Part 1
Examinador
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidato
No well I don't have a bike on the my family don't offer me a bike to be honest I was just sitting at home and working studying so I have nothing like this really for unforgiven memorable in my childhood it was pretty normal and boring childhood. I just go out to with my dad. I miss that day.
Examinador
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidato
Yeah, sure, every little boy riding a bike in the street, a lot of them, but no girls for sure. The community is **** though. So for them, girls drive a bike or a car or something like need a miracle to happen really naturally. But for me, I really, I really like Upwicks and I wish I did that. I wish I can have one in this, in this age of mine.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Puntuación: 30.0Sugerencia: Answer directly in the past tense: explain that you did not own a bike. Avoid unclear phrases such as “for unforgiven memorable,” and replace “working studying” with a specific childhood activity. Add one clear reason or memory, using a linking word such as “because” or “although.”
Ejemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family never bought one for me. I usually stayed at home to study, although I sometimes went out with my dad. I still miss those outings.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Puntuación: 35.0Sugerencia: Give a clear overall answer, then support it with a specific observation. Use accurate grammar, such as “many children ride bikes,” and avoid broad claims about boys and girls unless you can explain them carefully. The phrase “Upwicks” is unclear, so name the activity or type of bike you mean. Use “I wish I could” to describe something you want now.
Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and people who use them for short trips. In my neighborhood, I often see children riding bikes in the park. I’d like to learn to ride one myself because it would be a fun way to exercise.
× I don't have a bike on the my family...
✓ I didn't have a bike, and my family didn't offer me one.
The preposition on does not belong before my family. Join the two clauses with and, and use one to avoid repeating bike.
× My family don't offer me a bike.
✓ My family didn't offer me a bike.
The question asks about your childhood, so use the past tense. In a negative past-tense clause, use didn't followed by the base form offer.
× I was just sitting at home and working studying.
✓ I was just sitting at home, working and studying.
When listing two activities, connect the verb forms with and. The phrase working studying does not properly link the activities.
× It was pretty normal and boring childhood.
✓ It was a pretty normal and boring childhood.
Childhood is a singular countable noun in this sentence, so it needs the indefinite article a.
× I just go out to with my dad.
✓ I just went out with my dad.
The speaker is describing childhood, so use the past-tense form went. Remove to because it is not needed before with my dad.
× Every little boy riding a bike in the street, a lot of them, but no girls for sure.
✓ Every little boy rides a bike in the street, but girls don't, for sure.
Riding is not a finite verb here, so the original clause lacks a main verb. Use rides to make a complete present-tense statement; girls don't completes the contrast.
× So for them, girls drive a bike or a car or something like need a miracle to happen really naturally.
✓ So, for them, it would take a miracle for girls to ride a bike or drive a car.
The original sentence does not have a clear grammatical structure around something like need a miracle. The revised version uses the complete pattern it would take a miracle for someone to do something.
× I wish I can have one in this, in this age of mine.
✓ I wish I could have one at my age.
After I wish, use could to describe a desired but unreal situation. Could is the appropriate modal form here; at my age is also the natural prepositional phrase.