Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cần cải thiện tính chính xác ngữ pháp, cách nối ý và sự chính xác từ vựng. Tránh lỗi từ (ví dụ "advice" → "advertisement"), dùng thì và cấu trúc phù hợp (ví dụ "wanted" thay vì "want"). Nên thêm câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng liên kết như "because" hoặc "so" để giải thích lí do, và giữ tối đa 4–5 câu. Có thể mô tả cụ thể hơn (gì trong quảng cáo khiến ấn tượng, bao nhiêu tuổi khi xem).

Ejemplo: Yes. I remember an advertisement on TV for a toy called "Children's Choice" that really impressed me. It was very colorful and had a catchy jingle, so I kept humming it and asked my parents for the toy for weeks. The characters looked funny and friendly, which made the ad memorable.

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng có thể tự nhiên hơn nếu rút gọn và dùng liên kết hợp lý. Tránh lặp từ (ví dụ "buses and trains" rồi nhắc "buses" nhiều), và nâng cao từ vựng cụ thể ("wraps" hoặc "billboards" thay vì "light posters"). Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể hơn về tần suất hoặc loại quảng cáo sẽ giúp tăng điểm nội dung.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often see advertising on buses and trains, especially on buses because they travel through many neighborhoods every day. For example, many buses have full-body wraps or posters promoting local events and shops.

Sugerencia: Ý tưởng rõ nhưng ngữ pháp và liệt kê nền tảng cần chính xác; tránh viết ghép tên dịch vụ sai ("the YouTube" → "YouTube", "Tiktok Facebook" rất lộn xộn). Sử dụng liên kết như "because" và "for example" để làm rõ. Có thể thêm một câu về trường hợp bạn thấy quảng cáo chấp nhận được để cân bằng trả lời.

Ejemplo: Not really. I find many ads misleading because they sometimes leave out important information, and they are very intrusive when they interrupt videos on platforms like YouTube or TikTok. For example, I often skip pre-roll ads because they break the viewing experience.

Sugerencia: Cần sửa ngữ pháp và loại bỏ lặp từ ("visually appealing, appealing", "makes me make me"). Dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng: nói loại quảng cáo bạn thích, rồi giải thích với ví dụ cụ thể (thương hiệu, yếu tố hấp dẫn như trước/after images). Giữ 3–4 câu, dùng liên từ như "because" và "for example".

Ejemplo: I prefer skincare advertisements because they are visually appealing and often show before-and-after results. They usually highlight the product's benefits and ingredients, which makes me more likely to try a new product.

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời hiện tại bị rối, lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp nghiêm trọng, khiến nội dung không rõ ràng. Cần bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi (Yes/No + tần suất), sau đó nêu ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: pop-up ads, autoplay video ads) và dùng liên từ để liên kết ý. Tránh từ không phù hợp ("Girls" vô nghĩa ở đây). Giữ 3 câu rõ ràng và chính xác.

Ejemplo: Yes, I see ads on my phone and computer very often, especially when I watch videos online. For example, intrusive pop-up ads or autoplay video ads frequently interrupt my viewing experience, which is quite annoying.

× Yes, I remember an advice Time advertisement for Children's Choice that impressed me.

✓ Yes, I remember a Time advertisement for Children's Choice that impressed me.

Use 'a' before consonant sound and correct noun: 'advice' is uncountable and wrong here; 'a Time advertisement' names a specific ad. Use 'a' not 'an' because 'Time' begins with consonant sound. Replace 'advice' with 'ad' or 'advertisement'.

× It was very colorful and had a catchy scenery, so I kept singing it and want the toy for weeks.

✓ It was very colorful and had catchy visuals, so I kept singing the jingle and wanted the toy for weeks.

'Scenery' is incorrect for advertising visuals; use 'visuals'. 'Catchy' modifies 'visuals' or 'jingle'. Tense consistency: 'kept singing' (past continuous/habit) should pair with past 'wanted'. Also 'singing it' is vague—specify 'the jingle'.

× The characters in the art were funny and friendly.

✓ The characters in the ad were funny and friendly.

Use 'in the ad' or 'in the advertisement' rather than 'in the art'. 'Art' is too general; preposition 'in' is okay but replace noun to be specific.

× I see a lot of advertising on buses and trains, especially on buses because they are public transport and travel through many neighborhoods every day.

✓ I see a lot of advertising on buses and trains, especially on buses because they are public transport and travel through many neighborhoods every day.

Sentence is acceptable but repetition 'buses' could be stylistically improved; no grammatical tense error. No change needed.

× For example, bus exteriors often carry light posters for local events.

✓ For example, bus exteriors often carry posters for local events.

'Light posters' is unclear and unnecessary; remove 'light' for clarity. Structure is correct otherwise.

× I don't really like advertisements because they can be misleading and sometimes omit important information.

✓ I don't really like advertisements because they can be misleading and sometimes omit important information.

Sentence is correct; 'can' properly expresses possibility. No change needed.

× I also find them intrusive and annoying when they interrupt videos on the YouTube or the Tiktok Facebook.

✓ I also find them intrusive and annoying when they interrupt videos on YouTube, TikTok, or Facebook.

Do not use definite article 'the' before platform names. Use correct platform names and separate with commas. Order platforms properly: YouTube, TikTok, Facebook.

× I refer skin care advertisements because they are often colorful and visual, visually appealing, appealing.

✓ I prefer skincare advertisements because they are often colorful and visually appealing.

'Refer' is wrong verb; use 'prefer'. 'Skin care' can be 'skincare' as adjective. Remove duplicate words and use 'visually appealing'. Pronoun issues: none beyond word choice.

× They also introduce new products and highlight benefits, which makes me make me want to try them in the future.

✓ They also introduce new products and highlight benefits, which makes me want to try them in the future.

Remove duplicate 'make me'. The relative clause should be 'which makes me want to...'.

× Girls are often entertainments on the my phone and community, especially when I watch movie videos online and this intrusive pop up and are ultimately asked interrupt the viewing experience.

✓ I often see intrusive ads on my phone and social media, especially when I watch videos online; these pop-ups interrupt the viewing experience.

Original has multiple structural issues and incorrect words: 'Girls' is wrong; should be 'I' or 'ads'. 'entertainments' wrong. 'the my phone and community' incorrect — use 'my phone and social media'. Fix verb forms: 'pop up' -> 'pop-ups', 'interrupt' corrected. Make two clear clauses.

× They are quite annoying because they break.

✓ They are quite annoying because they interrupt playback.

'Break' is vague; use 'interrupt playback' or 'disrupt the video'. Improve adjective use by pairing with appropriate verb for clarity.