Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và sự rõ ràng: Tránh lỗi cấu trúc (ví dụ "as an advertisement about" không chính xác), dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, thêm chi tiết cụ thể về quảng cáo (mô tả cảnh, âm nhạc, cảm xúc) và giữ tối đa 4-5 câu. Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý mạch lạc hơn.

Ejemplo: Yes. A chocolate commercial impressed me as a child because it featured a catchy jungle song and colorful animals. The music and visuals made the chocolate seem fun and adventurous, so I remember it clearly. It made me ask my parents to buy that brand more often.

Sugerencia: Sửa ngôn từ và trật tự câu: Tránh từ dư thừa như "umm" và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ "grand" sai; nên là "because" hoặc "when"). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó nêu ví dụ cụ thể (loại quảng cáo, vị trí trên tàu) và dùng liên từ để nối câu.

Ejemplo: Yes, I see many ads on trains because I travel between cities often. Most of them promote samples, mobile phones or local services displayed above the seats and on carriage doors. These ads are very noticeable during long journeys.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện mạch logic và ngữ pháp: Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (ví dụ 'I have mixed feelings about advertisements'), sửa lỗi chia động từ ("bring" -> "bringS"), dùng linking words để giải thích lý do và đưa ví dụ cụ thể khi nói về quảng cáo hữu ích hoặc gây phiền.

Ejemplo: I have mixed feelings about advertisements. Sometimes I like them because they provide useful information that helps me choose products, such as reviews or price comparisons. But other times I find ads confusing and annoying, especially intrusive ones online or during TV shows.

Sugerencia: Nâng cấp ngữ pháp và từ vựng: Chú ý số nhiều/ít ("ads" vs "an ad"), chia động từ ("it catch" -> "they catch"), và dùng từ chính xác ("show" rather than "plays product"). Thêm một câu giải thích vì sao tính ngắn gọn và sáng tạo hiệu quả, và dùng liên từ để kết nối ý.

Ejemplo: I prefer short, creative ads on social media because they catch my attention quickly and often show the product in a funny context. This approach makes the brand more memorable and encourages me to share the ad with friends. For instance, I often see engaging product ads on Instagram.

Sugerencia: Sửa lỗi từ thiếu và ngữ pháp: Hoàn thiện cụm "on my and my computer" (cần là "on my phone and computer"), tránh tiếng lắp như "umm". Nên trình bày rõ tần suất và loại quảng cáo bạn thấy, nêu lý do tại sao chúng gây khó chịu kèm ví dụ cụ thể (pop-ups, autoplay videos).

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see many ads on my phone and computer, especially for study courses and extracurricular activities. They appear as pop-ups or autoplay videos, which I find annoying because they interrupt my tasks and sometimes mislead me with exaggerated claims.

× Oh yes, as an advertisement about chocolate company and it has catchy jungle so it impressed me a lot.

✓ Oh yes, there was an advertisement for a chocolate company and it had a catchy jingle so it impressed me a lot.

The speaker used incorrect articles and verb tenses. Use 'an advertisement for a chocolate company' (correct preposition and article) and past tense 'there was' and 'had' to match 'when you were a child.' 'Jungle' is a misspelling; correct word is 'jingle' (a short song used in ads). Suggestions: use 'an' before vowel sounds, 'for' to indicate what the ad is promoting, and keep past tense for past events.

× Yes umm I usually travel by trains grand I need to travel to another cities and on trains I see many many advertisement about sample or sometime is about phone.

✓ Yes, I usually travel by train when I need to go to other cities and on trains I see many advertisements about samples or sometimes about phones.

Errors: 'by trains' should be 'by train' (mode of transport often uses singular), 'grand' is likely 'and', 'another cities' should be 'other cities' (plural), 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements', 'sample' should be 'samples' (plural) and 'sometime is about phone' should be 'sometimes about phones'. Also keep consistent plural forms and correct conjunction. Suggestions: use 'travel by train', 'other' with plural nouns, match noun plurality with 'many' and use 'sometimes' for frequency.

× I don't think so. Sometime I really love advertisements because it bring many useful information for me to choose products easily, but sometimes it's really confused, especially when I'm surfing the Internet or watching TV program.

✓ I don't usually like them. Sometimes I really love advertisements because they bring a lot of useful information that helps me choose products easily, but sometimes they're really confusing, especially when I'm surfing the Internet or watching TV programs.

Multiple issues: 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' (adverb), 'I really love advertisements' acceptable but context prefers contrast with 'I don't usually like them.' 'it bring' incorrect subject-verb agreement; use 'they bring'. 'many useful information'—'information' is uncountable so use 'a lot of useful information' or 'much useful information'. 'that helps me' adds clarity. 'it's really confused' wrong; 'they're really confusing' describes ads. 'TV program' pluralized to 'TV programs' for general reference. Suggestions: ensure subject matches verb number, treat 'information' as uncountable, and use 'confusing' to describe causing confusion.

× Well, I like a short and creative ads on social media because it catch my attention quickly and it plays product in a funny situation so that it make me remember the products.

✓ Well, I like short and creative ads on social media because they catch my attention quickly and they show products in funny situations so that they make me remember the products.

Errors: 'a short and creative ads' mixes singular article with plural noun—remove 'a' or change to 'a short and creative ad'. Use plural 'ads' and plural pronoun 'they' to agree. 'it catch' should be 'they catch' (subject-verb agreement). 'it plays product' incorrect verb and article; 'they show products' is natural. 'a funny situation' pluralized to 'funny situations' for generality. 'it make' should be 'they make'. Suggestions: match noun number with articles, use correct verb forms for plural subjects, and use 'show' for displaying products.

× Oh yes, there are many many advertisements on my and my computer, especially advertisements about umm study course or some extra curriculum activities. Umm, sometimes I think it's usual but it also really confusing that make me feel angry.

✓ Oh yes, there are many advertisements on my phone and my computer, especially about study courses or extracurricular activities. Sometimes I think it's normal, but it can also be really confusing and make me feel angry.

Problems: 'on my and my computer' is ungrammatical—should be 'on my phone and my computer'. 'study course' should be 'study courses' or 'online courses'. 'extra curriculum activities' should be 'extracurricular activities'. 'it's usual' better as 'it's normal'. 'it also really confusing that make me feel angry' has tense and structure errors; use 'it can also be really confusing and make me feel angry'. Suggestions: correct device nouns, use standard collocations 'extracurricular activities', and use modal 'can' to express possibility; ensure verbs agree with subjects.