Science— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cụ thể: Cắt bớt tiếng ươn ừ (umm, uh), sửa ngữ pháp (specializes -> specialize), tránh câu quá dài lủng củng, bổ sung câu chủ đề rõ ràng và 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Nên dùng các liên từ như "but" hoặc "however" hợp lý và giữ tối đa 3-4 câu. Ví dụ: nêu rõ bạn không thích, lý do chính, rồi một ví dụ cụ thể ngắn.

Ejemplo: I don't really enjoy science because I focus on literature and social studies, but I still take basic science courses. For example, biology and basic health lessons help me understand common illnesses and use everyday technology safely.

Sugerencia: Cụ thể: Sửa ngữ pháp nghiêm túc (have -> has/becomes; I have been studies -> I have studied / I started studying), loại bỏ thông tin mơ hồ và lỗi từ (false subject -> fundamental/compulsory), tránh lặp từ và ươn ừ. Nên trả lời trực tiếp: cho biết thời điểm bắt đầu với một chi tiết ngắn về vì sao và tiếp tục học đến nay.

Ejemplo: I started learning science in primary school when I was about eight or nine years old because science is a compulsory subject in Vietnam. I have continued studying basic science throughout my schooling.

Sugerencia: Cụ thể: Làm rõ chủ đề ngay từ câu đầu (Biology interests me because...), sửa từ sai/vụng (planes -> plants? or 'places'?), dùng từ chính xác (environmental conditions), tránh kết thúc câu dang dở. Thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể về khía cạnh bạn thích và kết luận gọn.

Ejemplo: Biology interests me because I care about plants and ecosystems and want to help protect the environment. For example, I enjoy learning about how pollution affects wildlife and what we can do to conserve habitats.

Sugerencia: Cụ thể: Loại bỏ ươn ừ, sửa lỗi từ (each other -> each of us; seed seedling -> seedling; plans -> plants), giữ cấu trúc: chủ đề + chi tiết + kết quả/ cảm xúc. Thêm 1 câu về kết quả hoặc điều bạn học được cụ thể.

Ejemplo: In a science project we were each given a seedling to plant at home. I felt proud when my plant began to grow because I learned how to water it properly and take responsibility for a living thing.

Sugerencia: Cụ thể: Tránh lặp từ và ươn ừ, dùng danh từ số nhiều/phù hợp (documentaries, programs), sửa cấu trúc câu để rõ ý (I like them because...), hoàn thành câu ý (preserve the environment). Thêm ví dụ cụ thể một chương trình hoặc chủ đề bạn thích.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy watching science documentaries because they explain environmental issues and practical solutions. For example, I like programmes about ocean pollution because they show how individuals can reduce plastic waste.

Sugerencia: Cụ thể: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và nhiều lỗi (shiny? china?), xác định đối tượng đúng (Chinese people), sửa ngữ pháp (there are not many; there are some popular ones), trình bày trực tiếp: nêu ý tổng quát rồi đưa ví dụ cụ thể về thời điểm thăm quan. Tránh thông tin mơ hồ và ươn ừ.

Ejemplo: I think there are not many science museums in China, but some popular ones exist. People usually visit them on special occasions, during free time, or as part of school trips when children are taken there by their teachers.

× I'm not very interested in science because I'm a high school student that specializes in literature or some social studies.

✓ I'm not very interested in science because I'm a high school student who specializes in literature and social studies.

Use 'who' for people instead of 'that', and 'and' is more natural than 'or' when naming two subjects. Also 'some' is unnecessary before 'social studies'. Suggestion: use 'who' with people and connect items clearly with 'and'.

× However, I still study basic science subjects uh because they help me with everyday tests, for example, understanding some health problems or using simple technology.

✓ However, I still study basic science subjects because they help me in everyday life, for example, understanding health problems or using simple technology.

'Everyday tests' is likely incorrect in context; 'everyday life' fits better. 'Some health problems' is vague; 'health problems' is sufficient. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: choose collocations that match intended meaning and avoid filler words.

× In Vietnam, science have become a indispensable part of the curriculum.

✓ In Vietnam, science has become an indispensable part of the curriculum.

The subject 'science' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' not 'have'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with singular or plural subject.

× So I have been studies science when I was in the primary school about 8 to 9 years old, and I still study science, uh, until nowadays.

✓ So I have been studying science since I was in primary school, at about eight or nine years old, and I still study science nowadays.

