Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, correct grammar, and add clear linking words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (e.g., who owned it before, why it was special). Avoid redundant phrases and fix tense/word order errors.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. It was an old Emaha Ivzed that my father used before he bought a new one. Because he gave it to me, it was special — I learned to ride on that bike and felt proud whenever I rode it around the neighborhood.

Sugerencia: Complete the sentence and provide a clear reason-then-example structure. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and be specific about who uses bikes and why (cost, traffic, culture). Keep it to two or three sentences max.

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient in heavy traffic. For example, many young people use motorbikes to commute to work or university and to show their personal style.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses the past simple to describe a past possession. Keep as is.

× It was Emaha Ivzed which was firstly used by my father.

✓ It was an Emaha Ivzed that was first used by my father.

The original sentence has awkward word order and incorrect use of 'which' and 'firstly.' Use 'that' for defining clauses referring to things and 'first' instead of 'firstly' to indicate sequence. Also add the article 'an' before the brand name for natural English when the brand name is treated as a countable noun in this context.

× Then when he purchased a brand new bike then he gifted this bike to me and this was so special to me because I have learned riding on this.

✓ Then, when he purchased a brand new bike, he gifted this one to me, and it was very special because I had learned to ride on it.

Multiple issues: remove the repeated 'then'; use past simple consistently for completed past actions ('purchased', 'gifted'); use 'this one' or 'it' instead of repeating 'this bike'; 'so special to me' is acceptable but 'very special' sounds more natural; 'I have learned riding on this' mixes present perfect with past context and incorrect verb form. Use past perfect 'had learned' to indicate the learning happened before being gifted, and use infinitive 'to ride' or 'to ride it' rather than 'riding on this.'

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country as youngsters use bikes as an impression tool and it is also convenient to

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because young people use them as a status symbol, and they are also convenient.

Sentence was cut off; revise to complete idea. Use 'because' instead of 'as' for clearer cause, use 'young people' instead of 'youngsters' for natural tone, use pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition, and replace 'impression tool' with 'status symbol' for natural phrasing. Ensure present simple 'are' and 'use' correctly describe general facts.