Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammatical accuracy and natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific detail and a brief reason. Avoid vague phrasing like “it is about when.” Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood memories.

Ejemplo: Yes. When I was a child, a Toyota car commercial really stuck in my mind. In the advert, the car appeared on every kind of road, which made me believe that Toyotas were everywhere. Because the images were repetitive and catchy, the ad felt both amusing and memorable to me.

Sugerencia: Make the response more concise and accurate. Give a direct answer, then explain briefly with a logical reason. Use correct verb forms and avoid overgeneralizing about government motives—mention transport authorities or companies instead.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. Public transport like trains and metros often carry many ads because transport operators sell advertising space to raise revenue. As a result, stations and carriages are usually covered with posters and digital screens.

Sugerencia: Give a clear direct opinion, then support it with two concise, specific reasons. Use simpler sentence structures and correct word choices (e.g., “misleading” or “fake” ads, “distracting” rather than “disturbed”).

Ejemplo: Not really. I dislike ads on social media and shopping apps because they often interrupt my browsing and some are misleading or fake. These factors make it hard to trust product information when I’m trying to make a decision.

Sugerencia: Clarify vocabulary and grammar: use phrases like “visually striking advertisements” and explain why celebrities help (recognition, trust). Limit to 2–3 sentences with linking words to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: I prefer visually striking advertisements that feature well-known celebrities. Because familiar faces attract attention and can increase trust, these ads are more memorable and make me notice the product more easily.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and correct grammar and word order. Use specific examples (e.g., splash screens, banner ads) and avoid blaming the whole operating system—mention apps or free apps supported by ads instead.

Ejemplo: Yes, I see ads very often on my phone and computer. Many free apps show splash screens or full-screen ads when I open them, and banner ads appear during use, which I find very annoying.

× Of course, I still remember the Toyota vehicle advertisement.

✓ Of course, I still remember the Toyota vehicle advertisement.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses present tense 'still remember' to describe a current memory. Keep as is.

× I thought when I was in kindergarten, it is about when there was a road, a Toyota vehicle must exist.

✓ When I was in kindergarten, I thought that whenever there was a road, there must be a Toyota vehicle.

Original sentence has awkward word order and mixed tenses ('thought' past with 'is' present). Reorder to start with the time clause 'When I was in kindergarten' and keep the reported thought consistent by using 'thought that' and a modal 'must be' to express the child's belief. This makes the sentence grammatically coherent and tense-consistent.

× That's very interesting and impressive.

✓ That was very interesting and impressive.

The student is recalling a childhood impression, so past tense 'was' is more appropriate than present 'is'. Use past tense to match the context of a memory.

× To be frank, of course, since railways and metro are expensive basic facilities, the government want to earn money, so it is a must to include countless advertisements.

✓ To be frank, since railways and the metro are expensive public services, the government wants to earn money, so it is necessary to include many advertisements.

Errors: incorrect noun phrase 'metro' needs 'the metro', subject-verb agreement 'government want' should be 'government wants', awkward phrase 'a must to include' and 'countless advertisements' sounds exaggerated for formal correction. Replace with 'necessary' and 'many advertisements'. Also 'basic facilities' is better as 'public services' in this context. These changes correct articles, subject-verb agreement, and word choice.

× To be honest, I hate advertisements on social media and shopping apps because when I was making a significant choice when choosing these products and these advertisements let me hesitate and some fake advertisement were very disturbed.

✓ To be honest, I hate advertisements on social media and shopping apps because, when I was making an important choice about these products, the advertisements made me hesitate, and some fake advertisements were very annoying.

Multiple issues: tense and word choice. Use 'was making an important choice about' instead of awkward 'making a significant choice when choosing'. 'Let me hesitate' is incorrect; use 'made me hesitate' (past tense). 'Fake advertisement were very disturbed' is wrong: 'advertisements' plural and they are 'annoying', not 'disturbed'. Correct plural and adjective use.

× Well, I prefer a visually streaking advertisements that feature famous celebrities.

✓ Well, I prefer visually striking advertisements that feature famous celebrities.

Grammar issues: 'a' with plural 'advertisements' is incorrect; remove 'a'. 'Visually streaking' is incorrect collocation—use 'visually striking'. Ensure plural agreement between 'prefer' object and adjective.

× I find celebrity in those statements make adults more memorable and trustworthy.

✓ I find that celebrities in those ads make the products seem more memorable and trustworthy to adults.

Problems: missing 'that' after 'find', singular 'celebrity' should be plural 'celebrities', 'statements' is awkward—use 'ads', and make clear what becomes memorable/trustworthy (the products). Add 'seem' for natural phrasing and 'to adults' for clarity.

× So I would like more to notice and remember the product.

✓ So I am more likely to notice and remember the product.

Original word order and modal use are awkward. Use 'am more likely to' to express increased tendency; this yields natural English and correct verb usage.

× Of course, since the Android system contains countless of advertisement, when I opened any apps, the first of the first thing come to my eyes was a big advertisement and I think that is really annoying.

✓ Of course, since the Android system contains countless advertisements, when I open any apps, the first thing that comes into my view is a big advertisement, and I think that is really annoying.

Multiple errors: 'contains countless of advertisement' should be 'contains countless advertisements' (remove 'of' and pluralize). Tense consistency: the student speaks generally, so use present 'open' not 'opened'. 'The first of the first thing come to my eyes' is ungrammatical; use 'the first thing that comes into my view' or 'the first thing I see'. Ensure subject-verb agreement 'comes' and natural phrasing. Kept 'is really annoying' as present opinion.