Part 1
Examinador
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidato
No, I didn't. I never had my one bike because I wasn't interested in riding a bike, but I prefer it to watching TV.
Examinador
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidato
Yes, I do, because in recently there are many shared bikes crews have appeared in the capital of the Korean.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Puntuación: 58.0Sugerencia: 문법과 표현을 명확하게 고치세요. 예를 들어 'my one bike'는 자연스럽지 않고, 문장 연결이 어색합니다. 답변은 직접적으로 질문에 대답한 뒤 이유를 간단히 덧붙이고, 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 이어가세요. 또한 문장 수를 2~3문장으로 유지하면서 어휘를 조금 다양하게 쓰면 더 자연스럽습니다.
Ejemplo: No, I didn't. I never owned a bike when I was a child because I wasn't interested in cycling. Instead, I preferred watching TV and playing indoor games.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Puntuación: 46.0Sugerencia: 문법과 어순을 고치고 구체적인 정보를 추가하세요. 'in recently'와 'the Korean' 등 표현 오류를 수정해야 합니다. 또한 이유를 말할 때 구체적인 예시(공유 자전거 서비스 이름, 통계, 도시 이름)를 덧붙이면 설득력이 높아집니다. 연결어를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어주세요.
Ejemplo: Yes, I do. Recently, many bike-sharing schemes have been launched in Seoul, making bicycles a convenient option for short trips. For example, the public bike rental service has thousands of docking stations across the city, which has increased cycling popularity.
× No, I didn't. I never had my one bike because I wasn't interested in riding a bike, but I prefer it to watching TV.
✓ No, I didn't. I never had a bike because I wasn't interested in riding one, and I preferred watching TV to riding.
The sentence uses 'my one bike' incorrectly; use 'a bike' or 'one' as a pronoun (Grammar problem type ID 12). Also the contrast is awkward: 'prefer it to watching TV' misuses 'it' (pronoun error) and tense consistency: question asks about childhood, so past tense 'preferred' is appropriate. Suggest replacing 'my one bike' with 'a bike' or 'one', replace 'it' with 'riding', change 'but I prefer it to watching TV' to 'and I preferred watching TV to riding' to show correct comparison and past tense.
× Yes, I do, because in recently there are many shared bikes crews have appeared in the capital of the Korean.
✓ Yes, because recently many shared bike companies have appeared in the capital of Korea.
Multiple errors: 'in recently' is wrong; use 'recently' (adverb) without 'in' (Grammar problem type ID 11). 'shared bikes crews' is awkward and incorrect; use 'shared bike companies' or 'shared bike schemes'. 'have appeared in the capital of the Korean' has a wrong noun phrase and article: use 'the capital of Korea' or 'Korea's capital' (article/noun order; Grammar problem type ID 17/11). Also remove redundant 'I do' in 'Yes, I do' since the following clause suffices. Suggest: 'Yes, because recently many shared bike companies have appeared in the capital of Korea.'