Sharing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers and repetition, and give one brief specific supporting detail with correct grammar. Use linking words if adding details.

Ejemplo: No, my parents didn't teach me to share; I learned it at school. For example, my teacher told a story about ancient families where people shared fruit and elders let children eat first, which taught us selflessness.

Sugerencia: Organize the answer: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific examples. Avoid hesitations and correct word choice (e.g., 'people sitting next to me').

Ejemplo: I like to share ideas and personal items with friends. For instance, I often lend clothes to close friends, and when I travel by train I sometimes share snacks with the people sitting next to me.

Sugerencia: State your opinion clearly, then give a concise reason and a specific alternative. Reduce repetition and fix grammar (use conditional forms correctly).

Ejemplo: I think money is generally not suitable to share. If someone needs help, I prefer to assist by buying what they need or offering other support rather than simply giving cash.

Sugerencia: Be specific and use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'life hacks', 'silver jewelry'). Start with a clear topic sentence and give one concise example with a brief explanation of usefulness.

Ejemplo: Yes. Recently I shared a life hack with my friends: how to clean silver jewelry at home using baking soda and warm water. It was useful because it restored shine without expensive cleaners.

Sugerencia: Answer directly naming the person, then give one clear reason or example. Remove hesitations and be natural (avoid awkward phrases like 'got a lot of money').

Ejemplo: The first person I tell is usually a close friend because they support me. For example, when I passed an important exam last month, I called my best friend immediately to share the news.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and one brief example of each type (good and bad). Use linking words (for example, because) and avoid filler words.

Ejemplo: I share all kinds of news with my friends, both good and bad. For example, I tell them about job promotions as well as personal problems because they always support and advise me.

× No, they didn't, but I learned it at school.

✓ No, they didn't, but I learned it at school.

This sentence is correct; past tense 'didn't' and 'learned' agree. Keep as is.

× Umm, my teacher told us, uh, told us a very, uh, old story and ancient man, how uh, ancient men share uh, the fruits with his family.

✓ My teacher told us an old story about how ancient men shared the fruits with their families.

The original has run-on structure and inconsistent pronouns and tense. Use 'an old story about how' for clarity, past tense 'shared' to match 'told', and plural pronouns 'their families' to agree with 'men'.

× He always choose small one to him.

✓ He always chose the smaller one for himself.

Original uses wrong tense and forms: 'choose' should be past 'chose' to match narrative, and 'to him' is incorrect; use reflexive 'for himself'. Also include 'the' and comparative 'smaller' for clarity.

× I would like to share my thoughts and clothes with my friends.

✓ I would like to share my thoughts and clothes with my friends.

This sentence is correct and needs no change; articles and plurality are appropriate.

× Maybe a stranger's, uh, sometime.

✓ Maybe sometimes I share with a stranger.

Original is fragmented and has possessive 'stranger's' incorrectly. Rearrange to adverb 'sometimes' and complete the verb phrase 'share with a stranger'.

× For example, when I take a trains, uh, I will share foods with the people.

✓ For example, when I take a train, I will share food with the people.

Use singular 'a train' (not 'a trains') and uncountable 'food' (not 'foods'). Article and count noun agreement corrected.

× Legs sit next to me.

✓ The people sitting next to me.

Fragment 'Legs sit next to me' is incorrect. Use 'the people sitting next to me' to refer to passengers adjacent to the speaker.

× In my opinion I think money is not suitable for sharing because uh, uh, I if someone need help I uh, I will help help him buy another umm ways not to just give his money.

✓ In my opinion, money is not suitable for sharing because if someone needs help, I will help him buy what he needs rather than just give him money.

Problems: verb agreement 'someone needs' not 'someone need'; redundant filler words removed; pronoun consistency 'him' used but consider gender-neutral 'them'; 'buy another ways' is incorrect—use 'buy what he needs' or 'assist him in other ways'. Also add commas and simplify sentence structure.

× Yes I do for example, recently I shared some life hikes with my friends, umm, such as how to clean silver jewelries at home by your by myself.

✓ Yes I do. For example, recently I shared some life hacks with my friends, such as how to clean silver jewelry at home by myself.

Use 'life hacks' (not 'life hikes'), 'jewelry' is uncountable or 'jewelleries' is incorrect—use 'jewelry'. 'By your by myself' is wrong; use 'by myself'. Also split into two sentences and keep past tense 'shared' for a recent event.

× Umm, it's very easy to do it.

✓ It's very easy to do.

'To do it' is redundant after 'easy to do'; remove 'it' for conciseness. Grammar is otherwise acceptable.

× I usually share my good news with my one of my close friends, umm, such as I umm, passed tests, uh, or I got a lot of money.

✓ I usually share my good news with one of my close friends, such as when I pass exams or when I get a lot of money.

Remove duplicate 'my' ('my one of my'); use habitual or general present for repeated actions: 'I usually share' followed by examples in present simple for general truths: 'when I pass exams' and 'when I get a lot of money'. 'Passed tests' should be 'pass exams' for general habitual examples.

× I would like to uh, share this good deal with.

✓ I would like to share this good news with them.

Original is incomplete and lacks an object. Clarify what is shared ('good news') and with whom ('them' or 'my friend').

× Most of the time I share, umm, all kinds of news with my friends.

✓ Most of the time I share all kinds of news with my friends.

Remove filler pauses; sentence is otherwise correct.

× Bad news or good news, uh, because they always support me, uh, umm, even it's better news, they always, uh.

✓ Whether it is bad news or good news, they always support me.

Original is fragmented and has unclear 'even it's better news, they always'. Use 'whether it is' to present alternatives and complete the clause. Remove fillers and finish the idea with 'they always support me'.