Part 1
Examinador
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidato
Yes, I did. My grandma gave me a bright blue bike for my seven years old birthday and I love it because it suited me perfectly. I used to ride it around our neighborhood almost every day and it was easy to handle for a child.
Examinador
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidato
Yes, I do. Bikes are very convenient for short distance travel, especially in big cities like Beijing. We have traffic jam every day and riding is also a good form of exercise that helps people stay fit. Loose weight.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Puntuación: 82.0Sugerencia: 回答结构清晰,先直接回答问题,再补充自行车的外观、来源和使用情况,细节也比较具体。需要注意语法和时态:应说“my seventh birthday”,而不是“my seven years old birthday”;因为是在回忆童年,建议将“love”改为“loved”,与过去时保持一致。最后一句中的“for a child”略显生硬,可以改为“for a young child”或“which made it easy for me to ride”。
Ejemplo: Yes, I did. My grandma gave me a bright blue bike for my seventh birthday, and I loved it because it suited me perfectly. I used to ride it around my neighborhood almost every day, and it was easy for a young child like me to handle.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Puntuación: 72.0Sugerencia: 回答观点明确,也提供了便利性、交通拥堵和锻炼等理由,内容方向很好。但有几处语言问题:应说“short-distance travel”;“traffic jam”应改为复数“traffic jams”;“Loose weight”是句子残片,应改为“lose weight”,并与前句合并,例如“which helps people stay fit and lose weight”。还可以使用“Moreover”或“Besides”连接补充理由,使表达更连贯。
Ejemplo: Yes, I do. Bikes are very convenient for short-distance travel, especially in big cities like Beijing. Since traffic jams are common, many people use bikes to get around more quickly. Moreover, cycling is a good form of exercise because it helps people stay fit and lose weight.
× My grandma gave me a bright blue bike for my seven years old birthday and I love it because it suited me perfectly.
✓ My grandma gave me a bright blue bike for my seven-year-old birthday and I love it because it suited me perfectly.
在复合形容词“seven-year-old”中,表示年龄的名词通常使用单数形式“year”,不能写成“years”。注意:数字+名词单数+形容词构成复合形容词时,名词要用单数,并且各部分之间使用连字符。
× My grandma gave me a bright blue bike for my seven years old birthday and I love it because it suited me perfectly.
✓ My grandma gave me a bright blue bike for my seven years old birthday and I loved it because it suited me perfectly.
这段话讲的是童年时期的经历,主要使用一般过去时。因为“gave”和“suited”都是过去时,所以“love”也应改为过去式“loved”,保持时态一致。
× We have traffic jam every day and riding is also a good form of exercise that helps people stay fit.
✓ We have traffic jams every day and riding is also a good form of exercise that helps people stay fit.
“traffic jam”是可数名词,表示每天发生不止一次交通堵塞时,应使用复数形式“traffic jams”。同时,频率词“every day”表示这种情况经常发生,因此使用一般现在时是正确的。
× Loose weight.
✓ Lose weight.
“lose”是动词,意思是“减轻、失去”;“loose”是形容词,意思是“松的”。这里需要使用动词“lose”。在完整表达中,可以说“Riding helps people lose weight.”(骑自行车帮助人们减肥。)