Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 最初に「Yes, I did.」と直接答え、その後に年齢や自転車を買ってくれた人について説明すると、基本構成が明確になります。「My first time is」は不自然なので「I got my first bike when I was seven」と言いましょう。また、「bought gave me」はどちらか一つにして、「My father gave me a bike」または「My father bought me a bike」と表現します。

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven years old. My father bought it for me, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school.

Sugerencia: 「Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.」のように、質問に直接答えるトピックセンテンスから始めましょう。「my country is famous because my family」は質問とのつながりがなく、不自然です。「many student」は「many students」、「by own」は「on their own」または「by bicycle」に直してください。理由を説明する際は「because」や「For example」などの linking words を使い、学生が通学に自転車を使うという具体的な内容を一文ずつ整理して述べましょう。

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students. Many students ride their bikes to school because it is convenient and inexpensive. For example, you can see large groups of students cycling together in the morning.

× Yes I had the bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Use the indefinite article a because bike is mentioned for the first time and is not a specific bike previously identified.

× My first time is I was 7 years old and I my father bought gave me a bike.

✓ The first time I had a bike was when I was seven years old, and my father gave me a bike.

The question asks about the past, so use the past-tense form was instead of is. Also, gave is the appropriate past-tense verb here. Avoid combining bought and gave in the same verb phrase.

× My first time is I was 7 years old and I my father bought gave me a bike.

✓ The first time I had a bike was when I was seven years old, and my father gave me a bike.

The original sentence has an incomplete and disorganized structure. The pattern The first time ..., was when ... clearly connects the experience with the age. Also, use my father as the subject of the second clause.

× Yes, my country is, uh, famous because my family, uh, my country has many, uh, many student so or, or most students go to school by bike, by own.

✓ Yes, my country is famous because it has many students, and most students go to school by bike on their own.

After the quantifier many, use the plural noun students, not the singular form student.

× Yes, my country is, uh, famous because my family, uh, my country has many, uh, many student so or, or most students go to school by bike, by own.

✓ Yes, my country is famous because it has many students, and most students go to school by bike on their own.

Use the pronoun it to refer back to my country. This avoids repeating the noun and makes the sentence grammatically clearer.

× Yes, my country is, uh, famous because my family, uh, my country has many, uh, many student so or, or most students go to school by bike, by own.

✓ Yes, my country is famous because it has many students, and most students go to school by bike on their own.

The original sentence contains unnecessary and conflicting conjunctions such as so and or. Use and to connect the two related clauses.

× Yes, my country is, uh, famous because my family, uh, my country has many, uh, many student so or, or most students go to school by bike, by own.

✓ Yes, my country is famous because it has many students, and most students go to school by bike on their own.

The expression by own is incorrect. Use the fixed expression on their own to mean independently or without help.