Part 1
Examinador
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidato
Yes, I did. When I was 8 years old, my father gave me a bike as a birthday present and he even taught me how to ride a bike. It's great because I learned how to keep balance and keep healthy.
Examinador
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidato
Yes, definitely. Bikes are popular in China. Many people have their own bikes and it's convenient for them to get around as the neighborhood. Shared bikes are also very popular because it's cheap and it's very easy for people to cover the last.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Puntuación: 85.0Sugerencia: 回答直接并且细节具体,包含了时间、人物和经历,整体自然连贯。建议将“keep balance”改为“maintain my balance”,将“keep healthy”改为“stay healthy”,因为这两个表达更地道。另外,可以补充骑自行车给你带来的具体感受,使答案更加生动。
Ejemplo: Yes, I did. When I was eight, my father gave me a bike for my birthday and taught me how to ride it. At first, I found it difficult to maintain my balance, but I gradually became more confident. Cycling helped me stay healthy and gave me a lot of freedom as a child.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Puntuación: 68.0Sugerencia: 回答观点明确,也提到了私人自行车和共享单车,内容方向很好。但“get around as the neighborhood”应改为“get around the neighborhood”,“it's cheap”最好改为“they are cheap”,因为主语是共享单车;“cover the last”表达不完整,应说“cover the last mile”。建议使用连接词整合句子,并补充共享单车适合短途出行这一具体原因。
Ejemplo: Yes, definitely. Bikes are quite popular in China because they are a convenient and affordable way to get around the neighborhood. Shared bikes are especially common in cities, as people can use them to cover the last mile between a bus stop or subway station and their destination. They are also useful for short trips during busy hours.
× It's great because I learned how to keep balance and keep healthy.
✓ It's great because I learned how to keep my balance and keep healthy.
“balance”在这里是特指“我身体的平衡”,通常需要限定词。可以使用物主代词“my”,所以应说“keep my balance”。“keep healthy”在语法上可以成立。
× Many people have their own bikes and it's convenient for them to get around as the neighborhood.
✓ Many people have their own bikes, and it's convenient for them to get around the neighborhood.
表示“在某个社区里四处走动”时,应使用“around the neighborhood”,不能使用“as the neighborhood”。“around”表示“在……周围或在……各处”。
× Shared bikes are also very popular because it's cheap and it's very easy for people to cover the last.
✓ Shared bikes are also very popular because they are cheap and it's very easy for people to cover the last mile.
“Shared bikes”是复数名词,因此后面应使用复数代词“they”,并搭配“are”,不能使用“it's”。“cover the last”表达不完整;“cover the last mile”是完整表达,意思是“完成最后一英里的出行”。
× Shared bikes are also very popular because it's cheap and it's very easy for people to cover the last.
✓ Shared bikes are also very popular because they are cheap and it's very easy for people to cover the last mile.
“cover the last”缺少名词,句意不完整。“the last mile”是固定搭配,补充“mile”后句子结构和意思才完整。