After 'have been' use the present participle 'studying', not the past form 'studies'. Use 'since' for starting point in the past and 'nowadays' without 'until'. Suggestion: use 'have been studying' for continuous actions from past to present and correct time expressions.

× Because uh, science is a false subject that every student need to study.

✓ Because science is a fundamental subject that every student needs to study.

'False' is the wrong adjective; 'fundamental' or 'essential' conveys intended meaning. Also 'every student' requires 'needs' (third person singular). Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: choose accurate adjectives and match verb to subject.

× I think that it is a biology like I want to study about the, the planes, the environment so that I can help to protect or preserve the environment condition.

✓ I think biology is interesting because I want to study plants and the environment so that I can help protect or preserve environmental conditions.

Do not use 'a' before uncountable subject 'biology'. 'Study about' is incorrect; use 'study' or 'learn about'. 'Planes' is a misspelling of 'plants'. 'Protect or preserve the environment' is sufficient; 'environmental conditions' is more natural. Suggestion: remove incorrect articles, fix word choice and spelling, and streamline phrases.

× However, you know, nowadays the pollution has become an, uh, an increasingly popular problem.

✓ However, you know, nowadays pollution has become an increasingly serious problem.

'The pollution' is unnecessary; use 'pollution' in general. 'Popular' is wrong for negative issue; use 'serious' or 'widespread'. Remove duplication 'an, uh, an'. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjectives for negative phenomena and avoid unnecessary articles.

× So I think biology is.

✓ So I think biology is the most interesting subject to me.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a complement. Provide a clear ending such as 'the most interesting subject to me' or 'interesting'. Suggestion: complete sentence with an appropriate noun phrase or adjective.

× I remember a lesson when the teacher asked each other to plant a tree at home.

✓ I remember a lesson when the teacher asked each student to plant a tree at home.

'Asked each other' is incorrect because 'each other' implies mutual action; the teacher requested each student individually. Suggestion: use 'asked each student' or 'asked us'.

× Uh, each student was given a seed seedling to grow.

✓ Each student was given a seedling to grow.

'Seed seedling' is redundant; use either 'seed' or 'seedling' depending on meaning. Suggestion: choose the correct noun and avoid repetition.

× And I feel a real sense of fulfillment when my plans start to grow because I learn responsibility and and how to care for a living thing.

✓ And I felt a real sense of fulfillment when my plants started to grow because I learned responsibility and how to care for a living thing.

Tense should be past ('felt', 'started', 'learned') because describing a past event. 'Plans' is a misspelling of 'plants'. Remove duplicate 'and'. Suggestion: match tense to the time of the event and correct spelling.

× I think that I love watching science documentary on television because I am interested in watching something that, uh, surrounding us or also that, you know, pollution has become an increasingly popular problem over the worldwide.

✓ I love watching science documentaries on television because I am interested in topics that surround us, such as pollution, which has become an increasingly widespread problem worldwide.

Use plural 'documentaries'. 'Surrounding us' should be 'that surround us' or 'topics that surround us'. 'Popular' is incorrect; use 'widespread' or 'serious'. 'Over the worldwide' is wrong; use 'worldwide'. Suggestion: match number, use relative clauses correctly, and choose appropriate adjectives and adverbs.

× So I think watching science TV program can help us to preserve the.

✓ So I think watching science TV programs can help us learn how to protect the environment.

Sentence is incomplete and 'TV program' should be plural. 'Preserve the' is unfinished; specify 'the environment'. Suggestion: complete the object and use plural for general statements.

× I think that in shiny they are not many science museums, but they're also some popular one that people used to go.

✓ I think that in China there are not many science museums, but there are some popular ones that people often visit.

'Shiny' is likely 'China'. 'They are' word order is wrong; use 'there are'. 'Some popular one' should be 'some popular ones'. 'Used to go' is incorrect for habitual present; use 'often visit'. Suggestion: fix place name, use 'there are', match plural forms, and use correct habitual expressions.

× For example, they used to go museum in some special occasion or when they are free time or student usually go to Science Museum when the uh, the school organized a trip to their children.

✓ For example, they go to museums on special occasions or when they are free, and students usually go to the science museum when the school organizes a trip for them.

'Used to go museum' is incorrect; use 'go to museums' for general present habit. 'Are free time' is wrong; use 'are free'. 'Organized' should be 'organizes' to match present habitual action. 'To their children' is awkward; use 'for them'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms for habits, correct prepositions, and match subject-verb tenses for general statements.