Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 첫 문장인 “When I was younger”는 완전한 문장이 아니므로 질문에 바로 답하는 주어와 동사가 있는 문장으로 시작하세요. “played with my friends to bike”는 부자연스러운 표현이므로 “rode my bike with my friends”라고 말하는 것이 좋습니다. 어디에서 자전거를 탔는지 또는 그때 어땠는지 짧게 덧붙이면 답변이 더 구체적이고 자연스러워집니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bike when I was young, and I often rode it with my friends around our neighborhood. I really enjoyed those afternoons.

Sugerencia: “Yes” 뒤에 완전한 문장으로 의견을 제시한 점은 좋지만, “it is the trend the children”은 문법적으로 부자연스럽고 의미가 불분명합니다. “cycling is popular among children”처럼 표현하고, 공원이 많다는 이유와 연결해 구체적인 상황을 설명하세요. 마지막의 “so I think”는 문장이 끝나지 않은 상태이므로 삭제하거나 생각을 완성하세요. 한두 문장으로 간결하게 마무리하면 더 효과적입니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Korea, especially among children. Many parks have cycling paths, so families can ride together safely at the weekends.

× When I was younger.

✓ When I was younger, my parents gave me a bike.

When I was younger is a dependent clause and cannot stand alone as a complete sentence. Connect it to the main clause with a comma.

× My parents gave me a bike, so I played with my friends to bike.

✓ My parents gave me a bike, so I rode it with my friends.

The phrase played with my friends to bike is an awkward way to express the activity. Use rode it with my friends to say that you rode your bike together.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in Korea because there are many parks and it is the trend the children so I think

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in Korea because there are many parks and cycling is a trend among children.

The phrase the trend the children is missing a preposition. Use among before children to show the group in which something is popular. The original answer also trails off after so I think, so finish the thought or omit those words.