Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words like “umm” and correct tense and article use (e.g. “my family came from” or “my family was”).

Ejemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because my family was quite poor. Instead, I usually walked to school and went shopping on foot, although I sometimes took a bus when it was urgent.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence, then provide two specific reasons with linking words and complete sentences. Remove hesitations and correct comparative structures (e.g. “more affordable than other transport”). Clarify the last point about roads — say whether good or bad and how that affects bike use.

Ejemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country for two main reasons. Firstly, they are more affordable than other forms of transport, so many people can buy them. Secondly, they are very accessible for short trips, although poor road conditions in some areas can make riding less safe.

× Umm, actually I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family come from a very humble background, so they couldn't offer a bike for me.

✓ Umm, actually I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family came from a very humble background, so they couldn't provide a bike for me.

The verb 'come' is in present tense but the context is past; it should be 'came' to match past-tense narration. Also 'offer a bike for me' is unnatural; 'provide a bike for me' or 'buy me a bike' fits better. Suggestion: use past tense verbs consistently when telling past events and choose appropriate verbs ('provide', 'buy').

× Instead I used to go school or shopping by a walk or whenever it was urgent I would go.

✓ Instead I used to walk to school or go shopping, or whenever it was urgent I would go on foot.

The phrase 'go school' is missing the preposition/verb form; English uses 'walk to school' or 'go to school'. 'By a walk' is incorrect; use 'on foot'. Suggestion: use 'walk to' plus destination and replace 'by a walk' with 'on foot'. Maintain past habitual 'used to'.

× Umm yes, I believe bikes are umm, popular in my country because of various reason.

✓ Umm yes, I believe bikes are, um, popular in my country because of various reasons.

The noun 'reason' should be plural 'reasons' when qualified by 'various'. Also slight disfluency 'umm' is fine in speech but keep commas. Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns after quantifiers like 'various'.

× The first and foremost it's it's, it is affordable uh, than any other transportation facilities and also the next thing is umm, its accessibility, although umm, the roads.

✓ First and foremost, it is more affordable than other forms of transportation, and another point is its accessibility, although some roads are a problem.

Multiple issues: missing comparative structure 'more affordable than' (comparison form needed), incorrect phrase 'than any other transportation facilities' (use 'other forms of transportation' or 'modes of transport'), and sentence fragments like 'although the roads' need completion. Suggestion: use 'more + adjective + than' for comparisons, replace 'transportation facilities' with 'forms of transportation', and complete clauses when using 'although' by stating the contrasting idea (e.g., 'although some roads are poor').