Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Answer the question directly in the first sentence, then add one clear reason or detail. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases such as “after I grew up,” “formatized personal use,” and “from there I saved.” Use “when I grew older,” “for personal use,” and “saved money.” Also, use the past tense consistently and keep the answer to two or three natural sentences.

Ejemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, when I grew older and got a job, I saved some money and bought one for personal use. I mainly used it to travel around my neighborhood.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer and support it with a specific reason. Avoid using both “in my opinion” and “I think” together, and use plural forms such as “bikes are.” Correct the phrases “lots of traffic jam” and “public buses cost many times from us” to “there are many traffic jams” and “public transportation is relatively expensive.” Mention how bikes help people travel more easily or cheaply.

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in Daga City. There are frequent traffic jams, and public transportation can be relatively expensive, so many people use bikes for short journeys. They are also convenient because they can travel through narrow or crowded streets.

× When I was a child I did not have a bike but after I grew up I bought a bike formatized personal use because after grew up I I got a job and from from there I saved

✓ When I was a child, I did not have a bike, but after I grew up, I bought one for personal use because I got a job and started saving money.

The preposition for is needed before personal use. The expression from from there also contains an unnecessary repeated preposition. Use for personal use to explain the purpose of buying the bike.

× When I was a child I did not have a bike but after I grew up I bought a bike formatized personal use because after grew up I I got a job and from from there I saved

✓ When I was a child, I did not have a bike, but after I grew up, I bought one for personal use because I got a job and started saving money.

The clause after grew up is missing the subject pronoun I, and I I repeats the pronoun unnecessarily. Use I after because and avoid repeating the same pronoun.

× When I was a child I did not have a bike but after I grew up I bought a bike formatized personal use because after grew up I I got a job and from from there I saved

✓ When I was a child, I did not have a bike, but after I grew up, I bought one for personal use because I got a job and started saving money.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and poorly connected clauses, especially because after grew up. Use complete clauses with clear subjects and connect the ideas in a logical order. Commas also help separate the introductory and contrasting clauses.

× In my opinion, I think bike is more popular in my country and it is very popular in Daga City because lots of traffic jam and public buses cost many times from us

✓ In my opinion, I think bikes are more popular in my country, and they are very popular in Daga City because there are lots of traffic jams and public buses cost us a lot.

Bikes refers to bicycles in general, so the plural noun bikes is needed. The plural form traffic jams is also required after lots of. The pronoun they agrees with the plural subject bikes.

× In my opinion, I think bike is more popular in my country and it is very popular in Daga City because lots of traffic jam and public buses cost many times from us

✓ In my opinion, I think bikes are more popular in my country, and they are very popular in Daga City because there are lots of traffic jams and public buses cost us a lot.

The clause because lots of traffic jams is incomplete because it has no verb. Use there are to introduce the existence of multiple traffic jams: there are lots of traffic jams.

× In my opinion, I think bike is more popular in my country and it is very popular in Daga City because lots of traffic jam and public buses cost many times from us

✓ In my opinion, I think bikes are more popular in my country, and they are very popular in Daga City because there are lots of traffic jams and public buses cost us a lot.

Cost many times from us is not the correct expression. When explaining who pays, use cost us, and use a lot to describe a high price: public buses cost us a lot.

× In my opinion, I think bike is more popular in my country and it is very popular in Daga City because lots of traffic jam and public buses cost many times from us

✓ In my opinion, I think bikes are more popular in my country, and they are very popular in Daga City because there are lots of traffic jams and public buses cost us a lot.

The reason clause is not complete in the original sentence. Add the verb are with there to form a complete clause, and connect the two reasons clearly with and.