Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: คำตอบตอบตรงคำถามและมีรายละเอียดเกี่ยวกับของขวัญจากคุณพ่อ แต่ควรแก้ไวยากรณ์และใช้คำให้เป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น เช่น “My father gave it to me as a birthday present” แทน “gave me as a gift in my birthday” และ “I really liked that bicycle” เนื่องจากกำลังพูดถึงอดีต นอกจากนี้ “there have some accident happened” ควรเป็น “I had a few accidents” และ “trust issue about how to bike” ไม่เป็นธรรมชาติ ควรใช้ “I became less confident about riding.” ควรเชื่อมเหตุผลด้วยคำอย่าง “However” และอธิบายสั้น ๆ ว่าอุบัติเหตุส่งผลต่อความมั่นใจอย่างไร โดยไม่ต้องใช้ทั้ง “really” และ “a lot” พร้อมกัน

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me as a birthday present, and I really enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood. However, I had a few accidents, so I became less confident about cycling.

Sugerencia: คำตอบมีการเปรียบเทียบอดีตกับปัจจุบันและให้เหตุผลได้ดี แต่ควรออกเสียงและเขียนคำว่า “bikes” ให้ถูกต้อง ไม่ใช่ “Bias” และควรใช้ประธานให้ชัดเจน เช่น “Bikes were popular in the past, but they are less common nowadays.” วลี “they have economic growth” ควรเปลี่ยนเป็น “the country has developed economically” และ “so many transportation” ควรเป็น “many forms of transportation.” ควรยกตัวอย่างให้เป็นธรรมชาติ เช่น “public transport and motorbikes” และหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำ “we can use...” หลายครั้ง ควรจัดคำตอบเป็นประโยคหลัก ตามด้วยเหตุผลและตัวอย่าง โดยใช้ “because” หรือ “for example” เพื่อให้ลื่นไหลขึ้น

Ejemplo: Bikes were quite popular in the past, but they are less common nowadays. As the country has developed economically, people have more transportation options, such as buses, trains, and motorbikes. For example, many commuters prefer public transport because it is more convenient for travelling long distances.

× My father gave me as a gift in my birthday.

✓ My father gave it to me as a gift on my birthday.

The verb give needs a direct object when the receiver me is already mentioned. Use it to refer to the bicycle. Also, use on rather than in with a specific day such as my birthday.

× My father gave me as a gift in my birthday.

✓ My father gave it to me as a gift on my birthday.

Use the preposition on before a specific day or date. The correct expression is on my birthday, not in my birthday.

× I really like that bicycle a lot, but there have some accident happened in my life so I have some trust issue about how to bike

✓ I really like that bicycle a lot, but there have been some accidents in my life, so I have some trust issues about riding a bike.

To express the existence of past events, use there have been, not there have. The structure there have been is followed by a plural noun.

× I really like that bicycle a lot, but there have some accident happened in my life so I have some trust issue about how to bike

✓ I really like that bicycle a lot, but there have been some accidents in my life, so I have some trust issues about riding a bike.

Use the plural forms accidents and issues because the speaker refers to more than one accident and to continuing problems with confidence.

× I really like that bicycle a lot, but there have some accident happened in my life so I have some trust issue about how to bike

✓ I really like that bicycle a lot, but there have been some accidents in my life, so I have some trust issues about riding a bike.

After the preposition about, use a gerund or -ing form. Therefore, riding is more grammatically appropriate than the infinitive phrase how to bike in this sentence.

× Bias was popular in the past, but nowadays in my country they have economic growth and they have so many transportation that we can use instead of bikes such as public transport and motorcycle, we can use any things instead of using bikes.

✓ Bikes were popular in the past, but nowadays, my country has experienced economic growth, and there are many means of transportation we can use instead of bikes, such as public transportation and motorcycles.

The intended subject is bikes, which is plural, so use were rather than was. Also, my country is singular, so use has rather than have when it is the subject.

× Bias was popular in the past, but nowadays in my country they have economic growth and they have so many transportation that we can use instead of bikes such as public transport and motorcycle, we can use any things instead of using bikes.

✓ Bikes were popular in the past, but nowadays, my country has experienced economic growth, and there are many means of transportation we can use instead of bikes, such as public transportation and motorcycles.

Use there are to introduce the existence of many means of transportation. The structure there are agrees with the plural noun phrase many means.

× Bias was popular in the past, but nowadays in my country they have economic growth and they have so many transportation that we can use instead of bikes such as public transport and motorcycle, we can use any things instead of using bikes.

✓ Bikes were popular in the past, but nowadays, my country has experienced economic growth, and there are many means of transportation we can use instead of bikes, such as public transportation and motorcycles.

Transportation is generally an uncountable noun, so many transportation is incorrect. Use much transportation or, more naturally here, many means of transportation.

× Bias was popular in the past, but nowadays in my country they have economic growth and they have so many transportation that we can use instead of bikes such as public transport and motorcycle, we can use any things instead of using bikes.

✓ Bikes were popular in the past, but nowadays, my country has experienced economic growth, and there are many means of transportation we can use instead of bikes, such as public transportation and motorcycles.

Use the plural noun motorcycles because the sentence refers to motorcycles in general. The plural form means also agrees with the quantifier many.

× Bias was popular in the past, but nowadays in my country they have economic growth and they have so many transportation that we can use instead of bikes such as public transport and motorcycle, we can use any things instead of using bikes.

✓ Bikes were popular in the past, but nowadays, my country has experienced economic growth, and there are many means of transportation we can use instead of bikes, such as public transportation and motorcycles.

When referring to motorcycles as a general category, use the plural form motorcycles rather than the singular countable noun motorcycle without an article.

× Bias was popular in the past, but nowadays in my country they have economic growth and they have so many transportation that we can use instead of bikes such as public transport and motorcycle, we can use any things instead of using bikes.

✓ Bikes were popular in the past, but nowadays, my country has experienced economic growth, and there are many means of transportation we can use instead of bikes, such as public transportation and motorcycles.

Use anything, not any things, when referring to an unspecified thing in a negative or general statement. In this sentence, the more natural structure is many means of transportation.