Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammar, tense consistency and sentence fluency. Start with one clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g., past simple) and remove repetitions. Be specific about activities and avoid sentence fragments.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a bike from about the age of seven, and it quickly became my prized possession. It wasn't just a toy; riding it gave me my first real sense of freedom, so I rode with my friends every afternoon to explore the streets and nearby parks.

Sugerencia: Make a direct topic sentence answering 'yes' or 'no', then explain with specific reasons and examples using linking words (because, for example, therefore). Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., 'In my perspective' → 'In my view' or 'I think'). Clarify vague phrases like 'huge type of bicycle'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in large cities, because the government has invested in cycling lanes and bike-sharing schemes. For example, many commuters use public rental bikes for short trips, so cycling is a convenient and sustainable option.

× I had a bike when.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence is incomplete and omits the time phrase. The verb 'had' is simple past and correct, but the sentence needs an object/time expression to be grammatical. Provide 'when I was a child' to complete the thought. Suggestion: Always include the time clause after 'when' (e.g., 'when I was a child').

× It wasn't just a toy, it gives me a real a first real sense of freedom.

✓ It wasn't just a toy; it gave me a real sense of freedom.

Mixes past and present tense: 'wasn't' is past but 'gives' is present. Use past tense 'gave' to match. Also contains a duplicated article 'a first real' and extra word 'first'. Remove redundancy and use one article before 'real sense'. Suggestion: Keep verbs in the same tense and avoid duplicated words; write 'gave me a real sense of freedom.'

× I use it with my friends every afternoon exploring about the neighbors.

✓ I used it with my friends every afternoon exploring the neighborhood.

The narrative is in past tense, so 'use' should be 'used'. 'Exploring about the neighbors' is ungrammatical: 'explore' takes a direct object like 'the neighborhood' or 'the neighbors'' houses; 'about' is unnecessary. Also 'neighbors' should be 'neighborhood' for the area. Suggestion: Maintain past tense and use correct object for 'explore' (e.g., 'exploring the neighborhood').

× In my perspective, yes there are because of a sustainable system the government used in the big cities and metropolitan cities.

✓ From my perspective, yes they are, because of the sustainable system the government uses in big metropolitan cities.

Pronoun 'there are' is vague and mismatches 'bikes' (plural); using 'they are' refers clearly to bikes. Tense: 'used' implies past; the intended meaning is current so use 'uses'. Word order and articles need fixing: 'a sustainable system' -> 'the sustainable system' or 'a sustainable system', and 'big cities and metropolitan cities' is redundant—use 'big metropolitan cities'. Suggestion: Refer back to the noun with the correct pronoun, keep verb tense consistent ('uses'), and simplify redundant noun phrases.