Part 1
Examinador
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidato
Yes, I have a bike when I was a child. This is my father's gift to me when I was 12 years old birthday party on 12 years old birthday party. I often ride this by to go to school. Uh, it can make me have more healthier.
Examinador
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidato
Yes, I think by us becoming more and more popular in my country because of the widespread bicycle sharing schemes. Uh, for example, when I go to school I see many people using share bikes to commute, which is convenient and inexpensive.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Puntuación: 40.0Sugerencia: 回答内容切题,也提到了自行车的来源和用途,但时态、词汇和表达错误较多。讲过去的经历时要用过去时,例如用“had”“was”;“自行车”应说“bike”,不是“by”;避免重复“12 years old birthday party”,可改为“for my 12th birthday”。此外,“more healthier”重复使用了比较级,应说“healthier”。建议按“直接回答—补充细节—说明好处”的顺序组织。
Ejemplo: Yes, I did. My father gave me a bike for my 12th birthday, and I often rode it to school. It was a convenient way to get around and helped me stay healthy.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Puntuación: 68.0Sugerencia: 回答直接,并用共享单车举例说明,内容具体,逻辑也清楚。主要问题是“by us”应改为“bikes”,并注意主谓一致;“share bikes”不够自然,可用“shared bikes”或“bike-sharing services”。“more and more popular”可以保留,也可以换成更简洁的“increasingly popular”。建议删去口语填充词“Uh”,并让表达更流畅。
Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are becoming increasingly popular in my country, partly because bike-sharing services are widely available. For example, I often see people riding shared bikes to school or work, as they are convenient and inexpensive.
× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.
✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.
句子描述的是童年时期的情况,属于过去时间,因此 have 应改为过去式 had。回答过去经历时,注意让动词时态与时间状语保持一致。
× This is my father's gift to me when I was 12 years old birthday party on 12 years old birthday party.
✓ It was a gift from my father for my 12th birthday.
句子描述的是过去收到的礼物,所以 is 应改为 was。讲述过去发生的事情时,应使用过去时态。
× This is my father's gift to me when I was 12 years old birthday party on 12 years old birthday party.
✓ It was a gift from my father for my 12th birthday.
表达“作为生日礼物”时,通常用 for my 12th birthday;原句中的 when 和 on 与后面的 birthday party 组合不正确。建议使用“for + 生日”来说明礼物的用途或缘由。
× This is my father's gift to me when I was 12 years old birthday party on 12 years old birthday party.
✓ It was a gift from my father for my 12th birthday.
原句中“when I was 12 years old birthday party”和“on 12 years old birthday party”结构混乱且重复,导致句意不清。可以用完整、简洁的结构“It was a gift from ... for ...”表达“这是……送给我的……礼物”。
× I often ride this by to go to school.
✓ I often rode this bike to school.
这句话讲的是小时候经常发生的事情,因此 ride 应改为过去式 rode。讲述过去的习惯时,可以用 often 加动词过去式。
× Uh, it can make me have more healthier.
✓ It can make me healthier.
healthier 已经是 healthy 的比较级,不能再在前面加 more。双音节形容词 healthy 的比较级通常使用 -ier 形式。
× Uh, it can make me have more healthier.
✓ It can make me healthier.
make 后面可以接宾语再接形容词,表示“使某人变得……”,结构是 make + 宾语 + 形容词。这里不需要在 make me 后面再加 have。
× Yes, I think by us becoming more and more popular in my country because of the widespread bicycle sharing schemes.
✓ Yes, I think bikes are becoming more and more popular in my country because of the widespread bicycle-sharing schemes.
原句中的“by us becoming”无法正确构成这里所需的主句。应让 bikes 作主语,并用 are becoming 表达“自行车正变得越来越受欢迎”。
× Uh, for example, when I go to school I see many people using share bikes to commute, which is convenient and inexpensive.
✓ For example, when I go to school, I see many people using shared bikes to commute, which is convenient and inexpensive.
这里需要用过去分词 shared 作形容词修饰 bikes,表示“共享的自行车”。注意 shared bikes 中的 shared 不是句子的谓语动词,而是修饰名词的分词。