Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (what product, why it was memorable, how it affected you). Avoid repetition and long compound sentences. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas and keep within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes. An advert for a snack brand on a children’s TV channel impressed me because it had a catchy song and colourful characters. As a result, all my friends wanted to try the snack, and we used to sing the jingle during school breaks. This made the advert very memorable for me.

Sugerencia: Improve accuracy and fluency: correct minor errors and finish comparisons. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add a specific example and a brief comparison. Use linking words like "however" and avoid dangling words.

Ejemplo: No, not really. In Zurich local regulations restrict advertising on public transport, so I only notice small posters or leaflets occasionally. By contrast, cities such as Berlin have many more ads on trains and stations.

Sugerencia: Make your opinion clearer and avoid vague phrases. Start with a concise opinion, then give two specific reasons with linking words (for example, however, because). Reduce repetition and complete sentences.

Ejemplo: It depends. I dislike ads that interrupt TV shows too often because they break the flow and are annoying. However, I appreciate advertisements that inform me about local events in Zurich because they help me discover things to do.

Sugerencia: Be slightly more precise and vary vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples and explain why you like them. Use linking words such as "for example" or "because" to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: I prefer advertisements about local events and new places in Zurich. For example, promos for pop-up markets or newly opened cafes help me discover interesting restaurants and activities, so I find them useful.

Sugerencia: Make the answer more concise and accurate. Begin with a direct statement about frequency, then provide one reason with a clear causal connector. Avoid speculative or awkward phrasing; use correct tense and concise expressions.

Ejemplo: Yes, I see many more ads now than three years ago, especially on social media like Instagram. This increase is likely because Meta has commercialised the platform more, so users now encounter more targeted advertisements.

× Yes, I do remember an advertisement I saw on a children channel on television when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I do remember an advertisement I saw on a children's channel on television when I was a child.

The phrase 'children channel' needs a possessive form 'children's' to indicate a channel intended for children. Use the possessive when a noun modifies another noun to show purpose or association (children's channel).

× It was about snacks and every one of my friends also saw it and then we wanted to try the snacks and usually it had a funny song so we were singing it in the break at school.

✓ It was about snacks; every one of my friends saw it too, and we wanted to try the snacks. Usually it had a funny song, so we sang it during break at school.

Run-on sentence with inconsistent tense and word choice. Split into shorter sentences, use past simple 'saw' and 'sang' to match past context, replace 'in the break' with 'during break' for natural preposition use, and use 'too' rather than 'also' for smoother placement. This fixes sentence structure (type 26), past tense usage (type 5), and preposition use (type 11).

× No, I don't see much advertising in trains or public transportation in Zurich because local regulation seems to limit it.

✓ No, I don't see much advertising on trains or on public transportation in Zurich because local regulations seem to limit it.

Use 'on trains' and 'on public transportation' (preposition choice) and plural 'regulations' because multiple rules are implied. 'In trains' is less idiomatic than 'on trains.' This addresses preposition use (type 11) and article/number usage in nouns (type 1/22).

× Occasionally there are leaflets or small posters on the walls or ceilings, but it's nothing like other cities, for example bur Berlin or.

✓ Occasionally there are leaflets or small posters on the walls or ceilings, but it's nothing like in other cities, for example, Berlin or Basel.

The phrase 'nothing like other cities' needs 'in' to be idiomatic ('like in other cities'). Also 'bur' is a typo for 'but' and the sentence ends incomplete with 'or.' Provide a concrete comparison (e.g., 'Berlin or Basel'). This fixes sentence structure (type 26), preposition use (type 11), and a typographical error.

× It depends. If I'm watching TV and the ratio between the show I want to watch and the advertisement is not in a good range, I don't like it because you have too many breaks in between.

✓ It depends. If I'm watching TV and the ratio between the show I want to watch and the advertisements is not good, I don't like it because there are too many breaks in between.

Use plural 'advertisements' to agree with 'the show' and general reference; 'is not in a good range' is unnatural—'is not good' is clearer. 'You have too many breaks' shifts perspective; use 'there are too many breaks' for descriptive statement. This addresses pluralization (type 1) and sentence clarity (type 26).

× Otherwise, it can also be helpful to know which events are happening in Zurich. So yeah, can be helpful as well.

✓ Otherwise, it can also be helpful to know which events are happening in Zurich, so yes, it can be helpful as well.

The fragment 'So yeah, can be helpful as well' lacks a subject and verb. Add 'it' and 'can' to form a complete sentence. This corrects a sentence without a verb (type 23) and pronoun omission (type 12).

× I like advertising regarding events, pop-ups, new restaurants, new coffees, everything that's kind of happening in Zurich.

✓ I like advertising about events, pop-ups, new restaurants, new coffee places, everything that's happening in Zurich.

'Regarding' is formal; 'about' is more natural here. 'New coffees' is unclear—use 'new coffee places' or 'new cafes.' Remove 'kind of' for clarity. This addresses preposition/word choice issues (type 11) and adjective/noun usage (type 13).

× If I compare it with the past, for example, three years ago, I noticed more advertisement on social media, especially on Instagram.

✓ If I compare it with the past, for example three years ago, I noticed more advertisements on social media, especially on Instagram.

Use plural 'advertisements' for count noun and remove the comma after 'for example' to improve flow. This addresses pluralization (type 1) and punctuation/structure (type 26).

× It could be that one of the main factors is when it was bought by Meta that they show more advertisement to finance the whole platform and earn money.

✓ It could be that one of the main factors is that when Meta bought it, they showed more advertisements to finance the platform and earn money.

Reorder the clause for clarity: 'when it was bought by Meta that they show' is ungrammatical. Use past tense 'bought' and 'showed' because the purchase occurred in the past and the resulting change is being described. Use plural 'advertisements.' This fixes word order/sentence structure (type 26), past tense use (type 5), and modal/tense alignment (type 4/6).