Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, correct verb tenses, and add a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and sentence fragments. For example, use past tense consistently for childhood events, replace vague phrases (e.g., “sit out, sit with every”) with clear descriptions, and limit the answer to about 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child, but I enjoyed watching other children ride. For example, my neighbours often held cycling competitions on Saturdays, and I would sit with them to watch because I hadn’t learned to cycle yet.

Sugerencia: Make the answer direct and use clearer, more precise reasons. Remove repetition and unclear phrases (e.g., “day gates”). Use linking words (for example, “because” and “also”) properly and give a specific example or result. Keep to 2–4 sentences and vary vocabulary a little.

Ejemplo: Yes, bicycles are fairly popular in my country because many parents buy them as rewards when children pass exams or reach milestones. Also, community events like Saturday cycling competitions encourage people of all ages to ride.

× No, as a child I never had a bike, but I loved seeing people who ride bicycles.

✓ No, as a child I never had a bike, but I loved seeing people who rode bicycles.

The sentence describes past habitual actions, so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Ride' is present tense; use 'rode' to match 'loved' and the past-time context. Suggestion: maintain past tense for verbs when describing past experiences.

× And as a matter of fact, I had friends who lived in my neighborhood that loved to cycle and their parents got them bicycles and on Saturdays they will come out and do a cycling competition.

✓ And as a matter of fact, I had friends who lived in my neighborhood who loved to cycle; their parents got them bicycles, and on Saturdays they would come out and take part in cycling competitions.

Mixed tenses and modal use: 'will come out' is future-in-past or habitual past, so 'would come out' is appropriate. Use 'who' instead of 'that' for people (relative pronoun). 'Do a cycling competition' is unnatural; 'take part in cycling competitions' or 'compete in cycling races' is clearer. Also make plural consistency: 'competitions'.

× Even though I didn't know how to cycle, I will come out, sit out, sit with every.

✓ Even though I didn't know how to cycle, I would come out and sit with everyone.

This is a past habitual action, so 'would' rather than 'will' is needed. 'Sit out' suggests not participating but 'sit with every' is incorrect: use 'sit with everyone.' 'Everyone' is the correct pronoun. Suggestion: use 'would' for repeated past actions and 'everyone' for referring to all people.

× Yes, bikes are quite popular here in my country because lots of parents get bicycles for their children as a day gates or when especially when they pass exams or for any other reason at that.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular here in my country because many parents get bicycles for their children as a reward for special occasions, especially when they pass exams or for other reasons.

Awkward phrasing and incorrect word 'day gates' (nonsense). 'Lots of' is informal; 'many' is clearer. 'As a reward for special occasions' clarifies intended meaning. Maintain present simple for general truths ('are quite popular,' 'get bicycles').

× And also we also we see people coming out on Saturdays for competition and we and they do this by by cycling competition, which is normal for everybody.

✓ We also see people coming out on Saturdays for competitions, and they do this by taking part in cycling races, which is common for many people.

Repeated words 'and also we also we' and 'by by' are redundant. 'Competition' should be plural 'competitions' for repeated events. 'Do this by cycling competition' is ungrammatical; use 'take part in cycling races.' 'Which is normal for everybody' is too broad; 'common for many people' is more natural. Suggestion: remove redundancies and use appropriate collocations ('take part in', 'cycling races').