Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Answer directly, then explain how you learned to ride. Correct the word order in “get for me one” to “get one for me,” and avoid repeating “bicycle” by using “it” or “one.” Use a linking phrase such as “As a result” to make the connection between seeing your friends ride and learning yourself clearer.

Ejemplo: No, I didn't have a bike as a child because my parents couldn't afford one. However, I often watched my friends riding theirs, which made me want to learn. As a result, I learned to ride from my neighbors.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer, then organize your examples into clear sentences. Avoid joining several ideas with a comma, and use “people” rather than “they” when the subject is unclear. Correct phrases such as “move them from one place or another” to “travel from one place to another,” and “doing selling charcoals” to “selling charcoal.”

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular, especially in rural areas. Many people use them to travel from one place to another because they are affordable and practical. Some also use bikes for business, such as transporting and selling charcoal.

× Unfortunately, I didn't have one because my parents couldn't afford to get for me one.

✓ Unfortunately, I didn't have one because my parents couldn't afford to get one for me.

The direct object one should come before the phrase for me. With this sentence structure, say get one for me, not get for me one.

× Of course, bikes are very popular in my country, especially when you visit places like rural areas, they use bikes as the mode of transport to move them from one place or another and others use it as a mode of doing business, doing selling charcoals, using the bikes.

✓ Of course, bikes are very popular in my country. In rural areas, people use bikes as a mode of transport to travel from one place to another, while others use them for business, such as selling charcoal.

The correct phrase is from one place to another. In this expression, to—not or—is used to show movement between two places.

× Of course, bikes are very popular in my country, especially when you visit places like rural areas, they use bikes as the mode of transport to move them from one place or another and others use it as a mode of doing business, doing selling charcoals, using the bikes.

✓ Of course, bikes are very popular in my country. In rural areas, people use bikes as a mode of transport to travel from one place to another, while others use them for business, such as selling charcoal.

The pronoun it does not agree with its plural antecedent bikes. Use them to refer to bikes. The revision also makes the pronoun reference clearer by naming the people who use the bikes.

× Of course, bikes are very popular in my country, especially when you visit places like rural areas, they use bikes as the mode of transport to move them from one place or another and others use it as a mode of doing business, doing selling charcoals, using the bikes.

✓ Of course, bikes are very popular in my country. In rural areas, people use bikes as a mode of transport to travel from one place to another, while others use them for business, such as selling charcoal.

Charcoal is generally an uncountable noun when referring to the material used as fuel, so it does not normally take a plural -s. Use selling charcoal, not selling charcoals.

× Of course, bikes are very popular in my country, especially when you visit places like rural areas, they use bikes as the mode of transport to move them from one place or another and others use it as a mode of doing business, doing selling charcoals, using the bikes.

✓ Of course, bikes are very popular in my country. In rural areas, people use bikes as a mode of transport to travel from one place to another, while others use them for business, such as selling charcoal.

The phrase doing selling is not a natural grammatical construction here. Use selling charcoal as an example of the business, or say doing business by selling charcoal. The original also joins several clauses without clear structure; separating and connecting the ideas as shown makes the sentence easier to follow.