Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct basic grammar. Start with one clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct repetition and article/verb forms (e.g., “made an impression” → “made an impression on me”, “is acted by” → “featured”).

Ejemplo: One advertisement that impressed me as a child was a cricket kit commercial. It featured the famous cricketer Mahendra Singh Dhoni, which made it memorable. Because I love cricket, I found the ad exciting and entertaining, and it also showed how the kit improves a player’s performance.

Sugerencia: Use present tense consistently and make sentences clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific reason and one brief example. Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on trains in my country. Companies use trains because many commuters travel daily, so ads reach a large audience. For example, food brands often place posters on carriage walls to attract office workers during rush hour.

Sugerencia: Provide a direct answer (yes/no) followed by one or two reasons or examples. If you do not like them, say why; if you like some types, specify which. Keep it short and natural, avoid silence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like some advertisements, especially those about sports gear. They teach me about new products and often show athletes using the gear, which helps me decide what to buy.

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific reason and an example of information you learn. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

Ejemplo: I prefer advertisements related to cricket because I am a big fan. They make me happy and often provide useful information, for example, about new bats or training tips used by professional players.

Sugerencia: Use correct plural/singular forms and tighten structure. Start with a direct statement, then explain where and why you see many ads, and give one specific example. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I regularly see advertisements on my phone, mainly on social media apps like Facebook and WhatsApp. Because many people use these platforms, advertisers target them with short video ads; for example, I often see sponsored posts about local restaurants.

× Yes, there are many advertisements that made made me an impression.

✓ Yes, there were many advertisements that made an impression on me.

The sentence uses plural 'advertisements' which is fine, but the verb phrase 'made made me an impression' is incorrect. Use 'made an impression on me' (common collocation) and past tense 'were' to match 'when you were a child'. Also remove duplicate 'made'. Suggestion: Use 'made an impression on me' and ensure past tense agreement with 'when you were a child'.

× The first advertisement is about the cricket kit because I'm a cricket lover.

✓ The first advertisement was about a cricket kit because I'm a cricket lover.

The question refers to an impression when the student was a child, so past tense 'was' is appropriate. Also use the article 'a' before 'cricket kit'. Suggestion: Match tense to context and include the correct article.

× The most significant reason is that that advertisement is acted by famous cricketer Mahendra Singh Dhoni.

✓ The most significant reason is that the advertisement features the famous cricketer Mahendra Singh Dhoni.

Passive 'is acted by' is unnatural here for an advertisement; use 'features' to describe presence. Also use the definite article 'the' before 'advertisement' and 'the famous cricketer'. Suggestion: Prefer active verbs like 'features' and include correct articles.

× It is fun and entertaining.

✓ It was fun and entertaining.

Maintain past tense because the student is describing an advertisement from childhood. Change 'is' to 'was' to match time frame. Suggestion: Keep consistent tense across sentences.

× Yes, I saw many advertising on trains in my country.

✓ Yes, I saw much advertising on trains in my country.

Use 'advertising' as an uncountable noun meaning ad content, so 'much advertising' is correct. Alternatively, use 'many advertisements'. Suggestion: Use 'many advertisements' or 'much advertising' depending on countability.

× Most of the people using train to advertise their products through.

✓ Most people use trains to advertise their products.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and preposition use. 'Most people use trains to advertise their products' is the correct active form and clearer. Suggestion: Use active voice and correct verb forms; 'use trains to advertise' is natural.

× That way they will get more audience to buy their products.

✓ That way they will reach a larger audience who may buy their products.

'Get more audience to buy' is awkward. Use 'reach a larger audience' and 'who may buy' to express potential buyers. Also 'audience' typically takes 'a' or 'larger'. Suggestion: Use natural collocations like 'reach an audience' and add relative clause for clarity.

× It will increase their profit.

✓ It increases their profits.

In context describing a general result, present simple 'increases' is more natural. Also use plural 'profits'. Suggestion: Use present simple for general truths and plural 'profits'.

× I like advertisement relating to cricket because I'm a cricket lover.

✓ I like advertisements related to cricket because I'm a cricket lover.

Use plural 'advertisements' or 'an advertisement'. 'Relating to' is less natural than 'related to'. Suggestion: Use 'advertisements related to cricket' or 'an advertisement related to cricket'.

× It gives me happiness whenever I'm watching an advertisement related to cricket that gives me new information.

✓ It makes me happy whenever I watch an advertisement related to cricket because it gives me new information.

Use 'makes me happy' (more natural than 'gives me happiness') and simple present 'I watch' for habitual actions. Also split into clear cause: 'because it gives me new information.' Suggestion: Use natural expressions for emotions and simple present for habits.

× I regularly see advertisement through my phone.

✓ I regularly see advertisements on my phone.

Use plural 'advertisements' and preposition 'on' for phone usage. 'Through my phone' is less natural. Suggestion: Say 'see advertisements on my phone'.

× Nowadays, people are using their social media apps like Facebook, Twitter and WhatsApp there.

✓ Nowadays, people use social media apps like Facebook, Twitter and WhatsApp a lot.

Remove 'there' which is unnecessary. Use simple present 'use' for habitual actions and 'a lot' to express frequency. 'Their' is optional but not needed. Suggestion: Use 'people use social media apps a lot'.

× Through that way people are getting more advertisement that is very useful.

✓ In this way, people receive more advertisements that are very useful.

'Through that way' is unidiomatic; use 'in this way'. 'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' and agree with verb 'are'. Suggestion: Use 'in this way' and ensure noun-verb number agreement and plural form where needed.