Science— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Clarify your main point with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and fillers, and give one or two specific supporting details. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and use linking words for coherence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I really enjoy science because it helps me understand how the world works. For example, in school I learned how to design simple experiments and test ideas in a laboratory. This hands-on work made science both interesting and useful for me.

Sugerencia: State a clear time reference (e.g., at school, at age X), avoid unclear words and hesitations, and give one specific example of what you learned. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'when' to organize details.

Ejemplo: I started learning about science at primary school when I was about seven years old. For example, in biology lessons we studied the human body, including the urinary system, which made me curious about how kidneys filter and store water.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct topic sentence naming the subject, then give a clear reason and a specific example. Avoid vague phrases and correct grammar to sound natural and confident.

Ejemplo: Biology is the most interesting subject for me because it explains living organisms and their systems. For instance, I enjoyed a unit on cell structure and scored highly on that test, which encouraged me to study more about genetics and physiology.

Sugerencia: Provide a complete, structured account: start with a topic sentence, describe one specific activity in order, and conclude with what you learned. Remove unfinished sentences and fillers.

Ejemplo: I have taken part in a school science exhibition where I made a model of the human heart. I explained how blood moves through the chambers and into the veins and arteries, and although it seemed difficult at first, preparing the model helped me understand cardiovascular circulation much better.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, give a concise reason and one specific example of a program or topic, and avoid fragmented sentences. Use linking words such as 'for example' and 'because' to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy watching science programs because they explain complex topics in a simple way. For example, I once watched a documentary about the human body that showed how organs work together, and it amazed me to see those processes in action.

Sugerencia: Avoid irrelevant or confusing personal comments. Start with a general, clear answer about the frequency, then give a specific observation or example. Keep sentences complete and coherent.

Ejemplo: Yes, many Chinese people often visit science museums, especially students on school trips. For instance, I have seen Instagram photos of school groups at a science center, which suggests these visits are common and encourage scientific learning.

× Yes, I like science very much because I want you in science.

✓ Yes, I like science very much because I want to study science.

The student used 'you' incorrectly instead of an infinitive phrase 'to study'. Replace 'you' with 'to study' to express intention. Use verbs correctly after 'want' (want to + base verb).

× There are a lot of things, uh, for instance, like we would send it, uh, in our school, I learn from science subjects that, uh, how can people can do experiment and more Well, like many things.

✓ There are a lot of things. For instance, at our school I learned in science classes how people can do experiments and many other things.

Multiple issues: awkward phrasing and word order. Use past tense 'learned' to match context, 'science classes' is correct noun phrase, and 'how people can do experiments' uses correct word order (modal + base verb). Remove filler words and correct plural 'experiments'.

× I want to learn a lot of things about science that how things work.

✓ I want to learn many things about science, such as how things work.

The sentence needed clearer connector and noun choice. Replace 'a lot of things' with 'many things', and use 'such as' or 'for example' before 'how things work' to make the clause natural. Maintain present tense for ongoing desire.'

× And moreover, in biology, there are urinary system.

✓ Moreover, in biology there is the urinary system.

Use singular with definite article: 'the urinary system' (specific system). 'There is' is appropriate for singular noun. This corrects both 'there be issue' and article use.'

× I want to know that how, uh, Admiral is in kidney, how water store.

✓ I want to know how the kidney works, how urine is produced, and how water is stored.

Original contains wrong word 'Admiral' and incorrect structure. Use 'how the kidney works' and passive or active forms like 'how urine is produced' and 'how water is stored'. Use precise biological terms and correct verb forms.'

× So I want to know this type, this type of things because I'm curious about the human living body.

✓ So I want to know these kinds of things because I'm curious about the human body.

Use 'these kinds of things' (plural) instead of 'this type, this type of things' and 'human body' is more natural than 'human living body'.

× The subject is interesting to me.

✓ That subject is interesting to me.

Use 'That subject' to refer back to a previously mentioned subject; original is grammatical but awkward. This aligns reference clearly.'

× I think it is biology because I remember when I was in school, so I took my test and I got very high bending biology services.

✓ I think it is biology because I remember when I was in school I took a test and got very high marks in biology.

'Got very high marks' is the correct phrase for exam results. 'Bending biology services' is incorrect. Simplify clause order and use past tense consistently.'

× I'm interested in biology because in biology there are a concept, not we would say not a remembered thing.

✓ I'm interested in biology because there are concepts in biology, not just facts to be memorized.

Use plural 'concepts' and correct article usage. 'Not a remembered thing' is awkward; replace with 'not just facts to be memorized' for clarity.'

× So I'm interested in.

✓ So I'm interested in it.

Complete the phrasal structure: 'interested in' requires an object; add 'it' to complete the sentence.'

× For instance, when I was in school, there is exhibition competition and my teacher said it.

✓ For instance, when I was in school, there was an exhibition competition and my teacher announced it.

Use past tense 'was' to match 'when I was in school.' Add article 'an' before 'exhibition competition' and use 'announced' or 'told us' instead of 'said it.'

× You will do the process of heart, how the blood supplies and how the veins and arteries.

✓ We had to demonstrate the process of the heart: how blood is supplied and how veins and arteries work.

Use first-person plural 'we' to reflect students' activity. 'Process of the heart' and passive 'blood is supplied' clarify meaning. Use 'veins and arteries' work' to explain function.'

× First, mostly it was very complicated for me because I was like it is very difficult, but when I.

✓ At first it was very complicated for me because I thought it was very difficult, but later I understood it.

Complete the sentence: 'but when I' is incomplete. Use 'I thought' for reported opinion and finish with 'later I understood it' to show resolution.'

× Yes, I'm really interested in science TV program because I want to know that things like sometime I was amazed in a science school program for instance, when I was with my friend and she watched a documentary of science and I said it wow, it is very and it is I think a human body system and I was really.

✓ Yes, I'm really interested in science TV programs because I want to learn new things. For example, once I watched a science documentary with a friend and I was amazed; it was about the human body system and I found it fascinating.

Use plural 'programs' for general interest, 'learn new things' is natural, replace awkward phrasing with coherent clauses. Remove fillers and complete the thought 'I was really' to 'I found it fascinating.'

× Yes, they often visit the Science Museum because they want to know the things.

✓ Yes, they often visit the Science Museum because they want to learn about things.

'Want to know the things' is awkward; 'want to learn about things' is natural. Subject-verb 'they often visit' is correct; adjust object phrase.'

× And actually I'm not interested in Chinese people because I can.

✓ Actually, I do not know many Chinese people in person, so I cannot say for sure.

Original 'not interested in Chinese people because I can' is unclear. Clarify meaning: likely the student meant they haven't met many Chinese people, so cannot judge. Provide clearer structure.'

× I do not see Chinese.

✓ I do not meet Chinese people often.

Use natural phrasing: 'meet Chinese people often' to express infrequency of direct contact.'

× But yeah, on Instagram I can see there are a lot of children in school. They have trip and they visit to Science Museum.

✓ But on Instagram I can see many schoolchildren. They have trips and they visit the Science Museum.

Use 'schoolchildren' and plural 'trips'. Remove incorrect 'visit to' — use 'visit' plus object. Capitalization of 'Science Museum' may be fine if it's a specific name.'

× And I was amazed and impressed because of that, that in Pakistan there is no.

✓ I was amazed and impressed because in Pakistan there are no similar facilities.

Complete the idea: 'there is no' is incomplete. Specify 'similar facilities' or 'a science museum' to finish the sentence and use plural agreement if appropriate.