Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, “like”가 반복되고 “with has with”는 문법적으로 자연스럽지 않습니다. 자전거가 어떻게 예뻤는지 한 문장으로 설명하고, 구체적인 기억이나 느낌을 덧붙여 보세요. 답변은 2~3문장으로 간결하게 구성하면 더 효과적입니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. It was a pretty pink bike with little tassels on the handlebars, and I loved riding it around my neighborhood.

Sugerencia: 자전거가 인기 있는 이유로 젊은 층의 취미와 강변 자전거 도로를 제시한 점은 적절합니다. 다만 “riding bike”는 “riding bikes” 또는 “cycling”으로, “considered as”는 “considered”로 고치세요. “bike road” 대신 “bike paths”를 사용하고, 마지막 문장을 완성해 도로가 자전거 이용을 어떻게 늘리는지 설명하세요. 말더듬이나 “uh”를 줄이고 문장을 3문장 이내로 정리하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Korea, especially among young people. Cycling is a fun way to exercise, and there are excellent bike paths along many rivers. These paths make it easy and enjoyable to ride.

× Really pretty, like with has with little like pink tassels with it.

✓ It was really pretty, with little pink tassels.

This fragment does not have a subject and a finite verb. The phrase with has is also not grammatically formed here. Use a complete clause such as It was really pretty, then describe the tassels with a with-phrase.

× Riding bike is considered as a really cool hobby these days among the young people.

✓ Riding a bike is considered a really cool hobby these days among young people.

Bike is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article in this general statement. Use a bike. Also, the is usually omitted before young people when speaking about young people in general.

× Riding bike is considered as a really cool hobby these days among the young people.

✓ Riding a bike is considered a really cool hobby these days among young people.

When considered means regarded as, it is normally followed directly by a noun phrase: considered a hobby. Do not add as in this construction.

× And I think it's uh in Korea we have very, very good, uh, bike road alongside the river.

✓ And I think that in Korea we have very good bike paths alongside the river.

Bike road is used as a singular countable noun without an article, which is not grammatical here. Since the sentence refers generally to bike routes along the river, use the plural bike paths. The opening is also clearer as I think that in Korea.