Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct past-tense verbs, and reduce redundancy. Use one or two supporting details with linking words and specific information (when it happened, your age, what happened in the accident, and how you overcame the hesitation). Avoid unrelated phrases (e.g. “pretty small with my parents” and “learn to write properly”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. The first time I rode it, when I was about seven, I fell and scraped my knee, which made me afraid to try again for a few weeks. However, with my parents’ encouragement and practice in the park, I gradually regained confidence and learned to ride properly.

Sugerencia: Make the answer more natural and specific. Give a clear topic sentence, then add two specific supporting details (who uses bikes, why they are popular, and an example location). Use linking words and avoid filler words such as “like”. Correct grammar and prepositions.

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among children and students. One reason is that many neighborhoods have long, quiet roads ideal for cycling, and public parks such as Subara Park are popular places where families go to practise riding and exercise.

× Eventually I'm pretty small with my parents and learn to write properly.

✓ Eventually I was pretty small with my parents and learned to ride properly.

The speaker is describing past events, so verbs must be in the past tense. 'I'm' (I am) is present; change to 'I was'. 'Learn' should be past 'learned'. Also 'write' is incorrect word choice for biking; use 'ride'. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past when narrating past experiences and choose vocabulary that matches the context.

× Eventually I'm pretty small with my parents and learn to write properly.

✓ Eventually I was quite shy with my parents and learned to ride properly.

'Pretty small' is not a natural collocation to express shyness or hesitation. Use an adjective like 'shy' or 'hesitant'. Also 'pretty' as an adverb is informal; 'quite' is a clearer choice. Replace 'write' with 'ride' to match the activity. Ensure adjective choice fits intended meaning.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country, especially in young kids.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country, especially among young kids.

Use 'among' (preposition) with groups of people rather than 'in'. 'Young kids' is fine but the preposition should be 'among' to indicate popularity within that group.

× Of course we do like bikes in my country.

✓ Of course we like bikes in my country.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary for affirmative statements. Remove 'do' to form the natural present simple affirmative: 'we like'. Use 'do' only for emphasis or in questions/negatives.

× We also have like long road so we can practice like which is near around Subara so we can practice riding a bike.

✓ We also have long roads near Subara where we can practice riding bikes.

The original sentence has several issues: unnecessary filler 'like', singular 'road' should be plural 'roads' if general, incorrect 'near around' (redundant), and awkward clause ordering. Use 'near Subara' and 'where we can practice' for clarity. Also change 'a bike' to 'bikes' to match general statement.

× We also have like long road so we can practice like which is near around Subara so we can practice riding a bike.

✓ We also have long roads near Subara where we can practice riding bikes.

The noun 'road' should be plural 'roads' to match the general idea of available places to practice. Also 'a bike' is less appropriate when speaking generally; use 'bikes'. Ensure noun number agrees with general vs. specific reference.

× We also have like long road so we can practice like which is near around Subara so we can practice riding a bike.

✓ We also have long roads near Subara where we can practice riding bikes.

Use the gerund 'riding' after 'practice'. The original repeats 'practice' awkwardly; combine clauses so 'practice riding' is the correct verb + -ing structure. Avoid redundant words.