisements' and plural verb 'are'. 'It just spoil you the cityscape' has wrong subject and verb; 'they spoil the cityscape' is correct. Suggestion: Match subject-verb number and use appropriate adverb 'really'.

× I really hate it and that is probably because I'm really sick of the advertisement and I think it takes us a really long time to look at them and some of them are still fake.

✓ I really hate them and that is probably because I'm sick of the advertisements; I think they take a long time to view and some of them are fake.

Pronoun agreement: 'advertisement' singular vs plural 'them'. Use 'them' to refer to 'advertisements'. 'It takes us a really long time to look at them' is wordy; 'they take a long time to view' is clearer. Suggestion: Keep number consistent and simplify phrasing.

× I don't believe in the same on advertisement.

✓ I don't trust advertisements to be truthful.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Don't believe in the same on advertisement' likely means 'I don't believe the claims in advertisements'. 'Trust advertisements to be truthful' conveys intended meaning. Suggestion: Use clear verbs like 'trust' or 'believe' and specify the object.

× What nervous? Hard to say.

✓ Which kind? It's hard to say.

'What nervous?' is ungrammatical. The examiner asked 'What kind of advertising do you like?' so 'Which kind?' or 'What kind?' fits. 'Hard to say' should be 'It's hard to say.' Suggestion: Use standard question words and include necessary subject.

× I think the video form is preferred by me because I think this doesn't take me ages to look at them and it's not only interesting but also help me to unwind.

✓ I prefer video ads because they don't take me ages to watch, and they are not only interesting but also help me unwind.

'Preferred by me' is passive and awkward; active 'I prefer' is natural. 'Doesn't take me ages to look at them' -> 'they don't take me ages to watch'. 'Help me to unwind' -> 'help me unwind' (omit 'to'). Suggestion: Use active voice and correct verb + -ing where needed.

× Perhaps because some of the of the thing on advertising on the video is really interesting, which made us really impressive.

✓ Perhaps because some of the things shown in video ads are really interesting, which made a strong impression on us.

Correct noun plural 'things' and clarify 'shown in video ads'. 'Made us really impressive' is wrong; 'made a strong impression on us' is correct. Suggestion: Use correct collocations like 'made an impression' and proper prepositions.

× I don't use computer but I often see some advertisement on the computer in my school because when I open a website and there are plenty of advertising come along with the UMM lodging lodging site and it's really hard to close them because they always imagine from the screen.

✓ I don't use a computer at home, but I often see advertisements on the computers at my school because when I open a website there are plenty of ads that come with the site, and it's really hard to close them because they always appear on the screen.

Missing articles: 'a computer' and 'the computers'. Use plural 'advertisements' or 'ads'. 'Come along with the UMM lodging lodging site' unclear—simplified to 'come with the site'. 'Imagine from the screen' is incorrect; use 'appear on the screen'. Suggestion: Use articles where required and common verbs like 'appear' for on-screen ads.