Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Answer directly, then give one or two clear supporting details. Remove the repeated phrase “when to me” and use “it” rather than “she” to refer to the bike. Connect the bike’s benefits naturally, and say “saved me time on the way to school.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me so I could ride to school by myself. It made me feel more independent and saved me time on the way there.

Sugerencia: State your opinion clearly in a complete sentence. Use the plural “bikes,” and explain the reason with a linking phrase such as “because” or “as a result.” Avoid unfinished phrases like “because” and “as technological area.” Be precise: you could say that people prefer motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient.

Ejemplo: I don’t think bicycles are as popular as they used to be in my country. Many people prefer motorbikes because they can travel faster and are more convenient for commuting. As a result, bicycles are mainly used for exercise or short trips.

× My parents gave it to me when to me so I could ride to school on my own.

✓ My parents gave it to me so I could ride to school on my own.

The phrase when to me is incomplete and disrupts the sentence structure. Remove it unless you add a complete time clause, such as when I was a child.

× But she made me feel more independent and saved time on the way there.

✓ But it made me feel more independent and saved time on the way there.

The pronoun she does not agree with bike, which was referred to as it. Use it to refer to the bike.

× I do think that bike is no more popular in my country because.

✓ I do think that bikes are no longer popular in my country.

When referring to bikes in general, use the plural noun bikes. The phrase no longer expresses that they are not popular now.

× Always prioritize something go quickly such as motorbike and motorcycle so that's why.

✓ My country always prioritizes things that help people travel quickly, such as motorbikes and motorcycles.

The subject my country is third-person singular, so the present-tense verb needs -s: prioritizes. The revised sentence also uses a plural form for the general examples.

× As technological area my country. Always prioritize something go quickly such as motorbike and motorcycle so that's why.

✓ Because my country is technologically advanced, it prioritizes things that help people travel quickly, such as motorbikes and motorcycles.

The original contains incomplete sentence fragments, and because is left without a complete clause. Join the ideas into a complete sentence with a subject and a verb. Use a relative clause, such as things that help people travel quickly, to connect the idea clearly.