Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Answer the question directly, then describe your experience in a clear sequence. Replace “skipping on falling” with “I kept falling” or “I fell repeatedly.” “Stunning” usually describes something extremely beautiful or impressive, so it is not natural for describing a bike in this context; use “exciting,” “fun,” or “special” instead. Avoid repeating “again and again and again,” and connect your ideas with a linking word such as “Although” or “However.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I learned how to ride a bike when I was about five or six. At first, I kept falling, but I gradually improved with practice. Although it was difficult at the beginning, riding my bike was exciting and gave me a real sense of freedom.

Sugerencia: Begin with a complete topic sentence, such as “Yes, bikes are very popular, especially among children.” Improve the grammar by saying “ride our bikes” instead of “travel in our bikes.” The answer would be clearer if you separated the reason and example with linking words such as “This is because” and “For example.” Also, “buy something from the nearest store” is more natural than “grab something.”

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular, especially among children. This is because parents often do not allow young children to go out alone on foot, but they may let them ride to a nearby store. For example, we used to cycle to the local shop whenever we needed to buy something.

× I remember skipping on falling again and again and again the bike was really stunning though.

✓ I remember falling off the bike again and again, but the bike was really sturdy.

The original sentence contains several ideas joined without appropriate punctuation or a conjunction, creating a run-on sentence. Separate or properly connect the ideas. The phrase falling off the bike is also the natural structure for describing repeated falls.

× Oh yes very popular especially among children because our parents do not like to let us go out alone so we used to travel in our bikes whenever we wanted to grab something from the nearest store.

✓ Oh yes, bikes are very popular, especially among children, because our parents do not like to let us go out alone. Therefore, we used to travel on our bikes whenever we wanted to get something from the nearest store.

The opening phrase Oh yes, very popular does not contain a subject and a verb. Add bikes are to form a complete sentence. Use punctuation to separate the related ideas and improve sentence clarity.

× Oh yes very popular especially among children because our parents do not like to let us go out alone so we used to travel in our bikes whenever we wanted to grab something from the nearest store.

✓ Oh yes, bikes are very popular, especially among children, because our parents do not like to let us go out alone. Therefore, we used to travel on our bikes whenever we wanted to get something from the nearest store.

Use the preposition on with bikes because people ride on a bike. In our bikes is not the natural prepositional phrase in this context.