Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문장에서 시제와 나이의 일관성이 떨어지고, 불필요한 중복(uh, my my)과 어순 오류가 있습니다. 질문은 어린 시절(when you were a child)에 대한 답변을 요구하므로 실제로 어렸을 때 있었는지 간단히 명확하게 말하고, 추가로 구체적 세부사항(예: 몇 살 때, 어떤 종류의 자전거였는지, 누구에게 배웠는지)을 덧붙이세요. 문장은 최대 5문장으로 유지하고, 연결어(for example, when, because)를 사용해 논리적으로 이어가세요. 또한 망설임 표현(uh)을 줄이고 소유 표현은 자연스럽게 my own 대신 simply “my first bike”처럼 표현하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I got my first bicycle when I was eight years old. It was a small red bike with training wheels, and my father taught me how to ride it in our neighborhood park. Because I practiced every weekend, I became quite confident within a month.

Sugerencia: 의도는 분명하지만 문장이 어색하고 말끝을 흐리며 불완전한 질문(Why to?)을 남깁니다. 이유를 말할 때는 구체적 근거(예: 대중교통 대체, 건강, 환경친화성, 요금, 접근성)를 제시하고 연결어(because, therefore, for example, so)를 사용해 논리를 명확히 하세요. 또한 짧고 완결된 문장으로 구성하고 쉼표나 접속사로 문장 연결을 자연스럽게 하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because many cities have public bike-sharing systems. For example, people can easily borrow bikes from stations and return them anywhere, which makes commuting convenient and cheap. In addition, many citizens choose cycling for exercise and to reduce traffic congestion.

× Yes I did. I had a bike uh, when I was 25 years old uh, it's first time I bought the bike my my own.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was 25 years old; it was the first time I bought a bike on my own.

The student mixes present and past tenses and has awkward phrasing. 'It's first time I bought' is incorrect because the event happened in the past, so past tense and a past-time expression are required: 'it was the first time I bought'. Also 'my my own' is a redundant and incorrect phrasing; correct is 'on my own' or 'by myself'. Combine clauses with appropriate punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past events and use 'on my own' for expressing independence.

× Yes, I think it's popular because every city has a bike system.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular because many cities have bike-sharing systems.

The original sentence uses 'it's popular' which is vague and less natural; the interviewer asked generally about bikes, so 'bikes are popular' matches the subject. Also 'every city' is likely an overgeneralization; use 'many cities' unless the speaker means literally every city. 'A bike system' is unnatural; 'bike-sharing systems' is the common term. Suggestion: Match subject and verb in present simple for general truths and use common collocations like 'bike-sharing system'.

× Uh, people can borrow. Why to?

✓ People can borrow them. Why is that?

'People can borrow' is an incomplete idea without an object — borrow what? Add 'them' referring to bikes. 'Why to?' is ungrammatical in English; to ask for reason, say 'Why is that?' or 'Why?'. Suggestion: Complete the sentence with the object and use proper question structure for asking reasons.