Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and organise your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Use past tense consistently for childhood events and avoid repetition. Add a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "so", "and").

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride from my father, and we often cycled together on weekends because he wanted me to be active and confident on the road.

Sugerencia: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and clear linking words. Avoid unclear or incomplete phrases. Be specific about who uses bikes and why (health, convenience, culture). Keep to 2–4 sentences and finish your thought fully.

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many children and adults cycle because it is cheap and healthy, and cycling also creates a sense of community when people ride together on weekends.

× That was my favorite activity when I was a child.

✓ Riding a bike was my favorite activity when I was a child.

Original sentence is understandable but vague: 'That' lacks a clear noun antecedent. Replace with 'Riding a bike' to specify the activity and maintain past tense; this corrects a sentence structure clarity issue and improves cohesion.

× I learned that from my father and I usually do that biking on weekends with my father.

✓ I learned it from my father and I usually go biking with him on weekends.

Errors: 'learned that from' is awkward when referring to an activity (use 'learned it from'), and 'do that biking' is unidiomatic. Use the present participle 'go biking' to express habitual action. Also replace the second 'my father' with 'him' to avoid repetition (pronoun use).

× Yeah, sure. I always see the children who buy their things and also I learned that as a child when I was young.

✓ Yes, I often see children with their own bikes, and I learned to ride when I was young.

Multiple problems: 'buy their things' is vague and ungrammatical for meaning 'own bikes'; 'I always see' is acceptable but 'often see' is more natural. 'I learned that as a child when I was young' is redundant and awkward; use 'I learned to ride when I was young.' This fixes tense and clarity.

× That is, I think, very good for their health and for exercise and also make a community to talk each other from who don't

✓ I think cycling is very good for their health and for exercise, and it also helps create a community where people can talk to each other.

Original has sentence fragments and incorrect verb forms: 'also make a community' lacks subject and proper verb agreement, and 'to talk each other from who don't' is ungrammatical. Provide a clear subject ('it'), correct verb ('helps create'), and proper phrasing 'talk to each other' and 'where people' to express the intended meaning.