Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be concise, correct grammar, and organize ideas: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific details, and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “It showed…”, “because…”, “as a result…”).

Ejemplo: A clear answer: “Yes. A UPS commercial impressed me as a child. It compared UPS’s delivery speed to other companies and used a humorous scene to show why UPS was faster, which made the ad memorable.”

Sugerencia: Answer directly and use correct tense and sentence structure. Begin with a topic sentence, then give one concrete example and a linking phrase. Avoid vague endings and incomplete sentences.

Ejemplo: A better answer: “Yes, I see many ads on public transport. For example, on cross-country trains there are digital screens that show tourism and phone ads, so I often notice promotions during my journeys.”

Sugerencia: Be more fluent and natural by removing redundant phrases and fillers. Start with a clear opinion, then give specific examples and a brief reason using linking words such as “because” or “so”.

Ejemplo: A better answer: “It depends. I like ads that match my interests because they help me learn about new smartphones or tablets, which I enjoy following.”

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific features you like, with reasons. Use correct grammar (e.g., “I prefer ads that are…”), avoid unfinished sentences, and add linking words like “because” or “so”.

Ejemplo: A clearer response: “I prefer subtle, informative ads because they explain a product’s benefits without being annoying. For example, I like short videos that show how a gadget works and include real user reviews.”

Sugerencia: Provide a concise answer with a specific example and fewer hesitations. Use past simple for a past event and describe your reaction or opinion briefly. Use linking words like “for example” and “so” to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: A better answer: “Yes, I see many online ads. For example, yesterday a YouTube video had three ads, including one non-skippable shampoo ad, which I found irrelevant because I don’t use that brand.”

× Yes, I remember I was when I was a child, I watched a commercial that I still remember today.

✓ Yes, I remember that when I was a child I watched a commercial that I still remember today.

The original sentence has redundant and misplaced words ('I was when') that break the sentence structure. Remove the extra 'I was' and add 'that' to introduce the clause smoothly. Suggestion: say 'I remember that when I was a child...' to create a clear complex sentence.

× It was a delivery commercial by UPS.

✓ It was a delivery commercial from UPS.

'By' can be used for agents in passive constructions (a painting by), but with commercials it is more natural to use 'from' to indicate the company. Use 'from UPS' for natural phrasing.

× It's about umm, how their competitors doing, uh, compared to them and they're suggesting their competitors were doing.

✓ It compared UPS with their competitors and suggested that the competitors were doing worse.

The original sentence has incorrect verb forms and unclear phrasing ('how their competitors doing', 'they're suggesting their competitors were doing'). Use a clear past structure: 'It compared... and suggested that...'. Specify the comparison result ('doing worse') to complete the idea.

× Yes, when I was taking public transportation I always sees their advertisement on television of the transportation.

✓ Yes, when I took public transportation I always saw advertisements inside the vehicles.

Tense and subject-verb agreement are incorrect: 'was taking' with 'always sees' mixes past progressive with present plural verb. Use simple past 'took' and past 'saw'. Also 'advertisement on television of the transportation' is awkward; specify 'advertisements inside the vehicles' for clarity.

× For example if I'm taking a a cross country train to somewhere else, I always get advertisement about.

✓ For example, if I took a cross-country train somewhere, I always saw advertisements about different services.

Mix of present and past tenses and an incomplete object ('advertisement about'). Match tense to past context: 'if I took... I always saw'. Also complete the sentence by indicating what the advertisements were about.

× Actually, in my opinion, I believe it depends on the products they promote.

✓ Actually, I believe it depends on the products they promote.

'In my opinion' and 'I believe' are redundant when used together. Remove one to improve style. This is a pronoun/use redundancy issue affecting clarity.

× If they are promoting the products that I'm interested in, for example, umm, smartphone, uh, technology devices, umm, portable, uh, tablets, I would be very interested.

✓ If they are promoting products I'm interested in, for example smartphones, tablets, or other technology devices, I would be very interested.

Use plural nouns for general categories ('smartphones', 'tablets') and a cleaner list without filler words. Remove unnecessary commas and fillers for clarity.

× I generally prefer the advertisement to be as subtle as possible and be as informational as possible.

✓ I generally prefer advertisements to be as subtle and as informative as possible.

Combine parallel ideas correctly: use plural 'advertisements' and parallel adjectives 'subtle' and 'informative'. 'Informational' is acceptable but 'informative' is more natural here.

× If I were be promoted with certain products that trying to promote, I want to know more about the products and instead of.

✓ If I were shown certain products being promoted, I would want to know more about them.

Original mixes conditional forms ('were be') and has missing verb forms ('that trying to promote') and an incomplete ending ('and instead of'). Use correct conditional 'If I were shown' and 'would want' for unreal present. Replace dangling clause with 'about them'.

× Yes definitely. I remember I was watching a YouTube video yesterday and uh, there were like 3 commercials and one video which uh was non skippable and they are promoting a products umm as shampoo which I'm not interested in.

✓ Yes, definitely. I remember I was watching a YouTube video yesterday and there were about three commercials, one of which was non-skippable, and they were promoting a product, such as shampoo, which I'm not interested in.

Tense and agreement issues: use past 'were promoting' to match 'yesterday'. 'They are promoting' should be past. 'A products' is incorrect (article + plural); use 'a product' or 'products'. Clarify 'one of which was non-skippable' and use 'about three' for approximation. Remove filler words for clarity.