Sharing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答は基本的に意味が伝わりますが、文法ミスや繰り返し、語彙の選択ミスが目立ちます。まずは簡潔なトピック文（Yes, they did.）の後に、具体例（何を共有したか、どのように教えられたか）を1〜2文で付ける練習をしてください。接続詞（for example, such as, and）や正しい名詞・動詞の使い方（“tools”や“things”の具体化、動詞の形）に注意しましょう。発音や流暢さは安定しているので、文法（冠詞・複数形・語順）と語彙の正確さを改善すると得点が上がります。

Ejemplo: Yes, they did. My parents often encouraged me to share both toys and stories with others. For example, they taught me to lend my toys to classmates and to invite friends to play at home, which helped me build good relationships.

Sugerencia: 内容が不明瞭で不適切な語彙（"cancer or rises"）が使われています。まずは共有する具体的な物（books, food, experiences, toolsなど）を1〜2種類挙げ、なぜ共有するのかを簡潔に説明してください。接続語（because, so, therefore）で理由をつなぎ、曖昧な表現は避けましょう。語彙ミスは意味を大きく損なうので正しい単語の選択を重視してください。

Ejemplo: I like to share books and useful tools with my friends. Because sharing books allows us to discuss new ideas, and lending tools helps them when they need to fix something, which strengthens our friendship.

Sugerencia: 主張は理解できますが、文法と語彙の誤りが多く、論理のつながりが不明瞭です。避ける物（moneyなど）をはっきり述べ、その理由（trust issues, possible conflicts）を1文で具体的に説明しましょう。不要な語や繰り返しを削り、自然な接続詞（because, as, since）を使ってください。

Ejemplo: I don't think money is suitable to share because lending money can cause misunderstandings or damage relationships if it is not repaid. Therefore, I prefer to avoid sharing cash with friends.

Sugerencia: 内容は『知識を共有した』という点で良いですが、繰り返しと不自然な表現があります。まず結論を短く述べ（Yes, I have.）、次に具体例（どのような知識を、誰に、どのように共有したか）を1〜2文で示してください。また、“accommodation and arranging”の意味を明確にし、正しい語順と名詞の使い方に注意しましょう。

Ejemplo: Yes, I have. Recently I shared professional knowledge about project planning with junior colleagues at work. For example, I explained how to organize schedules and book accommodations for business trips, which helped them manage tasks more efficiently.

Sugerencia: 回答は自然で内容も明確です。ただし文法（冠詞、時制、語順）と語彙の選択（succeed → success, awarded → receive an award）を改善すればより自然になります。まず簡潔なトピック文の後に1例だけ挙げ、接続詞（for example, because）で理由を補足するとよいです。

Ejemplo: Definitely my wife. For example, when I receive good news at work, such as a promotion or an award, I always tell my wife first because she supports me the most.

Sugerencia: 答えが漠然としていて意味が取りにくい表現があります。具体的にどのような『良いニュース』（achievements, promotions, personal milestones）を共有するのかを明確に述べてください。また、例を1つ挙げて理由（to celebrate, to congratulate）を付け加えると説得力が増します。文法ミス（succeeded → success/succeeded in, word order）も修正しましょう。

Ejemplo: I usually share good news about my friends' achievements, such as job promotions or graduation. I do this to celebrate with them and to congratulate them personally.

× Sharing the happy experiences and the things tools for other people is the one of the kind of the.

✓ Sharing happy experiences and tools with other people is one of the kind things I value.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear due to extra articles, misplaced nouns, and redundant phrases. Combine related ideas: 'happy experiences' and 'tools' are parallel; use 'with other people' as prepositional phrase; 'one of the kind of the' is incorrect — replace with 'one of the kinds' or better 'one of the kind things I value'. Suggestion: simplify and parallelize items and remove unnecessary articles. Grammar problem type ID:26

× In my opinion, I like to share cancer or rises and something like tools with others and friends.

✓ In my opinion, I like to share resources and tools with my friends and others.

