Sharing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve clarity and grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb tense and simple sentence structures, and give 1–2 specific examples of what they taught you. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “and” or “also”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes. My parents taught me to share from a young age. For example, they encouraged me to offer snacks to my classmates and to take turns with toys. They also taught me to be polite and respect other people’s feelings.

Sugerencia: Good direct answer but expand slightly with a reason or brief example and a linking word. Keep it short and natural.

Ejemplo: I usually share food with my friends, parents, and cousins because sharing meals helps us bond. For example, I often bring snacks to class and share them during breaks.

Sugerencia: Meaning is clear but grammar and word choice need polishing. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct nouns and plural/singular forms, and give a brief explanation why these things should not be shared.

Ejemplo: Personal information should not be shared. For instance, you should never share your bank details, passwords, or ID numbers because they could be used to commit fraud.

Sugerencia: Organize answer more clearly: state what you shared and why, use concise sentences and correct word choice (e.g., “travel abroad,” “culture,” not “privations”), and give one specific recent example.

Ejemplo: Recently I shared my feelings about wanting to travel abroad. I told my friends I want to learn about new cultures and try different foods, and they recommended places to visit.

Sugerencia: Make the answer more natural: give a clear topic sentence, explain reason concisely, and correct phrasing (e.g., “because my brother supports me financially and emotionally”). Provide one brief example of a time you shared news.

Ejemplo: I would share good news with my brother first. He supports me financially and gives me advice, so I told him first when I got accepted to college abroad.

Sugerencia: The answer is unclear and possibly misunderstood the question. Clarify whether you share entertainment (movies) or actual news. Start with a topic sentence and give 1–2 specific types of news you share, with a short reason or example.

Ejemplo: I usually share interesting or personal news with my friends, such as funny stories, relationship updates, or important current events. For example, I often send a friend a link to a funny video or tell them when there is a big local event.

× Yeah, my parents treat this there.

✓ Yes, my parents taught me that.

The original uses incorrect verb 'treat' and structure 'there'. The intended meaning is past teaching, so use past tense 'taught' and object 'me' with 'that'. Suggestion: use 'teach' -> past 'taught' and include the recipient 'me'.

× When do you when I wear a child?

✓ When I was a child?

This sentence has multiple errors: wrong auxiliary 'do' and 'wear' instead of 'was'. The correct past-time clause is 'When I was a child'. Suggestion: use verb 'be' in past 'was' for first person singular in time clauses.'

× How to talk with your friends and how to share foods and how to respect your relatives and how to how to give loves with your friends or childhood or baby.

✓ How to talk with friends, how to share food, how to respect relatives, and how to show love to friends or younger children.

Multiple issues: 'foods' should be uncountable 'food'; 'give loves' is unnatural; 'childhood or baby' is unclear. Use parallel structure with 'how to' once and nouns in correct forms. Suggestion: use 'show love' or 'show affection' and 'younger children' or 'babies'.

× I usually like to share my food with my friends or my parents or cousins.

✓ I usually like to share my food with my friends, my parents, or my cousins.

Grammar mostly correct but needs consistent parallel listing with commas and possessive 'my' before 'cousins' for clarity. Suggestion: keep parallel items separated by commas.'

× Our personal details are our personal banking account that's kinds of things is not sharing suitable for us others.

✓ Personal details and bank account information are not suitable to share with others.

Original repeats 'personal' and uses incorrect structure 'that's kinds of things is not sharing suitable for us others'. Use plural noun 'details' and plural subject 'information' and passive-like adjective 'not suitable to share with others'. Suggestion: use 'bank account information' and 'not suitable to share'.'

× I like to share my own feelings that I really like to go for abroad, to history and story and taste, for new cultures and privations and new friends.

✓ I like to share that I really want to go abroad to learn about history, stories, tastes, new cultures, and meet new friends.

Errors: 'go for abroad' should be 'go abroad'; 'like to share my own feelings that I really like to' is awkward — use 'share that I want to'; 'privations' is incorrect word choice, likely 'experiences' or 'traditions'. Suggestion: use 'want to' for desire and list nouns correctly.'

× That's the one. My first person is my brother.

✓ The first person I would tell is my brother.

'That's the one' is unnecessary; 'My first person is my brother' is ungrammatical. Use 'the first person I would tell' or 'I would tell first'. Suggestion: reorder to subject-verb-object with relative clause.'

× I usually share my own things with my brother because a brother is spending money for me abroad or anythings, school, college.

✓ I usually share things with my brother because he supports me financially when I am abroad or with school and college expenses.

Errors: 'a brother' should be 'my brother' or 'he'; 'is spending money for me abroad' unnatural — use 'supports me financially when I am abroad'; 'anythings' incorrect. Suggestion: use pronoun 'he' and noun phrase 'supports me financially' and parallel list 'school and college expenses'.'

× I usually hear comedies or romantics or real news.

✓ I usually watch comedies, romantic films, or listen to the news.

'Hear' is wrong for watching movies; 'romantics' should be 'romantic films' or 'romance movies'; 'real news' awkward — use 'the news'. Suggestion: choose correct verbs: 'watch' for films, 'listen to' or 'follow' for news and use parallel list.