Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Answer the question directly and focus mainly on your childhood experience. Correct the tense error in “through which I go” by saying “which I used to ride to school,” and avoid repeating “when I was a child.” Also, replace the unnatural phrase “essential for our overall health and benefits” with “beneficial for our health.” Add one specific detail about your bike or how often you rode it, and use a linking word such as “Besides” to connect supporting information.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it to school every day, and I really enjoyed the short journey. Besides, cycling helped me stay active and gave me a sense of independence. It was a simple blue bike, but I was very proud of it.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion, then support it with one or two specific examples. Avoid repeating “also” and “use,” and change “for the different purposes” to “for different purposes.” The phrase “for the maintenance of their health” is unnatural; use “to stay healthy” instead. You could mention a particular group of cyclists, such as students or commuters, and use a linking phrase like “For example” to make the answer more precise and coherent.

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and people who live in busy cities. Many commuters cycle to work because it is cheaper and helps them avoid traffic. For example, cycling has become common in my city because more bike lanes have recently been built. Others ride bicycles at weekends to exercise and relax.

× I had a bicycle through which I go to my school when I was a child.

✓ I had a bicycle that I rode to school when I was a child.

The phrase when I was a child refers to a past period, so the past-tense form went or rode is required. Rode is more natural than went because it describes travelling by bicycle.

× I think bikes are very essential for our overall health and benefits.

✓ I think bikes are very beneficial to our overall health.

The original sentence incorrectly coordinates overall health and benefits. The adjective beneficial should describe the positive effect of bikes, and beneficial to is the appropriate structure.

× Like it is the physical activity when we do the cycling and also we can commute through it.

✓ They provide physical activity when we cycle, and we can also commute by bike.

The original sentence has an unclear structure and begins with Like without forming a complete comparison or example. The revised sentence has a clear subject and two properly coordinated ideas.

× Like it is the physical activity when we do the cycling and also we can commute through it.

✓ They provide physical activity when we cycle, and we can also commute by bike.

We normally say commute by bike, not commute through a bike. By indicates the means of transport. Also, cycle is used directly as a verb, so do the cycling is unnecessarily awkward here.

× People use different types of bikes for the different purposes like for commuting, for travelling and also they use it as a source of exercise and also for the maintenance of their health.

✓ People use different types of bikes for different purposes, such as commuting and travelling, and also as a form of exercise to maintain their health.

The noun purposes is plural and general, so it does not need the definite article the. We use different purposes when we are not referring to specific purposes already identified.

× So it has various benefits.

✓ So they have various benefits.

The antecedent is bikes, which is plural, so the plural pronoun they is needed instead of the singular pronoun it. The verb also changes from has to have to agree with they.