The original uses incorrect words ('cancer', 'rises') that do not fit context; likely meant 'resources' or 'ideas'. Also 'something like tools' is redundant. Replace with clear nouns and correct collocation 'share with my friends and others'. Suggestion: choose context-appropriate nouns and maintain parallel structure. Grammar problem type ID:26

× By linking them to other friends OK enhance the relationship with them.

✓ By introducing them to other friends, I can enhance my relationships with them.

Original mixes spoken filler 'OK' and has incorrect verb forms. Use 'introducing' (gerund) for the action and 'I can enhance my relationships with them' for clear result. Suggestion: avoid filler words and ensure subject and verb are present and properly placed. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I'm sure you're sharing money is not suit for.

✓ I'm sure sharing money is not suitable.

Original incorrectly uses 'you're' instead of 'your' and 'not suit for' is incorrect collocation. Use adjective 'suitable' and drop unnecessary preposition. Suggestion: check pronoun choice and adjective+preposition collocations. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Sharing with others it is because when it comes to sharing monies, money or relationship often collapse when they might not return.

✓ I avoid sharing money because when people do not return it, financial and personal relationships can break down.

Original is repetitive and ungrammatical ('sharing with others it is because', 'monies'). Clarify cause and effect: use 'because' to introduce reason, use singular 'money' or 'funds', and state consequence succinctly. Suggestion: restructure sentence to show cause and effect clearly. Grammar problem type ID:26

× It's very humble.

✓ It is a sensitive issue.

'Humble' is not appropriate to describe a problematic situation; likely meant 'delicate' or 'sensitive'. Choose adjective that matches meaning. Suggestion: select adjectives that convey intended nuance. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Recently in my professional view, yes I do.

✓ Yes, recently in my professional life, I have shared things with others.

Original is fragmented and awkward. Provide a full answer that fits the question tense: 'recently' + present perfect 'have shared' to indicate past actions relevant now. Suggestion: use complete clauses and appropriate tense for recent experiences. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Recently in my professional view, I can share the knowledge with others.

✓ Recently in my professional role, I have been sharing knowledge with others.

'Professional view' is not idiomatic; use 'professional role' or 'work'. For ongoing/recent actions, present perfect progressive 'have been sharing' is natural. Suggestion: choose correct noun for context and tense to indicate duration. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Through my professional experience, I learned that the accommodation and arranging anything.

✓ Through my professional experience, I learned how to arrange accommodation and other logistics.

Original lacks parallelism and a complete verb phrase; 'arranging anything' is vague. Specify what was learned with 'how to' and give concrete objects 'accommodation and other logistics'. Suggestion: make verb phrases complete and specify nouns. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Definitely my wife.

✓ Definitely my wife.

As a short answer this is acceptable, but to be complete: 'Definitely my wife' is fine. No article needed before a proper noun referring to a person. Suggestion: optionally expand: 'Definitely, I would tell my wife first.' Grammar problem type ID:22

× When I get something good news such as succeed in my work or awarded in my job or that shed from school, I firstly talk to my wife and secondly I chose my family.

✓ When I get good news, such as succeeding at work, receiving an award, or graduating from school, I first tell my wife and then tell my family.

Use 'good news' without 'something'; verbs must be in appropriate forms: 'succeed' -> 'succeeding', 'awarded' -> 'receiving an award', 'shed from school' unclear -> likely 'graduating from school'. Use ordering adverbs 'first' and 'then' rather than 'firstly' and 'secondly' in speech. 'Chose' is past tense; use 'tell' present tense to match 'when I get'. Suggestion: correct noun phrases, verb forms, and sequencing adverbs. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Regarding my friends, I want to share the good news regarding other friends.

✓ With my friends, I like to share when other friends have good news.

Original repeats 'regarding' and is awkward. Rephrase to clarify meaning: you share news about others' successes with your friends. Suggestion: avoid repeating prepositions and use natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID:26

× The news other friends got all ordered or other friends got succeeded in something.

✓ I share news about other friends' achievements or successes.

Original is ungrammatical ('got all ordered', 'got succeeded'). Use possessive form 'friends' achievements' and nouns 'achievements' or 'successes'. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and avoid literal translations like 'got succeeded'. Grammar problem type ID:26